记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Also use correct verb forms and natural collocations (e.g., "good at memorising", "tasks require memorisation").

範例: No, I'm not good at memorising things. For example, many school tasks in Korea require memorisation, and I find it difficult to retain facts for tests. As a result, I often need to review material several times to remember it.

建議: Give a clear example with correct vocabulary and sequence. Use linking words (for example, then) and proper nouns (password, door). Keep to two or three sentences and correct tense usage.

範例: Yes, once I forgot my house password. For example, when I came home I couldn't remember the code, so I had to call my mother and ask her to open the door for me.

建議: Answer with a topic sentence naming the key items, then give a concise, specific reason using linking words. Correct word choice (password, emergency) and sentence structure will improve clarity.

範例: I need to remember my home password and my family's phone numbers. In an emergency, for instance if I lose my keys or my phone breaks, I would call a family member for help.

建議: Start with a clear method, then add a specific supporting detail and a linking word. Use correct grammar (take notes, smartphone, would be) and avoid exaggeration. Mention an alternative method to show strategy.

範例: I usually take notes on my smartphone because it's convenient. However, if my phone fails, I also keep a small written notebook as a backup so I won't lose important information.

× Unfortunately no.

✓ Unfortunately, no.

Missing comma after introductory adverb improves clarity; not a grammatical tense error but punctuation; keep present tense as speaker currently lacks ability.

× I'm really bad at memorizing something.

✓ I'm really bad at memorizing things.

Use plural 'things' with 'memorizing' to refer generally to multiple items. 'Memorizing something' sounds awkward and specific; use 'things' for generalization.

× Especially these days in Korea most of task is all like related memorize something so.

✓ Especially these days in Korea most tasks are related to memorizing things.

Multiple errors: 'most of task' should be plural 'most tasks' (singular/plural), verb agreement 'are' (subject-verb agreement), use 'related to' (preposition), and 'memorizing things' (gerund + plural). Rearranged for natural order.

× It is hard to get a score to me when I was in.

✓ It was hard for me to get a good score when I was there.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Corrected to appropriate past tense 'was', use 'for me' after 'hard', 'to get a good score' and 'when I was there' to indicate past location/time.

× Yes, I have one thing because when I get into the home I have to memorize the pass keyword.

✓ Yes, I have one example: when I get home I have to remember a passcode.

Use 'get home' (no 'into'), 'remember' is more natural than 'memorize' here, 'passcode' or 'password' is clearer than 'pass keyword'. Present tense 'get' is fine for habitual action.

× But some days I forget about my pass keyword.

✓ But some days I forget my passcode.

Use simple present 'forget' for habitual occurrences, omit 'about' after 'forget', and use 'passcode' instead of 'pass keyword'.

× So I called my mom and please open the door.

✓ So I call my mom and ask her to open the door.

Maintain tense consistency and correct sentence structure: use 'call' (habitual) or 'called' (past) consistently; use 'ask her to open' instead of 'please open the door' which lacks a subject.

× Absolutely my home password and also it is important to remember about my family phone number.

✓ Absolutely my house password, and it's also important to remember my family's phone number.

Use 'house password' or 'home password' consistently; 'remember about' is incorrect—use 'remember' + object; possessive 'my family's' is needed for phone number.

× If I have a emergency situations like headphones are broken but there's no way to go to home.

✓ If I have an emergency situation, for example if my headphones are broken and I can't go home.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound 'emergency', singular 'situation' or plural consistently, add commas for clarity, and use 'go home' (no 'to'). Adjust clause structure for clarity.

× I have to call my ma families and.

✓ I have to call my family.

Original 'ma families' is nonstandard; use 'my family'. Remove trailing 'and'. Ensure pronoun 'my' with singular 'family' or 'family members' if plural intended.

× I usually take a note on my smartphones, so my smartphone is very important thing.

✓ I usually take notes on my smartphone, so my smartphone is a very important thing.

Use plural 'notes' for general habit, 'on my smartphone' (singular), and include article 'a' before 'very important thing'.

× But if the smartphone is broken I couldn't thought about that.

✓ But if the smartphone is broken I couldn't think about that.

Mix of modals and past participle: 'couldn't think' is correct. 'Couldn't thought' is ungrammatical. Maintain past ability/modal use. Alternatively use 'I can't think about that' for present possibility.

× It's disaster.

✓ It's a disaster.

Missing article 'a' before 'disaster'. Adds grammatical completeness and natural expression.