鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện: Hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa ngữ pháp (thì, danh động từ, danh từ số nhiều), rút gọn và tránh lặp ý. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại giày, hoàn cảnh) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Ví dụ cụ thể: nêu loại giày bạn thường mua và một lý do rõ ràng cho tần suất mua.

範例: Yes, I do. I usually buy shoes about once a month because I go out a lot for work and social events, which wears them out quickly. For example, I often replace my casual sneakers every month because I walk a lot and they lose their support.

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời ngắn gọn và rõ ràng, sửa cấu trúc câu và dùng từ chính xác (e.g. 'both' không phù hợp). Giải thích cụ thể về ưu và nhược điểm khi mua trực tuyến và kết luận rõ ràng. Dùng liên từ như 'however' hoặc 'therefore' để liên kết ý.

範例: Yes, I have, but I prefer buying shoes in person. Online shopping is convenient, however it's hard to judge fit and comfort, so I often go to stores to try them on before buying.

建議: Cải thiện: Sử dụng câu chủ đề xác định và số liệu chính xác (ghi đúng đơn vị tiền tệ). Sửa lỗi từ vựng (soups → shoes), ngữ pháp và dùng cụm từ hợp lý để nói về chất lượng và khoảng giá. Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể về loại giày và lý do chi tiêu.

範例: I usually spend about 100,000 to 200,000 Vietnamese dong on shoes because I prioritise durability and comfort. For instance, I buy more expensive running shoes that last longer and provide better support.

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời ngắn gọn với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, chỉnh ngữ pháp (thì, số nhiều), tránh nói lắp. Bổ sung lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ cá nhân; dùng liên từ như 'because' và 'for example' để liên kết câu.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often take part in outdoor activities. For example, I usually wear sports shoes which give better support and cushioning for long walks, and they also come in bright colours I like.

× Like I'm a person who really pay attention about buying shoes.

✓ I am a person who really pays attention to buying shoes.

Use 'pay attention to' not 'pay attention about'; also subject-verb agreement 'I...pay' should be 'I...pay s' because the relative clause subject is 'who' referring to 'person' (third person singular). Use 'to' as the correct preposition.

× So I buy shoes once a month because I always like go out.

✓ So I buy shoes once a month because I always like going out.

After 'like' when referring to general preference use the -ing form: 'like going out'. Using the base verb 'go' is incorrect here.

× So it is make my shoes easily old, so I need to buy a new one every month.

✓ So my shoes wear out easily, so I need to buy new ones every month.

'Make my shoes easily old' is ungrammatical. Use 'wear out' to express becoming unusable. Also plural agreement: 'shoes' -> 'new ones' not 'a new one' when referring to shoes in general.

× Yes, but I chose both shoes online one tab because you know that, uh, buying shoes online easily gullible and it's really hard to me to choose the size of the shoes because it will not suitable for your foot.

✓ Yes, but I chose both online and in stores because buying shoes online can be risky, and it's really hard for me to choose the right size because they may not fit your feet.

Many issues: 'chose' wrong tense (should be 'choose' or 'chose' depending on meaning) and unclear phrase 'one tab'. 'Buying shoes online easily gullible' is incorrect; use 'can be risky' or 'you can be easily misled'. 'hard to me' should be 'hard for me'. 'it will not suitable' should be 'they may not fit'. Ensure plural agreement 'feet' and pronoun consistency.

× So I also choose go out and buy shoes offline.

✓ So I also choose to go out and buy shoes in physical stores.

Use 'choose to do something' structure, and 'offline' is better expressed as 'in physical stores' or 'in-store'. 'go out and buy' needs 'to'.

× I can say that is a large amount of the money when I spend on soups because I'm really emphasized about the quality of the shoes.

✓ I would say that I spend a large amount of money on shoes because I'm really concerned about the quality.

'a large amount of the money' is awkward; use 'a large amount of money' or 'a lot of money'. 'spend on soups' is a typo for 'shoes'. 'emphasized about' is incorrect; use 'concerned about' or 'particular about'.

× I want to buy the shoes that have a long term quality.

✓ I want to buy shoes that are long-lasting.

'have a long term quality' is unnatural; use 'long-lasting' or 'of long-term quality'. Avoid unnecessary articles 'the' before plural general noun.

× So I will spend 100 or 200,000 Vietnam ground.

✓ So I will spend 100,000 or 200,000 Vietnamese dong.

Currency name is 'Vietnamese dong'. Number order should be consistent: '100,000 or 200,000'. 'ground' is incorrect word.

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

✓ Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. (Included for completeness.)

× I will prefer comfortable shoes because I could say that as a person who frequently going out to top part in the outdoor activities.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because, as a person who frequently goes out and takes part in outdoor activities, I need comfortable shoes.

'will prefer' is unnecessary future; use simple present 'prefer'. 'could say that as a person who frequently going out' should be 'as a person who frequently goes out'. 'to top part' likely meant 'take part' so use 'take part in outdoor activities'.

× So I need a comfortable shoes such as the sports shoes and in addition, I think that sport shoes will have more, uh, brightly colored shoes than the fashionable shoes.

✓ So I need comfortable shoes such as sports shoes, and in addition, I think that sports shoes are often more brightly colored than fashionable shoes.

Article/noun agreement: use 'comfortable shoes' (no 'a' with plural). 'the sports shoes' -> 'sports shoes'. 'sport shoes' -> 'sports shoes'. Avoid repeating 'shoes' unnecessarily and use comparative 'more brightly colored' correctly.