鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then add one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar (plural forms, verb tenses) and linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I do enjoy buying shoes, and I usually buy a new pair once a year. I often buy shoes before Chinese New Year because I like to wear something new for celebrations.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then explain one or two reasons with coherent linking. Correct sentence structure and vocabulary (e.g., "entered our address" and "delivered to our house"). Avoid fragmented sentences. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is more convenient than going to shops. I simply enter my address and the shoes are delivered to my house, which saves time.

建議: Answer with a clear amount and currency, then explain why with one specific reason. Use correct quantifiers and tense, and avoid repeating phrases. Include linking words like "because" or "so" and specify a time frame (e.g., "usually").

範例: I usually spend about 800–900 yuan on a good pair of shoes because I prefer high-quality footwear that lasts a long time.

建議: State your preference clearly in one sentence, then give a specific reason in another. Use correct grammar and clearer comparisons (e.g., "fashionable shoes"), and avoid unclear phrases like "wear long type" or "fashion naval." Use linking words such as "because" or "although."

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often walk a lot and need support. Although fashionable shoes look nice, they are usually less practical for daily use.

× I like wearing shoes because different shoes is suitable to difference occasions and I will buy the shoes when Chinese New Year coming soon and I will buy it every years.

✓ I like wearing shoes because different shoes are suitable for different occasions, and I will buy shoes when Chinese New Year comes soon; I buy them every year.

Errors: 'different shoes is' incorrect subject-verb agreement and plural form; 'difference occasions' wrong word choice and plural; 'when Chinese New Year coming soon' incorrect verb form and word order; 'I will buy it every years' wrong pronoun and plural/tense. Suggestions: Use plural noun with plural verb (shoes are), use 'different' not 'difference', use 'suitable for' with a preposition, use correct present simple for habitual actions ('I buy them every year') or 'I will buy' for future one-time, and use 'them' to refer to plural 'shoes'.

× I have bought shoes online because it is more convenient than the shops and we just wrote our address. It can't. Took it to our house.

✓ I have bought shoes online because it is more convenient than shopping in stores; we just write our address and it is delivered to our house.

Errors: 'we just wrote our address' mixes past and present; 'It can't. Took it to our house.' is ungrammatical and fragments. Use present perfect for experience ('I have bought'), use simple present for general steps ('we just write our address'), and use passive or active correct structure for delivery ('it is delivered to our house').

× I spend 800 or 900 to buy the shoes because in my opinion I think we need to buy the high quality shoes that can just stay long time.

✓ I spend 800 or 900 to buy shoes because, in my opinion, we need to buy high-quality shoes that can last a long time.

Errors: 'spend 800 or 900 to buy the shoes' acceptable but article 'the' unnecessary; 'in my opinion I think' is redundant; 'buy the high quality shoes' article and adjective order; 'stay long time' wrong verb and missing article. Suggestions: Use 'high-quality' as a compound adjective before noun, use 'last a long time' for durability, and avoid redundant phrases.

× I I prefer to comfortable shoes because we can't wear long type and compared to the fashion naval shoes it just can wear to the occasion that is high class.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because we can't wear them for a long time, and compared to fashionable shoes, they can only be worn to high-class occasions.

Errors: 'I I' duplication; 'prefer to comfortable shoes' incorrect verb pattern — use 'prefer' + noun; 'we can't wear long type' unclear and missing pronoun and preposition; 'fashion naval shoes' wrong word choice; 'it just can wear to the occasion that is high class' wrong subject and word order. Suggestions: Use 'prefer comfortable shoes' without 'to', use 'wear them for a long time' for duration, use 'fashionable' for adjective meaning stylish, and use 'they can only be worn to high-class occasions' passive/subject alignment.