鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Avoid redundancy and filler words like 'uh'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often because there are many styles available nowadays. For example, I like running shoes since I often go jogging, so I usually buy them at the shopping mall where I can try them on.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, try to avoid repeating words like 'shoes' unnecessarily and provide a clearer reason.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online quite often because it's more convenient. Moreover, online stores often offer discount codes, which help me save money on my purchases.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then explain your preferences with specific details and linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'with the benefit'.

範例: I usually don't spend a lot on shoes because some are too expensive for me. Instead, I prefer buying affordable shoes that are comfortable for walking and running.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I walk and run a lot every day. Therefore, comfort is more important to me than style.

× it's so many shoe styles today and I'd like to work.

✓ there are so many shoe styles today and I'd like to work.

The phrase 'it's so many shoe styles' is incorrect because 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is', which is singular, but 'many shoe styles' is plural. The correct form is 'there are so many shoe styles' to agree with the plural noun.

× We have several shoes and beautiful shoes.

✓ We have several beautiful shoes.

The phrase 'several shoes and beautiful shoes' is redundant and awkward. Combining them as 'several beautiful shoes' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× it's very often that I bought the shoes because it's so many shoe styles today and I'd like to work.

✓ I often buy shoes because there are so many shoe styles today and I'd like to work.

The phrase 'it's very often that I bought the shoes' incorrectly uses past tense 'bought' when referring to a habitual action. The present tense 'I often buy shoes' is appropriate for habitual actions.

× Of course I did and I did it often because shopping online is easier to buy stuff, especially shoes, because online shopping we have promotion code to discount shoes.

✓ Of course I do, and I do it often because shopping online is easier to buy stuff, especially shoes, because online shopping has promotion codes to discount shoes.

The use of past tense 'did' is incorrect when referring to habitual actions. Present tense 'do' is appropriate. Also, 'we have promotion code' should be 'has promotion codes' to agree with singular subject 'online shopping' and plural 'codes'.

× because online shopping we have promotion code to discount shoes.

✓ because online shopping has promotion codes to discount shoes.

The phrase 'we have promotion code' is incorrect because 'promotion code' should be plural 'promotion codes' and the subject 'online shopping' requires 'has' instead of 'have'.

× some shoes is so expensive and too expensive I can't afford it.

✓ some shoes are so expensive and too expensive I can't afford them.

The subject 'some shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'shoes'.

× I like to buy the shoes with the benefit and it's comfortable to walk and run with so I buy that you not too high.

✓ I like to buy shoes that are comfortable to walk and run in, so I buy ones that are not too high.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and awkward phrasing. 'The shoes with the benefit' is vague, and 'I buy that you not too high' is incorrect. Using 'shoes that are comfortable' and 'ones that are not too high' clarifies meaning and corrects pronoun use.

× so I prefer comfortable shoe more than fashionable shoes so it's make me easy.

✓ so I prefer comfortable shoes more than fashionable shoes because they make it easier for me.

'Comfortable shoe' should be plural 'comfortable shoes' to match 'fashionable shoes'. Also, 'it's make me easy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'they make it easier for me' to express the intended meaning.