鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接的で内容も理解しやすいですが、文法ミス（冠詞や語順）、冗長な表現、繋ぎの語の使い方が改善できます。具体的には “a pair of shoes” のような冠詞の使い方を直し、頻度を明確にする語（e.g. “once a year”）を先に述べ、理由や習慣を説明する際は接続詞（e.g. “because”, “so”, “for”）を適切に使って文をつなげると自然です。また、言い換えや具体例（どのような旅行の時か）を一つ加えると内容が豊かになります。

範例: I'm not very interested in fashion, so I usually buy a pair of shoes about once a year. I tend to buy new shoes before a long trip because I like to wear them at home for a week or two to make sure they're comfortable.

建議: 意図は明確ですが、文が断片的で同じ理由を2回に分けて述べているため冗長に感じられます。接続詞や理由の述べ方を一文にまとめ、結果を示す表現（e.g. “so” や “then”）を使うと論理的になります。また、語彙を少し広げて“fit”の前に“they”や“they don't fit me”など主語を明示すると自然です。

範例: No, I haven't. I prefer trying shoes on in person because if I buy them online they might not fit properly, and it would be difficult to return them.

建議: 金額は明確ですが、理由の説明が不自然で文法的に誤りがあります（“how well to fit to my” は不正確）。理由は簡潔に“because I don't spend much on shoes”や“because I prioritize comfort over price”のように言い換え、金額に言及した後で具体的な理由を一つ加えると説得力が増します。

範例: I usually spend about ¥10,000 on a pair of shoes, because I don't like to spend much on footwear and I mainly look for a comfortable fit rather than an expensive brand.

建議: 意見は明確ですが、文法（主語と動詞の一致、代名詞の使い方）を改善する必要があります。冗長なフレーズを避け、一つの強い理由と具体例（例えば長時間歩くときなど）を添えると良いです。また、接続詞で理由を自然につなげてください。

範例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they don't make my feet tired, especially when I'm walking for long periods. For example, I always choose cushioned sneakers for sightseeing trips.

× Therefore I usually buy pair of shoes like once a year.

✓ Therefore I usually buy a pair of shoes about once a year.

The noun 'pair' is singular and requires an article 'a' before it. Also 'like once a year' is informal; 'about once a year' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'a pair' for singular and place an article before singular countable nouns.

× Umm, usually I get them before I travel and for two weeks I wear them in order to get used to.

✓ Umm, usually I get them before I travel and wear them for two weeks to get used to them.

The verb phrase 'get used to' requires an object (them) and the structure 'in order to get used to' should be followed by the object. Also word order 'for two weeks I wear them' is awkward; place duration after the verb: 'wear them for two weeks.' Suggestion: use 'get used to them' and put duration after the verb.

× No I haven't because every time I purchase a pair of shoes I definitely want to try them at least once.

✓ No, I haven't, because every time I buy a pair of shoes I definitely want to try them on at least once.

The present tense verb 'purchase' is correct but 'buy' is more natural here; main issue is missing particle 'on' after 'try' when referring to clothing. Also punctuation added for clarity. Suggestion: use 'try them on' for shoes and keep consistent simple present 'buy.'

× Because if you realize after buying them online and then not fit at all.

✓ Because if you realize after buying them online that they do not fit at all, it is difficult to return them.

The original is a fragment lacking a main clause and proper connector 'that' and verb agreement. It should express a full idea: 'if ... that ... , it ...' Suggestion: complete the sentence with a main clause and use 'do not fit' for negative present.

× Well, I think it's around ¥10,000 because I don't usually spend my money on shoes and I just want to know how well to fit to my.

✓ Well, I think it's around ¥10,000 because I don't usually spend my money on shoes, and I just want to know how well they will fit me.

Pronoun and verb issues: 'how well to fit to my' is incorrect. Use 'they' to refer to shoes and 'fit me' to indicate the object. Also 'will fit' or 'fit' suits context. Suggestion: use correct object pronoun after 'fit' and include the subject for clarity.

× Well, I definitely choose comfortable shoes because these shoes does not have negative impact on me.

✓ Well, I definitely choose comfortable shoes because these shoes do not have a negative impact on me.

Subject 'these shoes' is plural, so the verb must be 'do' (do not) not 'does not.' Also include the article 'a' before 'negative impact.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and include articles where needed.

× I mean they are not tiring me at all.

✓ I mean they do not tire me at all.

The adjective/participle 'tiring' used with 'me' is awkward here. The correct causative structure is 'they do not tire me.' Suggestion: use active verb 'tire' with proper auxiliary for negation.