记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific brief example. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'memorize memories') and incorrect phrasing. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' only where needed and keep sentences natural.

範例: I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, when I visited Osaka ten years ago with my family, I struggled to remember details of the trip, so now I take many photos to help me recall events.

建議: Give a direct answer and then explain your method briefly with correct word choices. Avoid unclear words like 'forgive' (incorrect here). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to connect reason and result.

範例: No, I rarely forget important things because I always write down appointments. For instance, I note meeting times and locations in my calendar, so I usually arrive prepared.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (plural/singular agreement). Provide one specific reason and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to make the answer coherent.

範例: The most important things I need to remember are the time and place of appointments. Remembering these details helps me arrive on time and avoid getting lost.

建議: This answer is clear and well structured. To improve further, vary vocabulary (e.g., 'note' → 'record' or 'set reminders') and include a brief supporting detail about how reminders help (e.g., alerts). Keep it concise and natural.

範例: I usually record important information on my smartphone and set reminders. For example, I enter meetings with the time and place and enable alerts so I get notified in advance.

× For example, 10 years ago when I went traveling to Osaka with my family, I could not memorize any memories at that time.

✓ For example, 10 years ago when I traveled to Osaka with my family, I could not remember anything from that time.

The verb phrase 'went traveling' is acceptable but wordy; 'traveled' is more natural. 'Memorize any memories' is incorrect collocation: you remember memories, not memorize memories. Use past simple 'traveled' and 'could not remember' to match the past time reference and express inability to recall.

× So as an adult, I try to take a lot of pictures to memorize things.

✓ So as an adult, I try to take a lot of pictures to remember things.

The verb 'memorize' is not the best collocation with 'take pictures'; native speakers say 'remember things'. Use present simple 'try' to describe habitual action. Change 'memorize' to 'remember' for natural phrasing.

× No, I haven't since I am really forgive for I try to take a note not to forget my important appointments and that really helps me a lot and I usually do not forget about my important meetings.

✓ No, I haven't, because I am very careful: I try to take notes so I do not forget my important appointments, and that really helps me a lot, so I usually do not forget my important meetings.

Multiple issues: 'since' is used for time but here means 'because'—use 'because'. 'Forgive' is wrong word; likely meant 'careful' or 'forgetful'. Use 'take notes' plural; 'take a note' is possible but 'take notes' is natural. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses. Maintain present perfect 'I haven't' and present simple for habits.

× I try to take a note not to forget my important appointments and that really helps me a lot and I usually do not forget about my important meetings.

✓ I try to take notes so I do not forget my important appointments; that really helps me a lot, and I usually do not forget my important meetings.

Pronoun 'that' is usable but sentence is run-on. Replace 'not to' with 'so I do not' for clarity. Remove redundant 'about' after 'forget' when followed by noun phrase. Use semicolon or commas to separate ideas.

× I think time and place at the most important thing to remember in my daily life because that help me to arrive on time for important meetings and avoid getting lost.

✓ I think time and place are the most important things to remember in my daily life because they help me arrive on time for important meetings and avoid getting lost.

Subject 'time and place' is plural so use plural verb 'are' and plural noun 'things'. 'At the most important thing' is incorrect; use 'the most important things'. 'That help me' should be 'they help me' to refer to plural subjects. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help me'.

× I remember my important things by taking a note on my smart phone.

✓ I remember important things by taking notes on my smartphone.

Use 'on my smartphone' not 'on my smart phone' (one word preferred). Use 'taking notes' rather than 'taking a note' for general habit. 'Remember my important things' is awkward; 'remember important things' is more natural.

× For example, when I have important meetings, I try to write down the time and place on my smartphone so that I don't forget.

✓ For example, when I have important meetings, I try to write down the time and place on my smartphone so I do not forget.

Sentence is mostly correct. Change contraction 'don't' to 'do not' to match formal register. 'Write down' and 'on my smartphone' are correct. No tense change needed.