记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答缺乏条理且有多处语言错误与不准确的词汇（如“host classes”、“tongue”、“sweaters”用法不当）。建议先给出简洁的主题句，然后用一到两句具体支持细节，使用恰当词汇并避免冗长。练习时可把句子分成短句并用连接词（例如“because”、“so”）清晰表达因果关系。

範例: Yes, I think I am fairly good at remembering things. When I was a child my mother enrolled me in extra study classes, where I had to memorise many words and short passages. Because of that training, I developed good memory habits which still help me in my studies and work today.

建議: 内容混乱、时态和句法错误较多，信息不连贯（例如“still remembered”与语境不符）。建议先明确主题句（承认曾忘记），然后用一两个具体句子描述事件、原因和结果，并用连词（for example, because, so）连接。注意动词时态和代词使用。

範例: Yes, I once forgot something important. For example, I promised to help a friend move to a new house, but after dealing with my own tasks I completely forgot about it. Because I missed the appointment, I felt very sorry and apologised to her.

建議: 回答有逻辑但表达不够地道，句子结构和词汇选择需改进（如“to one day to study a term”不明）。建议先给主题句（daily responsibilities），再用具体细节说明需要记住的内容，并用连词使句子流畅。使用更自然的短语如“attend lectures”、“remember course content”、“review regularly”。

範例: As a university student, I need to remember my class schedules and the key knowledge and skills from my professional courses. I try to review my notes every day and revise difficult topics regularly so that I can build up my understanding over time.

建議: 表达不够清晰且有重复（“remember in my memory”），句子冗长且缺少连接词。建议先陈述主要方法（用手机提醒），然后补充具体做法（设置 alarms, to-do lists）。使用简洁句子并加入连接词如“so”或“for example”。

範例: I usually use my phone to remember important things. For example, I set reminders and create to-do lists so that when I am busy I get a notification and can complete the task on time.

× my mother enrolled me to a host classes

✓ my mother enrolled me in a host class

“classes”与“a”矛盾：使用不定冠词a时应接单数名词。并且固定搭配为 enroll (someone) in a class。改为单数“class”并把介词“To”改为“in”。建议：使用“enrolled me in a class”或去掉“a”改为“host classes”。

× and as a subject I need to remember so many words, tongue, sweaters, points and articles.

✓ and as a subject I needed to remember so many words, tongue twisters, sayings and articles.

句子描述的是过去的情形，动词时态应为过去式“needed”。另外原句词汇“tongue, sweaters, points”不合适，按语境应为“tongue twisters, sayings”等。建议：保持过去时态并使用恰当名词短语。

× And at that time I knew that to develop a good memory habit is very important for my work and study until now.

✓ And at that time I knew that developing a good memory habit was very important for my work and studies even now.

句子以过去时间为背景，应使用过去时态“was”。另外不定式“to develop”可用动名词“developing”更自然；“study”应为复数“studies”。建议：时态一致，名词形式准确。

× Sure, at once, my friends.

✓ Sure — once, my friend asked me for help.

原句结构混乱且人称不一致。“at once”位置和用法不当，且“my friends”与后文单数动作不匹配。根据语境应为“once, my friend asked me for help”。建议：明确时间状语的位置并保持主语一致。

× She moved to a new house and I offered to help her. But after I dealt with my own things, I still remembered.

✓ She moved to a new house and I offered to help her. But after I dealt with my own things, I forgot.

“still remembered”与语境不符，应为“forgot”（忘记去帮她）。原句可能想表达未能记得要帮忙，使用错误的动词。建议：根据语境选用正确反义动词。

× I have something that I haven't to do, but I can't remember what's this important thing.

✓ I had something I hadn't done, but I couldn't remember what this important thing was.

时态需与上下文一致用过去时；短语“haven't to do”错误，正确应为“hadn't done”。疑问式“what's this important thing”语序不对，陈述句中应为“what this important thing was”。建议：把动词改为过去完成或过去时，并调整从句语序。

× So I feel very sorry to her.

✓ So I felt very sorry for her.

固定搭配为“feel sorry for someone”，介词应为for；并且前文为过去时，故改为“felt”。建议：记住固定搭配“sorry for”。

× Because I'm a university student, so I have class every day and I need to remember the knowledge and skills focus on my professional courses.

✓ Because I'm a university student, I have classes every day and I need to remember the knowledge and skills that focus on my professional courses.

不能同时用Because和so引导同一句；“class every day”改为复数“classes”；“skills focus on”需用定语从句“skills that focus on”或改为“skills related to”。建议：去掉多余连词，复数名词，使用适当从句或介词短语。

× You know to one day to study a term, knowledge is very difficult, so I need to remember in the daily to accumulate.

✓ You know, to study for a whole term in one day is very difficult, so I need to remember things daily to accumulate knowledge.

原句语序混乱，应重构为不定式短语“to study for a whole term in one day”；“in the daily”错误，应为“daily”或“every day”；“remember to accumulate”搭配不当，改为“remember things daily to accumulate knowledge”。建议：简化句子结构并使用正确副词与短语。

× Nowadays I remember some important things in my memory.

✓ Nowadays I store some important things in my memory.

“remember in my memory”冗余且不自然，动词“store”或“keep”更贴切；“remember”一般表示回忆而非储存。建议：使用“store/keep in my memory”或“remember”。

× Then I think it is very helpful because sometimes I forget something and I can bring my phone and open it at that time it can remind me something I need to do rapidly.

✓ Then I think it is very helpful because sometimes I forget something, so I can bring my phone and open it; it can quickly remind me of things I need to do.

句子过长且连词使用不当，需分为两部分；“remind me something”错误，应为“remind me of something”；“rapidly”位置不自然，改为“quickly”。建议：用连词so分句，使用固定搭配“remind me of”并把频率副词放在动词前后合适位置。