记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep the answer short and direct with correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you are good at memorising, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, however). Avoid unclear phrases and redundant repetition. Use correct verb forms and simpler vocabulary if unsure.

範例: I’m fairly good at short-term memorising, but I struggle with long-term retention. For example, I can remember facts I study the day before a test, however I often forget them a few weeks later if I don’t review.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific example with a clear sequence. Use linking words such as for example or because to explain reasons. Correct sentence structure and pronoun use will make your answer clearer. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and vague phrases like 'worst kid.'

範例: Yes, I have. For example, I once forgot an important meeting because I didn’t enter it correctly in my calendar. As a result, I missed a discussion with my supervisor, so now I always double-check my schedule.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence listing the main things you must remember daily. Use linking words (for example, for instance, then) to organise details and give a specific example. Keep sentences concise and check grammar (use ‘today’, ‘first and later’ → ‘first and then’).

範例: In daily life I need to remember my plans and priorities for the day. For instance, if I have lab work, I plan the tasks in order: first set up the experiment, then run tests, and finally record the results so I work efficiently.

建議: Give a clear method and explain briefly how it helps, using correct grammar and linking words. Mention specific tools or habits and one detail on timing or frequency. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

範例: I usually put important events into my phone calendar with alarms, and I set two reminders: one a day before and one an hour before. This ensures I have time to prepare and I rarely forget important tasks.

× To be honest, I think I'm quite a person that have some kind like short memorized.

✓ To be honest, I think I'm the kind of person who has a short memory.

Pronoun and relative clause issues: 'a person that have' is incorrect because 'person' is singular so verb should be 'has' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27 and 1). Also 'that' is less natural for people; 'who' is preferred (pronoun use, ID 12). 'Some kind like short memorized' is ungrammatical and should be 'the kind of person who has a short memory.' Suggestion: use 'the kind of person who has a short memory.'

× Like I can remember the detail of anything that I learned in this subject to taste in the tomorrow.

✓ For example, I can remember details of anything I learned about a subject until the next day.

Word choice and modifiers: 'the detail' should be plural 'details' (singular/plural, ID 1). 'that I learned in this subject to taste in the tomorrow' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'until the next day' (preposition and time expression, ID 11 and 6). Suggestion: simplify to 'I can remember details of anything I learned about a subject until the next day.'

× So some kind like the short memory is quite good for me, but for long term it's not.

✓ So having a short-term memory is quite good for me, but it is not good in the long term.

Incorrect noun phrase and adjective order: 'some kind like the short memory' is ungrammatical; use 'short-term memory' (adjective use, ID 13 and 18). 'for long term' needs article and preposition: 'in the long term' (preposition usage, ID 11). Also 'it's not' is vague; clarify 'it is not good in the long term.' Suggestion: use 'short-term memory' and 'in the long term.'

× Definitely yes, even something that very important like the meeting I need to put on my schedule to, uh, retain the detail of that meeting because I cannot miss them.

✓ Definitely, yes. I have even forgotten something very important, like a meeting I had put on my schedule; I needed to remember the details of that meeting because I could not miss it.

Several errors: tense and aspect need past to match 'forgotten' (past tense, ID 5). 'the meeting I need to put on my schedule to' is clumsy; use 'a meeting I had put on my schedule.' Pronoun agreement: 'them' refers to 'meeting' (singular) so use 'it' (pronoun error, ID 12). Modal/ability: 'cannot' in past should be 'could not' (modal verb usage, ID 4). Suggestion: use past tense and correct pronouns: 'I had put... I could not miss it.'

× So just for worst kid.

✓ It was just the worst thing.

Fragment and word choice: 'for worst kid' is not a complete or logical sentence (sentence structure error, ID 26). Likely intended 'it was just the worst' or 'that was the worst.' Suggestion: replace with a full clause like 'It was just the worst.'

× Oh, the thing that I need to remember is what I have to do on today.

✓ Oh, the things I need to remember are what I have to do today.

Article and pronoun issues: 'the thing that I need to remember' could be plural 'the things I need to remember' if listing multiple tasks (quantifier/adjective, ID 14). 'on today' is incorrect preposition use; use 'today' without 'on' (preposition error, ID 11). Also subject-verb agreement: plural 'things' requires 'are' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). Suggestion: 'The things I need to remember are what I have to do today.'

× Like what is the plan for that day?

✓ For example, what is the plan for the day?

Minor article use: 'that day' is odd in this context; 'the day' or 'today' is more natural (article error, ID 22). Suggestion: use 'the day' or 'today.'

× And I have to reschedule the plan in my head again to like do it efficiently.

✓ And I have to rearrange the plan in my head to do things efficiently.

Informal filler 'like' should be removed. 'Reschedule the plan in my head again to like do it efficiently' is wordy; use 'rearrange the plan in my head to do things efficiently' (sentence structure and adverb placement, ID 26 and 20). Suggestion: avoid fillers and use clear verbs like 'rearrange' or 'reschedule.'

× For example, if I have to do the lab, I need to plan my lab work in my head.

✓ For example, if I have to do lab work, I need to plan it in my head.

Redundancy: 'do the lab' and 'my lab work' repeated; simplify to 'do lab work' and 'plan it' (sentence structure, ID 26). Suggestion: concise phrasing: 'If I have to do lab work, I plan it in my head.'

× Which should I do 1st and later?

✓ Which should I do first and which should I do later?

Sentence fragment and informal abbreviation: use full words 'first' and 'later' and include both clauses for clarity (sentence structure, ID 26; adverb placement, ID 20). Suggestion: 'Which should I do first and which should I do later?'

× Oh, as I mentioned before, I usually put the very important or very crucial thing in my calendar to remind me again.

✓ Oh, as I mentioned before, I usually put very important or crucial things in my calendar to remind myself.

Pronoun and reflexive use: 'remind me again' is acceptable but 'remind myself' is more natural when the subject and object are the same (reflexive pronoun, ID 15). Also use plural 'things' to match general statement (singular/plural, ID 1). Suggestion: 'put important things in my calendar to remind myself.'

× When I is nearly to is nearly the time that I need to do that, and I usually sit off the clock as well to remind me.

✓ When it is nearly the time I need to do it, I usually set an alarm on my clock to remind me.

Multiple errors: 'I is nearly to is nearly the time' is ungrammatical (subject-verb agreement and sentence structure, IDs 27 and 26). Use 'it is nearly the time.' 'sit off the clock' is incorrect phrase; likely 'set an alarm on the clock' (word choice/preposition, ID 11). 'to remind me' is fine. Suggestion: use 'When it is nearly time, I set an alarm to remind me.'