记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 문장 흐름을 자연스럽게 고치고, 주제문과 부연 설명을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 예를 들어 시제 일관성(과거 vs 현재)을 맞추고, 불필요한 반복을 줄이며 문장을 2~3문장으로 간결하게 정리하세요. 또한 ‘hardly memorize’ 같은 표현 대신 적절한 동사구(예: struggle to remember)를 사용하세요.

範例: I used to have a very good memory when I was in my twenties, but now at forty I often struggle to remember things. For example, I sometimes forget words or small details, which can be frustrating.

建議: 사건을 말할 때 때와 상황을 명확히 하고 시간 표현과 시제를 일관되게 사용하세요. 또한 이유와 결과를 논리적으로 연결하고, 문장을 완성하세요. 불완전한 문장을 피하고 구체적인 세부사항(예: 장소)을 추가하세요.

範例: Yes. A few days ago I misplaced my Korean cell phone, which contains all my Korean stock information. Because of that, I was worried and spent hours searching the house to try to locate it.

建議: 직접적으로 질문에 답하는 주제문을 먼저 말하고, 구체적인 항목들을 열거한 뒤 연결어로 이유를 덧붙이세요. 문장 구조를 완성하고 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요. 예를 들어 ‘where my keys are’처럼 올바른 어순과 ‘make my daily life easier’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

範例: I need to remember everyday items like my car keys and my phone, because losing them would disrupt my daily routine. For example, if I can't find my keys I could be late for appointments.

建議: 좋은 전략을 사용하고 있으니 문장을 더 간결하고 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 이유와 결과를 연결하는 접속사를 적절히 사용하고, 예시를 하나 더 추가해 설명을 풍부하게 하세요.

範例: I usually write notes or set reminders in my Google Calendar for important dates, so I don't forget appointments. For daily tasks I also use alarms on my phone to make sure I complete them on time.

× When I was 20 I had a good memory. Now I turned 40 I have a bad memories. I always forget some things, even I had to hardly memorize some words.

✓ When I was 20 I had a good memory. Now that I am 40 I have bad memories. I always forget some things; sometimes I even have to struggle to memorize some words.

'Now I turned 40' is incorrect for current age; use 'Now that I am 40' to indicate present state. 'a bad memories' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'bad memories' (no article) or 'a bad memory' if singular. 'even I had to hardly memorize' is awkward and incorrect tense/word order; use 'sometimes I even have to struggle to memorize' or 'I have to work hard to memorize'. Maintain present tense for current situation and use correct article and word order.

× Yes, few days ago I forgot where I put my Korean cell phone. There are all information about Korean stocks and my share, so I need to find it. But I cannot remember. I couldn't remember where I.

✓ Yes, a few days ago I forgot where I had put my Korean cell phone. It contained all the information about Korean stocks and my shares, so I needed to find it. But I could not remember where it was.

'few days ago' requires the article 'a few days ago'. When referring to a past action completed before another past reference, use past perfect: 'forgot where I had put'. 'There are all information' is incorrect: 'information' is uncountable so use 'It contained all the information' or 'There was information', and match verb tense. 'my share' should be plural 'my shares' or 'my stock holdings'. 'I cannot remember' should match past context -> 'I could not remember'. 'I couldn't remember where I.' is incomplete; finish with 'where it was'.

× First of all I need to remember where is my keys, particularly car key and where I put my phone. Those things make my daily easily. If I don't if I.

✓ First of all I need to remember where my keys are, particularly my car key, and where I put my phone. Those things make my daily life easier. If I don't, I...

'where is my keys' uses incorrect word order for indirect question; use 'where my keys are'. 'car key' needs a determiner: 'my car key'. 'make my daily easily' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'make my daily life easier'. 'If I don't if I.' is unfinished and unclear; provide a complete clause like 'If I don't, I...'.

× If I have something to remember, I take a note, or if I should remember the date, I put the schedule on my Google Calendar so that I cannot miss the important day.

✓ If I have something to remember, I take a note, and if I need to remember a date, I put it on my Google Calendar so that I don't miss the important day.

'take a note' is understandable but more natural is 'make a note' or 'take a note' is acceptable; primary issue: 'if I should remember the date' is unnatural in this context; use 'if I need to remember a date'. 'put the schedule on my Google Calendar' is awkward; better 'put it on my Google Calendar' or 'add it to my Google Calendar'. 'so that I cannot miss' is the opposite meaning; use 'so that I don't miss'.

× But I cannot remember. I couldn't remember where I.

✓ But I could not remember where I had put it.

These two sentences mix present and past tenses and the second is incomplete. In context of a past event, use past tense or past perfect: 'I could not remember where I had put it.' This completes the idea and corrects tense consistency.