唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons. Avoid filler words and grammar errors (e.g., use "because" not "'cause", and correct word order). Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" when appropriate.

範例: No, I don't really enjoy singing because I feel my voice is quite deep and doesn't suit songs I like. As a result, I usually only sing privately, for example when I'm in the shower.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Provide a brief specific detail about what you learned or how long you studied to add content.

範例: Yes, I have. I attended a music school for two years and took weekly singing lessons, where I learned basic vocal techniques and breathing exercises.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific example. Correct phrasing (e.g., "I prefer to sing only for myself") and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases like "our people."

範例: I prefer to sing only for myself because I feel self-conscious when others listen. However, I would sing for close family members or good friends on special occasions.

建議: Start with a clear opinion and then give a specific reason and example. Use correct connectors ("it depends on") and avoid hesitation. Be concise and use relevant vocabulary (e.g., "festive songs").

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness, but it depends on the song and the context. For example, singing festive songs like Christmas carols on New Year's Eve can create joy for relatives and friends.

建議: Make a direct statement and give one clear specific example. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., "feel myself enjoyable", "see people who think"). Use linking words like "for example" and accurate vocabulary such as "buskers" or "street performers."

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because good singers can be very moving. For example, I often stop to listen to street performers at the metro station because their music brightens my day.

建議: Respond clearly and explain briefly why, using correct grammar and avoidance of fillers. If you might consider it in future, state that with a reason. Keep answers to one or two concise sentences.

範例: No, I haven't taken singing classes and I never felt the need to. However, I might consider lessons in the future to improve my confidence and technique.

× No, I do not like singing 'cause I think what my voice sounds very heavy and not feminine.

✓ No, I do not like singing because I think my voice sounds very heavy and not feminine.

The phrase 'what my voice sounds' is incorrect structure. Use 'my voice sounds' to link subject and complement. Also use 'because' (formal) instead of colloquial ''cause'. Suggestion: say 'my voice sounds very heavy and not feminine.' Keep pronoun 'my' before 'voice' and remove 'what'.

× And only time that I can sing, it's in the shower.

✓ And the only time I can sing is in the shower.

Word order and articles are incorrect. Use 'the only time' and omit the extra 'it's'. Keep present simple 'can sing' for ability. Suggestion: 'the only time I can sing is in the shower.'

× Yes, I have 'cause, uh, I went to music school and I must, uh, must go to sing lessons.

✓ Yes, I have, because I went to music school and I had to go to singing lessons.

Mix of tenses and modal misuse: 'have' (present perfect) needs an object or continuation; ''cause' should be 'because'. 'Must' with past event is incorrect – use 'had to' for past obligation. 'Sing lessons' should be 'singing lessons' (verb+ing as noun). Suggestion: 'I went to music school and I had to attend singing lessons.'

× Actually, I can think only by myself 'cause I don't like when our people listen when I am singing.

✓ Actually, I can only think to myself because I don't like it when people listen while I am singing.

Problems: 'by myself' vs 'to myself' for thinking internally; 'our people' is unclear—use 'people' or 'other people'; 'don't like when' should be 'don't like it when'; use 'while' for simultaneous actions. Suggestion: 'I can only think to myself because I don't like it when people listen while I am singing.'

× Uh, anyways, I can sing to my relatives or my close people.

✓ Anyway, I can sing for my relatives or close friends.

Use 'anyway' not 'anyways'. 'Sing to' can be 'sing for' when performing. 'My close people' is unnatural; use 'close friends' or 'family'. Suggestion: 'I can sing for my relatives or close friends.'

× I think yes, but it depends about what, uh, music do you listen and what do you think actually.

✓ I think so, but it depends on what music you listen to and what you think.

Use 'so' for short agreement. 'Depends on' not 'depends about'. Word order must be declarative: 'what music you listen to' and 'what you think'. Remove filler 'actually'. Suggestion: 'It depends on what music you listen to and what you think.'

× So maybe if you're singing like a Christmas song on the night, uh, on the New year night, I think you can bring, uh, happiness to your relatives and close people.

✓ So maybe if you sing a Christmas song on New Year's Eve, you can bring happiness to your relatives and close people.

Use simple present for general condition 'if you sing'. 'Like a Christmas song' unnecessary; 'on the night' should be 'on New Year's Eve'. Use possessive 'New Year's Eve'. Keep 'close people' -> 'close family' or 'close friends' if preferable. Suggestion: 'If you sing a Christmas song on New Year's Eve, you can bring happiness to your relatives and close family.'

× I do because, uh, we have people who can sing very beautiful and I, uh, can feel myself enjoyable when I, uh, hear someone singing, maybe at the streets when I go to the metro station and see people who think.

✓ I do because we have people who can sing very beautifully, and I feel happy when I hear someone singing, maybe on the street when I go to the metro station and see people performing.

'Sing very beautiful' should be 'sing very beautifully' (adverb). 'Feel myself enjoyable' is incorrect; say 'feel happy' or 'enjoy myself'. 'At the streets' -> 'on the street'. 'See people who think' unclear; likely 'people performing' or 'people singing'. Suggestion: 'I feel happy when I hear someone singing on the street or at the metro station.'

× No, I do not. And I never wanted honestly. But uh, I can think a little.

✓ No, I have not. I honestly never wanted to. But I have thought about it a little.

'No, I do not' is wrong for experience question; use 'No, I have not' for present perfect. 'I never wanted honestly' word order: 'I honestly never wanted to.' 'I can think a little' unclear; intended 'I have thought about it a little' (present perfect for experience). Suggestion: 'No, I haven't. I honestly never wanted to, but I have thought about it a little.'