唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and relevant: state clearly that you enjoy singing and give specific reasons. Reduce repetition and correct word choice (e.g., 'singing' not 'saying'). Use one topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting sentences with linking words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a long day. For example, I often sing along to short videos on my phone while I stay at home, and this always lifts my mood.

建議: Answer directly then give a specific detail or future plan. Reduce hesitations and fix vocabulary (learned to sing, singing professionally). Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to add contrast or future intention.

範例: No, I have never learned to sing professionally because singing is just a hobby for me. However, I might take music lessons in the future to improve my technique.

建議: Be concise and coherent: give a clear topic sentence and then a brief reason. Avoid confusing phrases and incorrect words (e.g., 'sing to clothes'). If mentioning personal issues, state them briefly and relevantly.

範例: I prefer to sing for my family, especially my wife and son, because I feel more comfortable with them. I rarely sing in front of strangers as I tend to feel anxious in social situations.

建議: Good direct answer and clear idea. Improve grammar and fluency: avoid repetition and incorrect comparative forms (use 'happier' not 'more happier'). Use linking words like 'even if' correctly and add a brief example for specificity.

範例: Yes, definitely. Music can help people relax and feel happier, even if they are not good singers; for example, singing with friends at a party can lift everyone's mood.

建議: Answer clearly and avoid fillers. Use correct verb forms and nouns (enjoy listening to others sing; a nice voice). Provide a short specific example and use linking words such as 'especially' correctly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially when they have a pleasant voice or sing songs I know. For instance, I often play live performances on my phone and sing along.

建議: Give a direct answer then add a concise reason and future plan. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (I've never taken a singing class; I'm quite busy recently). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

範例: No, I have never taken a singing class because singing is just a hobby and I have been quite busy recently. However, I plan to take lessons with a professional teacher in the future.

× Yes, I like to stay in.

✓ Yes, I like staying at home.

Use the gerund 'staying' after 'like' to express a general preference; 'stay in' is informal, 'stay at home' is more natural.

× Sometimes I stay in, followed my phone and I also listen to short videos online.

✓ Sometimes I stay at home, follow my phone, and also watch short videos online.

Parallel structure requires verbs in the same form; use base verbs 'follow' and 'watch' to match 'stay' or use gerunds consistently. 'Followed' is past tense and incorrect here; 'listen to short videos' is awkward—use 'watch short videos'.

× I think it is a very good way to relax and I very enjoy the saying.

✓ I think it is a very good way to relax and I really enjoy singing.

Use the adverb 'really' before the verb 'enjoy'. 'Very enjoy' is incorrect. 'Saying' is wrong word choice; 'singing' is correct.

× Uh, no, not actually. Uh, I have never learned saying professionally before, uh, because seeing is just a hobby for me.

✓ Uh, no, not really. I have never learned singing professionally before, because singing is just a hobby for me.

Replace 'not actually' with natural 'not really'. Use 'singing' (gerund) not 'saying' or 'seeing'. 'Have never learned' is acceptable; ensure correct noun form 'singing'.

× Uh, so I don't uh, learn it with, uh, some professional teacher.

✓ So I haven't learned it with a professional teacher.

Use present perfect 'haven't learned' to match 'have never learned' earlier. Use article 'a' before 'professional teacher' and remove extraneous comma.

× Maybe in the future I will to learn music in class.

✓ Maybe in the future I will learn music in a class.

Do not use 'to' after 'will'. Add article 'a' before 'class' for correct noun phrase.

× I prefer to sing for my family, especially my wife and son.

✓ I prefer to sing for my family, especially my wife and my son.

Add 'my' before 'son' for parallel possessive structure; optional but clearer.

× I could. I couldn't sing in front of strangers because my doctor told me I have some social phobia so I prefer to sing to some clothes.

✓ I couldn't sing in front of strangers because my doctor told me I have social phobia, so I prefer to sing to close friends and family.

Remove the stray 'I could.' which is incomplete. 'Social phobia' does not need 'some'. 'Sing to some clothes' is nonsensical—likely meant 'close' not 'clothes'. Clarify with 'close friends and family'. Add comma before 'so'. },{

× I think music can make people feel very relaxed and and more happier.

✓ I think music can make people feel very relaxed and happier.

Double 'and' is an error. 'More happier' is redundant; use 'happier' only.

× Even if the people don't sing well, but they can also enjoy the music.

✓ Even if people don't sing well, they can still enjoy the music.

Do not use both 'even if' and 'but' together; use 'even if' ... ',' ... and 'still' conveys the contrast.

× Yes, I uh, very enjoy umm, listen to other saying uh, umm, especially when there have a nice voice or choose a song I like uh, and sometimes I will uh, singing followed my phone.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy listening to others sing, especially when they have a nice voice or choose a song I like, and sometimes I sing along with my phone.

Use 'really enjoy' not 'very enjoy'. Use 'listening to others sing' (verb patterns). 'There have a nice voice' should be 'they have a nice voice'. 'Sing along with my phone' is correct phrase instead of 'singing followed my phone'.

× Uh, no, not actually. Uh, I don't, uh, I have never learned uh, the music in class, uh, because singing is just a hobby for me, uh, and I'm a quite busy in recent months.

✓ Uh, no, not really. I have never learned music in a class because singing is just a hobby for me, and I have been quite busy in recent months.

Use 'not really' idiomatically. 'Have never learned music in a class' is fine; remove extra 'the'. Use present perfect continuous 'have been quite busy' to describe recent ongoing state.

× So meet me in the future, I will learn music in class with professional teacher.

✓ So maybe in the future, I will learn music in a class with a professional teacher.

'Meet me' is incorrect—likely 'maybe'. Add articles 'a' before 'class' and 'a professional teacher' for correct noun phrases.