记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve accuracy, grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (data, items), and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, because / however). Also reduce sentence length and fix verb forms and word choice to sound natural.

範例: I’m reasonably good at memorising written information, especially data and essays, because I’m used to repeating them aloud. However, I’m not good at remembering people’s names or matching names to faces, so I often need to meet someone several times before I remember them.

建議: Make the story sequence clearer and correct tense consistency. Begin with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then add brief specific details in order using linking words (for example, because / as a result). Avoid repetition and fix past tense errors.

範例: Yes, once I forgot something important. A few years ago I went to an exhibition that I had booked in advance, but when I arrived I realised I had left my ID at home. As a result, I couldn’t get in and had to go back to fetch it.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to list important items. Improve grammar (word order, plural/singular, and articles) and add a brief specific example of how you remember your schedule or study information.

範例: The most important thing I need to remember is my daily schedule, because it keeps my activities organised. In addition, I try to remember key information from books and lectures by making short notes and reviewing them in the evening.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence describing your main method, then add specific supporting details and linking words. Correct collocations (post-it notes, notebook), pronouns and plurality, and give a short example of how this method works in practice.

範例: I usually write important things on post-it notes or in a notebook so I can see them easily. I also set reminders on my phone and sometimes ask a friend to remind me, for example before a meeting or an appointment.

× I'm good at memorizing datas and essays because I think they are more extinct to me and I can repeat the article in a short time.

✓ I'm good at memorizing data and essays because I think they are more familiar to me and I can repeat the material in a short time.

'Datas' is incorrect because 'data' is an uncountable noun in modern usage; use 'data' (no plural -s). 'Extinct' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'familiar'. 'Article' can be countable but in this context 'material' or 'texts' fits better. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns correctly and choose appropriate vocabulary; 'data' not 'datas', and replace 'extinct' with 'familiar'.

× But I'm not good at memorizing people and item and I can't match people's name and face very quick.

✓ But I'm not good at memorizing people and items and I can't match people's names and faces very quickly.

'Item' should be plural 'items' to match 'people' and the general meaning. 'People's name and face' needs plural 'names and faces' to match. 'Quick' is an adjective; use adverb 'quickly'. Suggestion: ensure nouns and related words are consistently plural when referring to multiple things and use adverbs for verbs.

× It was a few years ago I went to an exhibition which I had booked in advance, but when I arrived I found that I forgot to bring my ID card.

✓ A few years ago I went to an exhibition that I had booked in advance, but when I arrived I found that I had forgotten to bring my ID card.

Use past perfect 'had booked' for the booking before the visit (correct) and past perfect 'had forgotten' to indicate the forgetting occurred before the arrival was realized. Also 'It was a few years ago' is awkward; 'A few years ago' is better. Use 'that' instead of 'which' in restrictive clauses. Suggestion: sequence events with past perfect for earlier actions and simplify temporal phrases.

× So I can't enter it.

✓ So I couldn't enter.

The narrative is in the past, so use past tense 'couldn't' rather than present 'can't'. Also 'enter it' is awkward; 'enter' alone is sufficient. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent within past narratives.

× I have to return to my home and fetch it.

✓ I had to return home and fetch it.

In a past narrative, use past tense 'had to' instead of present 'have to'. 'Return to my home' is wordy; 'return home' is natural. Suggestion: match tense to the rest of the story and prefer concise phrasing.

× The most important thing in my daily life I have to remember is my schedule.

✓ The most important thing I have to remember in my daily life is my schedule.

The original word order is awkward. Move the clause 'I have to remember' after 'thing' for clear English. Article use is fine but word order needed correction. Suggestion: follow standard English noun phrase order: 'The most important thing I have to remember in my daily life is...'.

× That is how my activities everyday organized and I also need to remember the information which I have read in the books or heard in the classes.

✓ That is how my activities are organized every day, and I also need to remember the information that I have read in books or heard in classes.

'Everyday' (one word) is an adjective meaning 'ordinary'; here use the adverb phrase 'every day' (two words) and place it after 'organized'. Missing auxiliary 'are' for passive 'are organized'. Use 'that' for restrictive clause instead of 'which'. Omit articles when speaking generally ('in books', 'in classes'). Suggestion: use correct adverb form 'every day', include auxiliary verbs in passive constructions, and prefer 'that' in spoken restrictive clauses.

× I think the most important way for me to remember the important things is to write them down on the posted paper or in the notebook, which I can easily notice and sometimes I also ask my friend for help and they can remind me of the importance.

✓ I think the most important way for me to remember important things is to write them down on a sticky note or in a notebook, which I can easily notice. Sometimes I also ask my friends for help and they can remind me.

Use consistent plural/singular pronouns: 'my friend' vs 'they' mismatches; change to 'my friends' to match 'they' or use 'he/she' for singular. 'Posted paper' is not natural; 'sticky note' is clearer. 'The important things' repetitive; 'important things' is sufficient. 'Remind me of the importance' is awkward; simply 'remind me' is natural. Suggestion: ensure pronoun antecedents agree in number and choose natural collocations like 'sticky note' or 'note'.