唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. “I do”). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘relaxed’ and ‘de-stress’).

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing. For example, I often go to karaoke with friends because singing helps me relax and relieve stress, and it’s a fun way to socialize.

建議: Organize answer with a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Use past tense correctly and include linking words. Be specific about what you learned or how it helped you.

範例: Yes. I learned to sing in third grade when I joined the school singing club. During that time, my teacher taught me basic techniques like breathing and pitch control, which made singing more enjoyable.

建議: Answer directly and avoid filler phrases. Use one topic sentence and then add a specific reason with linking words (e.g. ‘because’). Correct phrasing: ‘I want to sing for my family to thank them.’

範例: I would like to sing for my family because I want to thank them for their love and support, and singing at family gatherings would make them happy.

建議: Keep it natural and slightly more specific: state your opinion, then give a clear example or reason with linking words. Avoid repeating the same words (e.g. ‘happiness’) too often.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For instance, when someone sings at a family gathering it lifts the mood and creates warm memories, so I hope to do that for my family one day.

建議: Make your answer smoother and more grammatically correct. Use linking words to compare live and recorded singing, and give a specific example of what makes live singing special.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially live. For example, concerts feel more emotional than recordings because the performers’ expression and the audience atmosphere create a powerful experience.

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Correct phrasing: ‘I follow YouTube channels’ and express future intention clearly.

範例: No, I haven’t taken a formal class, but I follow several YouTube channels that teach singing techniques. If I get the chance, I would like to attend a class to improve my skills.

× I do like singing.

✓ I like singing.

Redundant use of auxiliary 'do' in a simple present affirmative sentence. Use plain present tense 'I like' for habitual preferences.

× I always go to karaoke with my friends during the time of singing.

✓ I always go to karaoke with my friends to sing.

Awkward phrase 'during the time of singing'. Use the infinitive 'to sing' to express purpose and simplify the sentence.

× I could feel relaxed and get rid of the pressures of the stress and just engage in singing.

✓ I feel relaxed and get rid of the stress by singing.

Unnecessary modal 'could' for habitual action and redundant words 'pressures of the stress'. Simplify to present simple for habitual effects and use 'the stress' as a general noun. Use 'by singing' to show how.

× Yes I have learned how to sing when I was in grade 3 in the elementary school I joined the the singing clubs and have some fun time learning singing and teachers like taught me a lot.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in grade 3. In elementary school I joined the singing club and had fun learning to sing; the teachers taught me a lot.

Mixing present perfect with a specific past time ('when I was in grade 3') is incorrect; use simple past 'learned'. Also fix article use ('the singing clubs' -> 'the singing club' or 'a singing club') and verb forms: 'had fun', 'learning to sing', 'taught me'. Split into clearer sentences.

× I have a lot of people want to sing for, but especially my families.

✓ There are many people I want to sing for, especially my family.

Word order and pronoun use are incorrect. Use 'There are many people I want to sing for' or 'I want to sing for many people'. 'Families' should be 'family' when referring to one's family as a group.

× I hope I could sing for them and to thank for their love and their tolerance to me.

✓ I hope I can sing for them to thank them for their love and patience with me.

Use 'can' for present/future ability or hope rather than 'could'. Remove redundant 'to' before 'thank'. Use 'thank them' and 'patience with me' (not 'tolerance to me').

× I always feel happiness when seeing someone singing to someone or I sing to someone.

✓ I always feel happy when I see someone singing to someone else or when I sing to someone.

Use adjective 'happy' not noun 'happiness' after 'feel'. Use consistent clause structure 'when I see' and 'when I sing'. Add 'someone else' for clarity.

× So I hope someday I could sing a song and bring happiness to my family in some gathering.

✓ So I hope someday I can sing a song and bring happiness to my family at a gathering.

Use 'can' for hopeful future ability. 'In some gathering' is unnatural; use 'at a gathering'.

× I do enjoy listen to others singing.

✓ I do enjoy listening to others sing.

After 'enjoy' use the gerund 'listening' not base verb 'listen'. Also 'others sing' is natural or 'other people's singing'.

× I really like to go to concert and always listen in life.

✓ I really like to go to concerts and always listen live.

Plural 'concerts' needed for general preference. 'Listen in life' is incorrect; use 'listen live' to mean live performances.

× That was so different when you listen on the mobile phone on TV.

✓ It's very different from listening on a mobile phone or on TV.

Use 'different from' to compare, and correct prepositions: 'on a mobile phone' or 'on TV'. Also keep present tense for general statement.

× The live singing was so touching.

✓ Live singing is so touching.

Use present simple for general opinions. Remove definite article 'The' unless referring to a specific performance.

× No, I haven't ever taken a single class but I do subscribe some YouTube channel which taught you how to sing.

✓ No, I haven't ever taken a single class, but I subscribe to some YouTube channels that teach you how to sing.

Use 'subscribe to' and plural 'channels' for generalization. Present simple 'teach' matches ongoing content; 'taught' (past) is wrong. Maintain present perfect for 'haven't taken'.

× But I hope someday I have it. If I have a chance I would attend one.

✓ But I hope to take one someday. If I have the chance, I will attend one.

Use 'hope to' + verb for intention. Conditional: use 'if I have the chance' then 'I will attend' (first conditional) rather than 'I would attend' which suggests unreal condition.