记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, use correct tense and simpler phrasing, and avoid redundancy. Add a linking word to connect ideas. Also correct grammar (e.g., "when I feel tired") and prefer "notes" or "writing things down".

範例: Yes, I think I'm fairly good at memorising things. For example, when I study difficult material I make concise notes and review them every evening, which helps me retain information. Also, I sometimes use flashcards to test myself.

建議: Give a clear, coherent short narrative: start with a topic sentence admitting the mistake, then use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "after that") and keep grammar consistent (pronouns, verb forms). Be specific about what you did to fix it.

範例: Yes, I have. For instance, last weekend I forgot my best friend's birthday because I was traveling to another city. After I realised, I apologised to him and bought a belated gift and took him out for dinner to make up for it.

建議: Organise your answer: begin with a general statement about daily responsibilities, then list two or three specific items using linking words ("for example", "such as"). Correct grammar and be specific rather than vague. Avoid confusing phrasing like "my girlfriend memory date".

範例: In daily life I need to remember practical things such as study material, family birthdays and important dates with my girlfriend. For example, I keep a calendar on my phone to note birthdays and appointments so I don't forget them.

建議: Give a clear method-focused answer: start with a direct statement of your main strategy, then give one or two specific techniques and a brief reason. Use correct verbs ("write them down") and linking words ("then", "because").

範例: I usually write important things down in my phone or a notebook and set reminders. Because I review the notes every evening, I rarely forget important appointments.

× Yes, absolutely. In my opinion, I'm good at memorizing things because sometimes I need to learn a lot of hard knowledge so I need to remember it constantly when I was feel tired of it.

✓ Yes, absolutely. In my opinion, I'm good at memorizing things because sometimes I need to learn a lot of difficult material, so I need to remember it constantly even when I feel tired.

The original mixes past tense 'was feel' with present-tense context and uses awkward nouns 'hard knowledge'. Use present simple 'feel' for habitual or general situations and replace 'hard knowledge' with 'difficult material' for natural English. Also add 'even' to show contrast. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I always use writing method to remember.

✓ I always use the writing method to remember.

Countable noun phrase 'writing method' needs the definite article 'the' to refer to a specific method the speaker uses. Alternatively, 'a writing method' could be used if not specific. Also 'writing method' is uncommon; consider 'writing things down' or 'taking notes'. Grammar problem type ID:17

× Yes, last weekend I forgot the important thing, which is my best friend's birthday.

✓ Yes, last weekend I forgot something important: my best friend's birthday.

Use simple past 'forgot' is correct, but phrasing 'the important thing, which is' is wordy and awkward. Replace with 'something important: my best friend's birthday' for natural expression. Grammar problem type ID:5

× At that time I was going to another city, so I forgot his birthday.

✓ At that time I was traveling to another city, so I forgot his birthday.

'Going to another city' is grammatical but 'was going' is vague; 'traveling to another city' is clearer. Use consistent past continuous to describe ongoing past action. Preposition use is acceptable but clarity improves with better verb choice. Grammar problem type ID:11

× After that I asked her for pardon and buy a new present to her.

✓ After that I asked her to forgive me and bought a new present for her.

Pronouns and verb forms were incorrect: 'asked her for pardon' is unnatural; use 'asked her to forgive me'. Parallel verb forms require past tense 'bought' to match 'asked'. Preposition with 'present' is 'for her', not 'to her'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Well in my daily life I need to remember a lot of things such as some knowledge and family members birthday and my girlfriend memory date for example.

✓ Well, in my daily life I need to remember a lot of things such as some knowledge, my family members' birthdays, and my girlfriend's important dates, for example.

Articles and possessives were missing: use plural possessive 'family members' birthdays' and 'girlfriend's'. 'Memory date' is not idiomatic; 'important dates' works. Add commas for clarity and 'some knowledge' is acceptable but vague. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I just remember the one of the memory days.

✓ I only remembered one of the important dates.

Tense and agreement: context refers to past forgetting, so use past 'remembered'. 'the one of the memory days' is ungrammatical; use 'one of the important dates'. Also 'just' changed to 'only' for nuance. Grammar problem type ID:27

× So my friend and my girlfriend is angry.

✓ So my friend and my girlfriend are angry.

Compound subject 'my friend and my girlfriend' requires plural verb 'are', not singular 'is'. Ensure subject-verb agreement in number. Grammar problem type ID:27

× Actually, what I need to remember important things, I usually wear them down or record it in my to remember it, because I think remember important thing is very crucial to me.

✓ Actually, when I need to remember important things, I usually write them down or record them, because I think remembering important things is very crucial to me.

Original sentence has multiple structural problems: incorrect phrase order 'what I need to remember important things', wrong verb 'wear' instead of 'write', inconsistent pronouns 'them' vs 'it', and missing gerund 'remembering'. Correct by reordering, using 'write them down', using plural pronouns consistently, and 'remembering' as gerund after 'think'. Grammar problem type ID:26}]}