唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct collocations (“gives me relaxation” → “relaxes me”), and avoid incorrect words (“harm” → “humm/ hum along”). Use one or two supporting details with linking words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it relaxes me and helps me cope with stress. For example, when I feel sad I often hum my favorite melody at home, which makes me feel calmer within a few minutes.

建議: Answer directly then give concise supporting detail. Remove repetition and filler words. Use correct tense and clearer phrasing (‘I haven’t taken formal lessons’). Provide a brief example of what you learned informally.

範例: No, I haven’t taken formal singing lessons, but I learned some techniques by listening to my mother sing. For instance, I picked up simple breathing and pitch-matching tips from watching her.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation and correct phrasing (‘I’d rather sing for family and friends’). Add a reason why.

範例: I prefer to sing for my family and close friends because I feel comfortable with them. I wouldn’t sing in front of a large crowd since I’m still learning and get nervous performing publicly.

建議: Make a clear claim and support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and incorrect word forms (e.g. ‘calm’ → ‘a calming activity’, ‘hederies are stressed’ unclear). Mention one or two concrete benefits (mood, stress relief, breathing).

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it is a calming activity that reduces stress and lifts the mood. For example, singing improves breathing and helps people feel more positive after a difficult day.

建議: Respond directly and use specific supporting details. Remove fillers and fix grammar (plural/singular). Explain why you enjoy it — mention specific qualities of the singing or a brief example.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to my friends sing because they have pleasant voices and sing expressively. When they perform, I like to listen quietly since their music creates a peaceful and enjoyable atmosphere.

建議: Be concise and confident in your answer. Avoid negative self-judgement phrases like ‘I don't have talent’—instead explain reasons or plans (e.g., haven’t had time, might take lessons). Offer a brief future plan if applicable.

範例: No, I haven’t taken any singing classes yet. I haven’t had the time, but I’m considering taking lessons to improve my pitch and breathing techniques in the future.

× Umm yes, I like to sing my favorite songs because it can't give me, it gives me relaxation to my mind and whenever I feel uh stress or sad I used to harm the my favorite melody or songs.

✓ Umm yes, I like singing my favorite songs because it gives me relaxation of mind and whenever I feel stressed or sad I listen to my favorite melodies or songs.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'to sing' (should use gerund after 'like'), wrong contraction 'can't give me' and redundant phrasing, wrong preposition 'to my mind', incorrect past habitual 'used to harm' and extra article 'the'. Suggestions: use 'like singing' for general preference, 'gives me relaxation of mind' or 'relaxes me', use adjective 'stressed' for state, and 'listen to my favorite melodies' for the intended meaning.

× Well, officially I didn't take any classes in singing classes. Umm, umm, but uh, I uh, listen my mother singing so I do not do little I but I do know little about it.

✓ Well, officially I haven't taken any singing classes. I listen to my mother singing, so I don't know much, but I know a little about it.

Errors: tense and redundancy ('didn't take any classes in singing classes'), incorrect verb form 'listen' missing preposition 'to', incorrect negation 'do not do little I', and unclear structure. Suggestions: use present perfect 'haven't taken' for life experience, remove repeated word 'classes', use 'listen to', and simplify to 'I don't know much, but I know a little.'

× Well, I'm pretty shy about my singing skills because I'm not very good at it. So may I think I cannot uh, sing in front of huge crowd, but uh, I can sing in front of my family and friends.

✓ Well, I'm pretty shy about my singing skills because I'm not very good at them. So I think I cannot sing in front of a huge crowd, but I can sing in front of my family and friends.

Errors: pronoun disagreement 'it' should refer to 'skills' plural -> 'them', awkward phrase 'may I think' and missing article before 'huge crowd'. Suggestions: use 'I think' for confidence level and 'a huge crowd' with article.

× Yes, uh, singing and definitely brings happiness to people because it is uh, it is one of the calm, It is one of the method to calm our mind. It uh, hederies are stressed and improve our, uh, also improve our health condition.

✓ Yes, singing definitely brings happiness to people because it is one of the methods to calm our minds. It reduces stress and also improves our health.

Errors: extra conjunction 'and', capitalization error, wrong article 'one of the method' -> 'one of the methods', incorrect noun 'hederies' (nonsense) and awkward phrase 'improve our, uh, also improve our health condition'. Suggestions: simplify to 'reduces stress' and 'improves our health', use plural 'methods' and plural possessive 'our minds'.

× Yes, umm, my friends uh are pretty good singer and they have a very they have a really nice sound so whenever they sing a song I quietly listen to them and it is very peaceful and enjoyable moment to me.

✓ Yes, my friends are pretty good singers and they have a really nice sound, so whenever they sing I listen quietly and it is a very peaceful and enjoyable moment for me.

Errors: singular 'singer' should be plural 'singers' to match 'friends', repetition 'they have a very they have', incorrect adverb placement 'quietly listen to them' is acceptable but 'listen quietly' is more natural, and missing preposition 'for me'. Suggestions: use 'singers', remove repetition, place adverb after verb and add 'for me'.

× No, I haven't taken any, uh, singing classes and uh, I don't think I have the talent to sing because, uh, my voice.

✓ No, I haven't taken any singing classes and I don't think I have the talent to sing because of my voice.

Errors: unnecessary comma, incomplete clause 'because, uh, my voice' missing preposition 'because of'. Suggestions: remove filler words, keep present perfect 'haven't taken', and use 'because of my voice' to express reason.