唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答立场明确，也提供了例子，但有多处语法和搭配错误。“I enjoying”应改为“I enjoy”，“other things”与问题不符，应改为“other people singing”或“other singers”，“different various emotions”重复且不自然，可以说“different emotions”。“make me move”不能准确表达悲伤，建议改为“make me feel emotional”或“make me feel sad”。内容可以更直接，并控制在2—3句内。

範例: Absolutely. I enjoy listening to other people sing because different voices, lyrics, and melodies can evoke different emotions. For example, upbeat pop songs cheer me up, while emotional ballads help me relax.

建議: 回答直接，细节也比较具体，包括专业、学习时间和成绩。不过，“I have learned in university for two years”表达不自然，应改为“I have been taking singing classes at university for two years”或“I studied singing at university for two years”。“got A grades in the exam”可以改为“got an A in my final exam”。建议使用连接词使信息更连贯。

範例: Yes, I have. I’ve been taking singing classes at university for two years because I’m majoring in music performance. I worked hard and got an A in my final exam, so I was really proud of myself.

建議: 观点和原因是清楚的，但“seeing”应为“singing”，“say in public”应为“sing in public”。“Sing together. Helps me...”是残句，应改为“Sing together, which helps me...”或“It helps me...”。“relieve my pressure”不自然，建议说“relieve my stress”，并补充冠词，如“a long day at school”。

範例: Absolutely. I enjoy singing, although I’m too shy to sing in front of a large audience. I usually sing karaoke with my close friends because singing together helps me relax and relieve the stress of a long day at school.

建議: 回答包含学习时间、团队经历和比赛结果，内容方向正确，但表达不够清晰。“learned about how to sing”应改为“learned to sing”，“Charles”很可能是“choir”，“in that that team”有重复和语法错误。可以用“While I was in the choir, we rehearsed every morning”表达，并用“Eventually”连接比赛结果。

範例: Yes, I did. I learned to sing in primary school as a member of the school choir, where we rehearsed every morning. Eventually, we entered a singing competition and won first prize, which was a memorable experience for me.

建議: 答案没有回答“想为谁唱歌”，而是重复了上一题关于学习唱歌和比赛的内容，因此内容相关性较低。首先应直接回答对象，例如“my family”或“my close friends”，然后说明原因并提供一个具体场景。“school joy”应为“school choir”，“I take part”也应改为过去式“I took part”。

範例: I’d like to sing for my family, especially my parents. They have always supported my interest in music, so I’d love to perform a song for them at a family gathering. I think it would be a meaningful way to show my appreciation.

建議: 回答有明确观点，也进行了对比，内容基本切题。“so may find it annoying”需要主语，应改为“so they may find it annoying”。“a big fan of seeing”中的“seeing”应为“singing”。“lift my mood up”更自然的说法是“lift my mood”或“cheer me up”。建议使用“However”连接转折，并避免重复使用“it”。

範例: Yes, I think singing can make people happy, although it depends on the individual. Some people may find it annoying if they don’t enjoy music; however, singing always cheers me up and gives me more energy. It is also a good way to reduce stress.

× I enjoying listening to other things because I think different lyrics and melodies will produce different various emotions to me.

✓ I enjoy listening to other things because I think different lyrics and melodies will produce different emotions in me.

情态或助动结构后才使用动词的 -ing 形式；这里主语是 I，通常现在时应使用动词原形 enjoy。不能说 “I enjoying”。

× different various emotions

✓ different emotions

different 和 various 都表示“不同的、多种的”，同时使用会造成重复。保留其中一个即可。

× will produce different various emotions to me

✓ will produce different emotions in me

表示某种情绪在某人心中产生时，通常使用介词 in，而不是 to。

× I have learned in university for two years and finally I have got A grades in the exam.

✓ I studied at university for two years and finally got an A in the exam.

这里描述的是已经完成的学习经历和考试结果，应使用一般过去时 studied 和 got。叙述单次考试成绩时，通常说 got an A，而不是 got A grades。

× I have learned in university for two years

✓ I studied at university for two years

表示在大学学习时，通常使用 at university，而不是 in university。

× I have got A grades in the exam

✓ I got an A in the exam

这里说的是一次考试中的一个成绩，因此应使用单数形式 an A，而不是复数 grades。

× Sing together. Helps me relax and relieve my pressure from long day at school.

✓ Singing together helps me relax and relieve my pressure after a long day at school.

“Helps me...”缺少明确的主语，不能单独构成完整句子。将 Sing together 改为动名词短语 Singing together，作为主语，句子结构就完整了。

× from long day at school

✓ after a long day at school

day 是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词 a。此外，表示“经过漫长的一天后”时，after 比 from 更合适。

× When I was in primary school ... that team will always have a rehearsal in the morning.

✓ When I was in primary school, the team always had rehearsals in the morning.

主句描述的是小学时期的习惯，应使用过去时 had，而不是将来时 will have。

× the team will always have a rehearsal in the morning

✓ the team always had rehearsals in the morning

这里描述团队经常进行的活动，通常使用复数 rehearsals，表示多次排练。

× I take part. I took part in a school joy and later we attended a competition.

✓ I took part in a school choir, and later we attended a competition.

后文使用 attended 和 won，叙述的是过去经历，因此应使用过去时 took part，而不是现在时 take part。

× Finally, we won the first prize of it.

✓ Finally, we won first prize in the competition.

表示在比赛中获奖时，通常使用 in the competition，而不是 of it。英语中也常说 win first prize，不需要 the。

× Some people don't enjoy singing so may find it annoying

✓ Some people don't enjoy singing, so they may find it annoying.

so 后面的分句需要明确的主语。补充代词 they 后，两个分句之间的连接才完整。