记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, avoid filler words, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g., 'memorizing' and 'needed to memorize'). Aim for 2–3 sentences.

範例: It depends on the type of information. When I was in middle school I was good at memorizing facts because I had to learn a lot for exams, but now I remember better when I revise regularly or use notes.

建議: Give a clear, concise account of the event with specific details (what was forgotten, when, and the consequence). Remove repetitions and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, once I missed an important university exam on a Saturday because I forgot the date, so I lost the chance to take it and felt very disappointed.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence and then give specific examples and a linking phrase. Reduce repetition and use more natural phrases (e.g., 'coding details', 'procedures for AI models'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: At my internship I need to remember work-related details, such as coding conventions, important documents, and methods for developing AI models, because these things affect my daily tasks and teamwork.

建議: Give a clear main sentence explaining your method, then one brief reason or example. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: I prefer to write important things down in a notebook or on my phone because this helps me review them later and prevents me from forgetting tasks.

× I think when I was young, I think I'm really good at memorizing things, uh, especially when I was in, uh, middle school because, uh, at that time I, I needed to memory a lot of things for my study or for my life, but.

✓ I think when I was young, I was really good at memorizing things, especially when I was in middle school because at that time I needed to memorize a lot of things for my studies and for my life.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly ('I think I'm really good' with 'when I was young'). Use past tense 'was' to match the time reference. 'Needed to memory' is incorrect verb choice; use the verb 'memorize'. 'Study' should be pluralized to 'studies' for general academic activities. Also remove filler words and repeated words for clarity.

× Of course, I, I have forgotten something important and I think it's a shame for me because it is a good exam and it's a good, it's a very important exam for me at Saturday, but on Saturday, but I, I forget to go to the exam and then it is a really bad thing for me.

✓ Of course, I have forgotten something important and I think it's a shame for me because it was a very important exam on Saturday, but I forgot to go to the exam and that was really bad for me.

Use past tense consistently for past events: 'it was' and 'I forgot' instead of present or mixed forms. 'At Saturday' is incorrect preposition; use 'on Saturday'. Remove repeated fillers and tighten phrasing ('it was a very important exam' instead of 'it's a good, it's a very important').

× For me now, because I'm in my internship so I need to remember some work details like the code details or some documents or some method to make AI.

✓ Right now, because I'm doing an internship I need to remember work details such as code specifics, documents, and methods for creating AI.

Use present continuous 'doing an internship' or 'I'm in my internship' can be improved; original sentence is awkward. Replace 'some work details like the code details or some documents or some method to make AI' with clearer noun phrases: 'code specifics, documents, and methods for creating AI'. Maintain present tense for current situation.

× I prefer to write them down because if I I because I write them down, can can notice I can talk to you.

✓ I prefer to write them down because if I write them down I can remember them and then I can tell you.

The original has repetition and missing subject for 'can notice' which is unclear. Use correct clause structure: 'if I write them down, I can remember them'. 'Can notice' is inappropriate; replace with 'remember' or 'tell you' depending on meaning. Remove duplicated words and fillers.