记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时要更直接地回应问题，句子要更简洁自然，并用连接词把原因和感受串起来。注意时态和用词（例如“vocabularies”应为“vocabulary”），避免重复表达。可以用1个主题句然后最多两句支持细节。

範例: I'm not very good at memorising things at the moment. I often learn difficult vocabulary but forget it the next day, which is frustrating. To tackle this, I try to review new words several times during the day to help them stick.

建議: 回答要更有条理，先直接说“是的”，然后简洁描述发生了什么，并表达后果和感受。修正语法错误（如“woke up until”应为“woke up after the film had ended”），避免不清楚的短语（例如“I'm not improvers”）。

範例: Yes, I have. Last weekend I had plans to go to the cinema with a friend, but I overslept and woke up after the film had finished. My friend was annoyed, and I apologised and promised to be more punctual in future.

建議: 回答时先给出总体概述，然后用连接词列举具体事项。避免冗长重复（如多次说“also”），并用正确词汇（“vocabulary”、“retain”）。尽量提供具体例子说明为什么重要。

範例: I need to remember a variety of things in daily life. For example, I keep track of appointments with family and friends, my daily schedule, and important academic details such as vocabulary and formulas so that I can perform well in exams.

建議: 回答清晰，结构合理，但可以更自然和具体。减少填充词（uh, umm），用连词衔接并举一两个具体方法或工具（例如手机提醒、日历、复习计划）。

範例: For small tasks I usually keep them in my head, but for important events I write them down or set reminders on my phone. For instance, I use a calendar app to schedule appointments and set alerts so I don't forget them.

× Actually now to in recent days I always need to remember some difficult vocabularies.

✓ Actually, recently I always need to remember some difficult vocabulary.

句子中时态与其它词不一致且有多余词（"to in"），应使用现在时的表达“recently”或“nowadays”。另外“vocabulary”通常不可数，使用单数形式。建议简化为“Recently I always need to remember some difficult vocabulary.”（简体中文说明：删除多余词，使用正确的时间副词并把名词改为不可数形式）。

× I find that I remember it today and I will quickly forget it and I feel really terrible actually.

✓ I find that I remember it today but I quickly forget it, and I feel really bad.

原句中连接词使用不当，应使用对比关系“but”；“really terrible”用于描述感受时不如“really bad”自然。保持时态一致，使用一般现在时描述习惯性事实。建议用“but I quickly forget it”来表达对比。

× Uh, yes, just last weekend I originally had an appointment with my friend and to go to the cinema, but I woke up until the film was ended.

✓ Uh, yes. Just last weekend I had an appointment with my friend to go to the cinema, but I woke up after the film had ended.

描述过去发生的动作应使用过去时或过去完成时。原句中“woke up until the film was ended”搭配错误，正确表达为“woke up after the film had ended”。此外删除多余的“originally”和不正确的被动短语“was ended”。（简体中文说明：把动作按时间顺序用过去时/过去完成时表达，使用“after ... had ended”表示在电影结束之后醒来）。

× My friend was really annoyed at this thing and I feel very sorry.

✓ My friend was really annoyed about this, and I felt very sorry.

情绪反应关于过去的事件，应将第二句也改为过去时（felt）。“annoyed at this thing”不自然，应使用“annoyed about this”或“annoyed with me”。（简体中文说明：保持时态一致，用更自然的介词搭配）。

× Actually, I'm not improvers.

✓ Actually, I'm not good at remembering things.

原句结构和词汇错误（“improvers”误用）。需要改为完整的短语描述能力不足，如“not good at remembering things”。（简体中文说明：用正确的形容词短语代替错误名词）。

× I have to remember many things, firstly some important appointments with my family and friends and also my schedule and the next day and also some academic knowledge and vocabularies that I master memories so I can have a better grade in my exam.

✓ I have to remember many things: firstly, important appointments with my family and friends and my schedule for the next day; secondly, some academic knowledge and vocabulary that I need to remember so I can get better grades in my exams.

句子中“vocabularies”错误，vocabulary为不可数名词；“grade”在泛指考试成绩时常用复数“grades”或用“a better grade”视语境。原句连词和结构混乱，需拆分并用恰当介词“for the next day”。（简体中文说明：将不可数名词改为单数形式，重组句子以更清晰地列举项并使用正确的介词和复数形式）。

× Uh, for For most of the small things I just keep them in my mind, but for some important schedules and appointments with other people, I like to, umm, write them down on the paper.

✓ For most small things I just keep them in my mind, but for important schedules and appointments with other people, I like to write them down on paper.

句中有重复词“for For”，并且“on the paper”通常说“on paper”或“on a piece of paper”。去掉填充词“umm”，简化为更自然的表达。保持一般现在时描述习惯。（简体中文说明：删除重复和语气词，使用惯用短语“on paper”）。