记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary filler.

範例: Not really. I often forget random details like names or where I put things. For example, I usually misplace my keys, so now I put them in a dedicated bowl by the door to avoid losing them.

建議: Provide a complete, coherent anecdote with clear sequence and linking words. Begin with a topic sentence, then give specific details (what, when, consequence) and finish with what you learned or did to fix it. Keep to at most four sentences.

範例: Yes. In college I once missed a project deadline because I misunderstood the submission date. As a result I received a penalty and had to explain the situation to my professor. Since then, I always set calendar reminders and start projects earlier to avoid the same mistake.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence about what you need to remember, then give specific examples and a linking word to show reason or method. Avoid vague phrases and repetitive wording.

範例: I need to remember appointments and deadlines. For instance, I write a to‑do list each morning and use my phone calendar for meetings, so I don't miss important tasks during the day.

建議: Be specific and use natural phrasing. Start with a topic sentence stating your method, then give one or two concrete techniques and a short reason using linking words. Avoid unclear expressions like "shut down those important things."

範例: I remember important things by writing them down and setting reminders. For example, I put deadlines into my phone calendar with alerts and keep a paper planner so I can check tasks each evening and avoid missing anything.

× Sometimes I tend to forget things and therefore I can say I'm not good at memorizing things, especially random things I kind of forgot.

✓ Sometimes I tend to forget things, so I can say I'm not good at memorizing things, especially random things that I kind of forget.

The original mixes present and past ('forgot') incorrectly when describing a general habit. Use consistent present tense for habitual actions ('forget'). Also add 'that' to introduce the relative clause. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual statements and use relative pronouns when linking clauses.

× Yes, I did way back my college days.

✓ Yes, I did, way back in my college days.

Missing preposition 'in' to indicate time period and punctuation needed for clarity. Use 'in my college days' to indicate the past time frame. Also adding a comma after 'I did' improves readability.

× So there was this professor of us, he gave us projects and then we need to submit that before the deadline.

✓ There was a professor of ours; he gave us projects and then we needed to submit them before the deadline.

Use 'professor of ours' (possessive) rather than 'professor of us'. Subject and verb tense must match: past narrative requires 'needed' not 'need'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'projects'. Also replace comma splice with semicolon or split into two sentences.

× However, I forgot to pass it before the deadline.

✓ However, I forgot to submit it before the deadline.

Verb choice: 'pass' is incorrect here; use 'submit' for handing in work. The tense 'forgot' is correct for a past event. Ensure verb collocates appropriately with 'deadline'.

× And then what I do is.

✓ And then what I did was forget to submit it.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb/complement. In context of past narration, use past tense 'did' and complete the clause. Alternatively, write a full sentence describing the action that followed.

× So that I won't be able to forget things.

✓ So that I won't forget things.

Unnecessary 'be able to' plus incorrect negation creates awkward meaning. Use simple future/intent 'won't forget' to express intention. Keep modal structure simple.

× Especially I'm not really good at memorizing random stuffs.

✓ Especially, I'm not really good at memorizing random stuff.

'Stuffs' is nonstandard; use uncountable 'stuff'. Add comma after 'especially' for clarity. Maintain 'memorizing' gerund form correctly.

× So I will start my day with a productive day like doing or reading books and then list down very important information.

✓ So I will start the day productively by doing or reading books and then writing down important information.

Redundant phrase 'start my day with a productive day' is awkward. Use adverb 'productively' or 'start the day productively'. 'Doing or reading books' is unclear; 'doing or reading' is odd—use 'reading books' or 'doing activities'. Use 'writing down' rather than 'list down' in natural English.

× By remembering very important things, just like deadlines at school, I should be able to shut down those important things and put due date on it so that I will not be able to pass that late.

✓ To remember important things, like deadlines at school, I try to record them and put a due date on them so that I will not submit them late.

Beginning with 'By remembering...' is awkward; use infinitive 'To remember...'. 'Shut down those important things' is incorrect collocation—use 'record' or 'write down'. 'Put due date on it' requires plural agreement and article: 'put a due date on them'. Also 'will not be able to pass that late' is incorrect; use 'will not submit them late'. Maintain logical subject-verb agreement and correct collocations.

× So it's very important to write it down.

✓ So it's very important to write things down.

Depending on context, plural 'things' is more natural after previous sentences discussing multiple items. 'Write it down' could be acceptable if referring to a single item; here general advice uses plural. Ensure pronoun matches antecedent.