唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more coherent and focused: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid unrelated words (e.g. 'I like to swim') unless they support your point. Reduce hesitations and repetitive phrases. Aim for 3–4 concise sentences with varied vocabulary (e.g. 'relax', 'unwind', 'enjoy').

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy singing, especially at karaoke in Korea, because it helps me relax and forget daily stresses. For example, when I sing familiar songs with friends I feel more confident and cheerful. I sing even though I am not a professional; it is mainly a way to unwind.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer followed by concise supporting detail and avoid contradictory statements. Explain briefly how you practice (e.g. imitation, watching tutorials) and use linking words like 'however' or 'instead'. Keep sentences short and specific.

範例: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons. Instead, I practice by listening closely to recordings and imitating the singers. This informal practice helps me cope with stress and improves my confidence when I sing with friends.

建議: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a specific image or detail. Avoid filling words ('uh', 'you know') and repeat words. Mentioning the context (wedding) and the intended effect (romantic, memorable) is good—tighten the phrasing.

範例: I would like to sing for my girlfriend at our wedding. I think a simple romantic song performed live would make the day more personal and memorable for her.

建議: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Reduce repetition and hesitations. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas and speak more fluently.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can create happiness because it helps people share memories. For example, friends often sing together at reunions, and these songs trigger shared memories and make the event enjoyable.

建議: The student's response is missing: they gave no spoken answer (the transcript shows feedback instead). Always answer directly with a topic sentence and one supporting detail. Say who you like to listen to and why, and keep it concise.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially my friends at karaoke, because their performances are fun and create a lively atmosphere. I also like listening to professional singers to learn new techniques.

建議: Give a full sentence answer and add one brief detail. Avoid one-word responses. If you haven't, say so and explain why; if you have, say when and what you learned. Use linking words if you add details.

範例: No, I haven't taken a singing class; I usually teach myself by listening to music and copying singers. Alternatively: Yes, I took a short community singing class last year, and it taught me basic breathing and pitch control.

× I like to sing. And I'm currently living in Korea and they have a lot of karaoke and I usually go there and then I, I'm not good at singing, but I like singing and I can sing all the songs so that I to relax and yeah, just to like escape from the current world.

✓ I like to sing. I'm currently living in Korea and there are a lot of karaoke places; I usually go there. I'm not good at singing, but I like it and I can sing many songs to relax and to escape from the current world.

Run-on and repeated pronouns aside, the main issue is incorrect or awkward use of gerunds and infinitives (Verb + -ing form). 'I like singing' and 'I like to sing' are both possible, but mixing forms and adding 'I to relax' is ungrammatical. Use 'to relax' or 'for relaxing' consistently. Also replace 'they have a lot of karaoke' with correct existential expression 'there are a lot of karaoke places' to match meaning and countability.

× Uh, honestly, I haven't learned how to sing. I just listen to music and then I follow and how they sing.

✓ Honestly, I haven't learned how to sing. I just listen to music and then I follow how they sing.

The sentence had unnecessary conjunction 'and' before 'how they sing' and mixed present simple ('I just listen') with present perfect correctly. The primary error is sentence structure causing tense awkwardness. Removing the extra 'and' and keeping present simple for habitual action ('I just listen... then I follow') is correct.

× Well, actually singing is not a perfection and it's not a hobby. It's just the way I, I used to cope with my stress.

✓ Well, actually singing is not about perfection and it's not a hobby; it's just how I cope with my stress.

'Not a perfection' is incorrect collocation; use 'not about perfection'. 'Used to cope' implies a past habit — but the student means a current coping method, so use present 'cope'. This fixes verb tense and overall sentence structure.

× Uh, I want to sing for my girlfriend, maybe, you know, in in our wedding so that ** *** can have a romantic wedding and she can remember the day her whole life.

✓ I want to sing for my girlfriend, maybe at our wedding so that we can have a romantic ceremony and she can remember the day for her whole life.

Pronoun placeholders ('** ***') are incorrect; replace with 'we' to refer to both partners. Also 'in in' is duplication and preposition 'at our wedding' is more idiomatic. Add 'for' in 'remember the day for her whole life' to complete the expression.

× Yes, I, I think yeah, it can bring happy memories to people.

✓ Yes, I think it can bring happy memories to people.

The extra fillers 'I, I think yeah' are disfluent but not grammatical errors; main adjustment is removing redundant words. No adjective/adverb error beyond wordiness; corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct.

× Uh, I, that's why a lot of people they sing when they meet with their friends, like on a like reunion, they use, they, they sing with their friends together, like the son.

✓ That's why many people sing when they meet their friends, for example at reunions; they sing together with their friends and can relate songs to memories.

This sentence has redundancy ('a lot of people they'), filler words, and unclear phrases ('like the son'). Fix subject duplication, choose correct preposition ('at reunions'), and clarify meaning: people sing together and associate songs with memories.