记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep your answer focused and more structured. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two concise supporting points with linking words. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like "other stuff." Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "personal details" or "unpleasant memories").

範例: Not really. I tend to remember things easily, but often I recall unpleasant memories about other people. For example, I frequently replay arguments in my head, which makes me feel upset, so I try to distract myself by exercising or listening to music.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific, coherent example. Use linking words to explain consequences and what you learned. Avoid filler phrases and correct grammar mistakes (e.g., double words). Mention a concrete action you took afterwards to improve.

範例: Yes, once I forgot an exam date that was actually the next day, so I hadn't prepared and did poorly. As a result, I started using a digital calendar with reminders and now I set alerts a week and a day before important events.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific, practical examples of what you do to remember this (use linking words). Use more natural phrasing like "not to let others upset me" and explain strategies you use to stay calm.

範例: I need to remember not to let other people's behaviour upset me. For instance, when I feel annoyed at work, I take deep breaths and remind myself that it's temporary, and I sometimes write down my thoughts to reflect later.

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear statement of your method, then briefly explain how it works and why it helps. Avoid unclear phrasing (e.g., "a drove star"); use specific vocabulary like "draw a star" or "write a note". If possible, mention an alternative method for variety.

範例: I usually draw a small star or write a note on my hand to remind myself of important tasks. When I see the mark, it prompts me to act; otherwise I also set phone reminders so I don't rely only on my memory.

× Unfortunately yes, and mostly the things I want to forget.

✓ Unfortunately, yes; mostly the things I want to forget.

Comma and punctuation needed; pronoun usage is okay but sentence needed clearer punctuation. Suggest adding comma after 'Unfortunately' and a semicolon to connect clauses for clarity.

× I always remember them and it hurts me.

✓ I always remember them, and it hurts me.

This is two independent clauses joined by 'and' so a comma is required before 'and' for correct sentence structure. Suggest adding a comma to separate the clauses.

× Remember all the things and memorize the details about the other people and the other stuff.

✓ I remember all kinds of things and memorize details about other people and other stuff.

The original lacks a subject and contains redundant 'the' and awkward phrasing. Adding 'I' as subject and removing unnecessary 'the' makes the sentence grammatical and natural.

× Yes, it was an exam date which was tomorrow.

✓ Yes, it was the exam date for the next day.

Mixes past and future references awkwardly. Use past context with 'for the next day' or say 'the exam date was the next day.' Also replace 'which' with clearer phrasing.

× And it was tough because I I wasn't able to study that exam just because I didn't know the date of that.

✓ It was tough because I wasn't able to study for that exam since I didn't know the date.

Remove duplicated 'I', use 'study for' (correct preposition), and 'since' fits better than 'just because'. Also 'date of that' is incorrect word order.

× I think I don't really know my responsibilities.

✓ I think I don't really know my responsibilities.

Sentence is grammatical; no change needed. It uses present tense appropriately to express a current state. Suggestion: none.

× I think the thing that I have to remember in my life is to not let people get on my nerves and make me feel disappointment and anxious.

✓ I think the thing I have to remember in life is not to let people get on my nerves or make me feel disappointed and anxious.

Use 'not to' before verb (infinitive) rather than 'to not' for more natural English, change 'make me feel disappointment' to 'make me feel disappointed' (adjective), and use 'or' instead of 'and' for clarity. Also remove redundant 'my' before 'life.'

× I mostly a drove star on top of my hand and it helped me to remind the thing which is important when I look at my hand and I never forgot but that way.

✓ I usually draw a star on the back of my hand, and it helps me remember things that are important when I look at my hand, so I never forget them that way.

Multiple errors: 'mostly a drove' is wrong tense and word choice — use 'usually draw' (present habit). 'On top of my hand' is better as 'on the back of my hand.' 'It helped me to remind the thing' should be 'it helps me remember things' (correct verb and noun forms). 'Which is important' should be 'that are important' (relative pronoun and plural agreement). 'I never forgot but that way' should be present habitual 'I never forget them that way.' Combined corrections fix verb tense, prepositions, pronouns, and agreement.