记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No/Partly), avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific examples using linking words. Focus on correct grammar (e.g., "remind us of") and sentence structure.

範例: I'm not particularly good at memorising everything, but I do remember some important events clearly. For example, I can recall family celebrations vividly because I take photos and talk about them often, which helps cement those memories.

建議: Answer directly with a brief example and explain why it happened. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words like "for example" and "because" and correct verb forms (e.g., "my mother gave me" not "mom gave me your work").

範例: Yes, I have. For example, my mother once asked me to complete a task, but I forgot because I was distracted by my studies. As a result, I now write such tasks in a notebook to avoid forgetting them.

建議: Give a clear list of daily things you must remember and explain briefly why each is important. Avoid vague or confusing phrases; use specific nouns (exams, appointments, family events) and linking words like "for example" or "also".

範例: I need to remember things like exam dates and study schedules, appointments, and family events. For example, remembering exam dates helps me prepare in advance, and noting family gatherings ensures I can make plans to attend.

建議: Explain your memory techniques clearly and in order. Use linking words to separate methods (e.g., "for studying" vs "for events") and give specific steps and correct grammar (e.g., "I read a text three times and take notes").

範例: I use different methods: for studying, I read a text three times and take notes, which helps me remember facts; for events, I take photos and make jokes with family members so the moments stay memorable.

× I'm not, I'm not perfect at memorizing everything, but some, sometimes some memories are very memorable.

✓ I'm not perfect at memorizing everything, but some memories are very strong and easy to recall.

The original sentence repeats 'I'm not' and misuses 'some, sometimes some' and 'very memorable' which is awkward. Also 'memorable' refers to something worth remembering rather than being easy to remember. Simplify and use correct pronoun structure and adjective choice. Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'some memories' and a clearer adjective such as 'strong' or 'easy to recall'.

× And uh, it keeps, uh, it keeps in our mind and it's remind us what are in that time and we are in what.

✓ They stay in our minds and remind us what was happening at that time and where we were.

Pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'it keeps in our mind' should be 'they stay in our minds' because 'memories' is plural. 'it's remind us' mixes contraction with base verb; use 'remind us'. Also the clause 'what are in that time and we are in what' is ungrammatical; correct to 'what was happening at that time and where we were' to match past reference. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear clause order.

× Of course I forgot something important to me.

✓ Of course I have forgotten something important to me.

The context asks about experience; present perfect ('have forgotten') is appropriate to indicate past events with present relevance. 'Forgot' is simple past and can be acceptable, but present perfect is more natural here. Use correct auxiliary for present perfect.

× Uh, sometimes mom gave me your work to do, but I forgot it.

✓ Sometimes my mom gave me work to do, but I forgot it.

Using 'your work' is incorrect when referring to the student's own mother assigning tasks; use 'my mom' and 'work' or 'a task'. Also tense consistency: if recounting past repeated events, simple past 'gave' works. Clarify possessive pronoun.

× And uh, and then she says, call me if I don't do it.

✓ Then she says, 'Call me if I don't do it.'

The original mixes reported and direct speech awkwardly. For reported speech, use: She says to call her if I don't do it. If presenting the instruction directly, punctuation/quotation clarifies. Also 'call me' refers to mother; maintain pronoun clarity. Ensure tense consistency: 'says' (present) is acceptable for habitual instructions.

× Uh, yeah, sometimes it, uh, was very difficult to me understand like studying hours.

✓ Sometimes it was very difficult for me to understand things like study schedules.

Incorrect word order 'difficult to me understand' should be 'difficult for me to understand'. 'Studying hours' is awkward; better: 'study schedules' or 'study hours'. Use correct preposition 'for' and infinitive order 'for me to understand'.

× I think it may be someday like my exams, whenever it goes wrong pattern, I don't game with my uh, fully confident.

✓ I think about future events like my exams; when things go wrong, I lose my confidence and I don't perform well.

The sentence mixes modal 'may be someday' and unclear expressions. 'Whenever it goes wrong pattern' is ungrammatical — use 'when things go wrong'. 'I don't game with my fully confident' is incorrect; likely means 'I lose my confidence and don't perform well'. Use appropriate verbs and noun forms for clarity.

× And sometimes it was with uh family gathering, like some memorable things to do, uh, with families and something to do with our family and friends.

✓ And sometimes it's during family gatherings when we do memorable things with family and friends.

Pronoun 'it was with family gathering' is wrong; use 'it's during family gatherings'. Avoid repetition 'families' and 'family' together. Use plural agreement and clearer phrasing. Maintain tense consistency: present habitual 'it's' or 'it happens'.

× There's many kind of, uh, remember things, uh, like, uh, like in my, for example, in my study time, I reading, uh, three more than three times and write in my copy and then I remember.

✓ There are many ways to remember things. For example, when I study, I read something three or more times and write it in my notebook, then I remember it.

'There's many kind' is incorrect; 'there are many kinds' or 'many ways' is correct for plural. 'I reading' should be 'I read' (present simple for habitual action). 'Write in my copy' is unclear; use 'write it in my notebook'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there are' and correct verb forms for habitual actions.

× But in family gathering, like, uh, making some jokes, making some, uh, memorable things like clicking the pictures.

✓ But at family gatherings we make jokes and do memorable things like taking pictures.

Use preposition 'at' for gatherings. 'Making some jokes' is acceptable but better 'we make jokes'. 'Clicking the pictures' is informal; use 'taking pictures'. Include subject 'we' and use plural 'gatherings' for habitual events.