记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更自然、句子要简洁并注意语法和时态。可先给出直接回答，再用一两个具体细节支持（使用连接词如“for example”或“such as”），避免冗长或不准确的短语（如“enjoy playing the facility”）。注意单复数和动词形式。

範例: Yes, I’m fairly good at remembering things. For example, I clearly remember the first time I travelled abroad with my family to Disneyland; we spent the day on the rides and took lots of photos.

建議: 回答要更直接并改进语法与连贯性。用一两句说明你通常如何防止忘记，并用连接词使句子流畅。避免重复表达（例如“in order to avoid that situation happen”应简化）。

範例: Not really. I usually write important tasks in my phone calendar and set reminders so I don’t forget them.

建議: 回答需要更清晰、有条理并修正语法错误。先给主题句，然后列出两类需记住的事项，用连接词（firstly, secondly）并用准确表达（如“deadlines”而非“daylight”）。避免重复和口头语。

範例: As a university student, I need to remember deadlines for assignments and group meetings. I also work part-time, so remembering my work schedule and start times is important.

建議: 回答应更自然、句式更紧凑并注意语法（主谓一致和冗余去掉）。先说明工具或方法，然后简要说明如何使用以及效果。避免重复（“help me a lot and help me to remember”）。

範例: I use Google Calendar on my phone to record important events and set reminders, usually one day before and one hour before, which helps me stay organised.

× I usually remember the childhood memory.

✓ I usually remember childhood memories.

句子使用现在时，但“memory”在此处应为可数且常用复数形式，表示多次或一般性的记忆。将单数改为复数更自然。建议使用“memories”来表示一系列记忆或一般回忆。

× For example, I always remembered the day I first went abroad with my families and we went to the Disneyland, enjoy playing the facility there and also shoot photos.

✓ For example, I always remember the day I first went abroad with my family; we went to Disneyland, enjoyed the rides there and took photos.

原句时态混用（现在与过去），且“families”应为单数“family”；“the Disneyland”用法不当，通常不加定冠词；动词时态需一致，描述过去的具体活动应使用过去时（enjoyed, took）。建议统一时态并改正名词及动词形式。

× No, I don't think so because I would write down the things on my schedule if something is really important in order to avoid that situation happen.

✓ No, I don't think so because I would write things down in my schedule if something were really important in order to avoid that situation happening.

原句中“that situation happen”语法错误，应使用动名词或从句结构；在虚拟或假设条件中从句更自然（if something were...）。另外固定搭配是“write things down”及“in my schedule”。建议使用虚拟语气和动名词。

× Like I use cell phone and it will give me notification if I have something significant to do.

✓ For example, I use my cell phone and it gives me notifications if I have something important to do.

需加所有格“my”表示所属；“will give”在习惯性动作中应使用一般现在时“gives”；“notification”应用复数“notifications”更自然；“significant”用于重要性可用“important”更常见。建议使用一般现在时表达习惯性行为并加所有格。

× I am currently a university student so the daylight of assignments or group projects are really important for me.

✓ I am currently a university student, so the deadlines of assignments or group projects are really important for me.

“daylight”用词错误，正确词是“deadline”（截止日期）；主语“deadlines”与后面的动词应一致（复数）。建议使用“deadlines”并保持主谓一致。

× On top of that I'm doing some part time job so the time I should go to work is also really important for me.

✓ On top of that, I'm doing a part-time job, so the time I need to go to work is also really important to me.

“some part time job”不自然，改为“a part-time job”；“should go to work”在此表达“需要上班”更自然用“need to go to work”；“important for me”改为“important to me”更常用。建议使用“a part-time job”和“need to”。

× So that's should that's I should remember.

✓ So that's something I should remember.

原句结构混乱，存在多余词“that's should that's”。应简化为“that's something I should remember”以表达“那是我应该记住的事情”。建议删除多余成分并调整词序。

× I use Google Calendar is a kind of app that I installed it in my smart phone.

✓ I use Google Calendar; it's an app that I installed on my smartphone.

原句中“installed it in my smart phone”有冗余代词且介词错误，通常用“install on”而非“in”；“is a kind of app”不自然，可改为“it's an app”。建议删除多余代词并使用正确介词“on”。

× It's help me to remember all the significant events and it would give me notification the day before it's and that helps me a lot and help me to remember all kind of event.

✓ It helps me remember all the significant events and gives me a notification the day before, and that helps me a lot to remember all kinds of events.

原句代词与动词形式错误：应为第三人称单数“helps/gives”；不需要不定式“to remember”前的“help”可直接用“helps me remember”；“notification”常用单数或复数视情况而定；“it's and that”语序错误；“all kind of event”应为复数“all kinds of events”。建议使用正确的第三人称动词形式、复数形式以及更自然的短语结构。