记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "so" repeated) and tighten phrasing.

範例: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, I remember faces and upcoming events easily because I’m a visual and auditory learner, so I study by looking at images and listening to explanations.

建議: Provide a clearer structure: state the fact, explain the reason, and include one brief consequence or lesson. Use linking words like 'because' or 'as a result' and correct small grammar issues.

範例: Yes, I once missed an important phototherapy session because the appointment time was changed and I didn’t notice. As a result, I learnt to check appointment emails more carefully and set phone reminders.

建議: Make the answer shorter and more organised: give a topic sentence then one clear supporting detail with a linking word. Remove redundant phrases and correct small awkwardness.

範例: I need to remember to take my keys every day. Because I keep them in my jacket rather than my bag, I always check my pockets before leaving the house so I don’t arrive locked out at work.

建議: Good content and structure; to improve, combine sentences and use a linking word to make it more concise. Use specific details (e.g., how far in advance you set reminders).

範例: I use a diary and set phone reminders to remember important events. For instance, I enter appointments in my calendar and set reminders one day and one hour before each event.

× Yes, I am good at memorizing things such as pictures or remembering events that are happening in the future.

✓ Yes, I am good at memorizing things such as pictures or remembering events that will happen in the future.

The phrase 'are happening in the future' mixes present progressive with a future time reference; use 'will happen' to express future events. Use simple future for events that will occur later. Suggestion: replace 'are happening in the future' with 'will happen in the future' or 'that will happen later.'

× So this is because of how or the type of learner I am.

✓ This is because of the type of learner I am.

The original contains an unnecessary filler 'how or' that disrupts sentence structure. Remove redundant words to make a clear noun phrase 'the type of learner I am.'

× So I learn quite well by looking or listening.

✓ I learn quite well by looking and listening.

Use 'and' instead of 'or' to indicate both methods are effective for the speaker. The present simple 'learn' is correct; only the conjunction needed correction.

× Yes, I have forgotten something important such as attending my phototherapy sessions because they had changed times and that was one of the times where I was not used to.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important, such as attending my phototherapy sessions, because they had changed times and I was not used to the new schedule.

The sentence mixes tenses and contains an awkward phrase 'one of the times where I was not used to.' Keep present perfect 'have forgotten' for experience, past perfect 'had changed' is acceptable, but clarify 'not used to the new schedule.' Also add commas for clarity and rephrase for naturalness.

× I always need to remember to take my keys for work because they're certain days where I arrive at work earlier than everyone else.

✓ I always need to remember to take my keys to work because there are certain days when I arrive at work earlier than everyone else.

Use 'there are certain days' not 'they're certain days.' Also 'take my keys to work' is the correct prepositional phrase and 'when' is better than 'where' to refer to time. This fixes quantifier and preposition usage.

× So because I don't keep the keys in my bag, I have them in my jacket, so I always have to check before I leave the house that I have the keys with me.

✓ Because I don't keep the keys in my bag but in my jacket, I always have to check before I leave the house that I have the keys with me.

The original uses redundant 'so because' and awkward commas. Use 'but' to contrast locations and simplify the sentence. Prepositions are correct; streamline structure for clarity.

× So I do have a diary that I keep all important events coming up, but also I do set a reminder on my phone to remind me of anything that's coming up in future.

✓ I keep a diary of all important upcoming events, and I also set reminders on my phone for anything coming up in the future.

Original uses unnecessary 'do' auxiliaries and awkward phrasing 'keep all important events coming up.' Use 'keep a diary of all important upcoming events' and plural 'reminders' for naturalness. Add article 'the' before 'future.'