记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 다소 중복되고 불필요한 표현이 많습니다. 답변은 주제문으로 바로 시작하고, 추가 정보는 간결하게 연결어를 사용하여 구체적으로 제시하세요. 예를 들어 ‘when I was young’과 ‘in my youth’ 같은 중복 표현을 제거하고, 어떤 방식으로 암기를 잘 했는지(예: 암기 기술, 습관) 짧게 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

範例: Yes, I’m fairly good at memorizing. When I was a student, I excelled in biology and social studies because I used mnemonic devices and regular review sessions. As a result, I could recall facts and dates quickly during exams.

建議: 문법과 표현에서 오류가 눈에 띕니다(예: 'Contra contradictory statement', 시제·어순 오류, 복수 표기). 자연스럽게 답을 시작하고 구체적인 예를 1~2개만 들며 이유나 결과를 연결어로 설명하세요. 예: 'Yes, I often forget...'로 시작하고 결과로 시간을 낭비한다고 덧붙이세요. 또한 관사와 복수형을 정확히 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, I often forget small but important things, like where I left my car keys or my phone. As a result, I sometimes waste a lot of time searching for them before work.

建議: 'abundant'는 이 문맥에서 어색합니다. 더 자연스러운 단어(eg. many, a lot of)를 쓰고, 주제문 다음에 구체적인 항목을 연결어로 나열하세요. 예: 'I need to remember appointments, deadlines, and visitors.' 또한 직장에서 왜 중요한지 한 문장으로 이유를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: I need to remember many things in my daily life, especially at work. For example, I have to remember meeting times, deadlines, and who will visit my office, because missing these can cause delays or inconvenience for others.

建議: 중복 단어와 불완전한 문장이 보입니다('The the', 'a a iPad', 'I no write down'). 답변 구조를 개선해 주제문→방법→구체적 방법 순으로 말하세요. 어떤 앱인지, 어떻게 사용하는지(예: 알림 설정, 카테고리별 정리) 구체적으로 설명하면 점수 향상에 도움이 됩니다.

範例: The most effective way for me is to take notes on my iPad using a calendar app. I set reminders for important events and organize tasks into categories so I only get notified for the most urgent items.

× Yes, I'm pretty good at memorizing.

✓ Yes, I'm pretty good at memorizing things.

The original sentence omits the object 'things' which was used elsewhere; adding it clarifies what is being memorized and matches the context. Suggestion: Include the object after 'memorizing' when referring to specific items to improve clarity.

× I'm very confident about memorizing things.

✓ I'm very confident about my ability to memorize things.

Using 'confident about memorizing things' is unnatural; 'confident about my ability to memorize things' correctly uses a noun phrase after 'confident'. Suggestion: Use 'confident about' + noun phrase (my ability) or 'confident in' + gerund.

× So when I was young, in my youth, I was really good at biology and society subjects.

✓ So when I was young, I was really good at biology and social studies.

'Society subjects' is incorrect collocation; the correct term is 'social studies'. Use 'in my youth' is redundant with 'when I was young'. Suggestion: Use standard subject names and avoid redundant phrases.

× The two subjects have a lot of things to memorize, so.

✓ The two subjects required a lot of memorization, so I had to study a lot.

'Have a lot of things to memorize' is wordy and then the sentence fragments ending with 'so.' Rewriting fixes clarity and subject-verb flow. Suggestion: Use 'require' or 'required' and a complete clause after 'so'.

× I know it's very Contra contradictory statement.

✓ I know that's a very contradictory statement.

'Contra contradictory' is incorrect repetition and 'statement' needs an article; 'that's' contracts 'that is'. Suggestion: Use 'a very contradictory statement'.

× I often forgot important things such as where did I put my car key or where did I put my cell phone or so.

✓ I often forget important things, such as where I put my car keys or my cell phone.

When using indirect questions (embedded clauses), do not use auxiliary 'did' and keep present tense 'forget' for habitual action. 'Car key' plural 'car keys' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'where I put' not 'where did I put' and use present tense for habitual actions.

× So I waste a lot of time finding my stuffs.

✓ So I waste a lot of time looking for my stuff.

'Stuffs' is not correct plural; 'stuff' is uncountable. Use 'looking for' instead of 'finding' when searching. Suggestion: Use 'my stuff' and the phrasal verb 'look for'.

× There are really abundant things I have to remember in my daily life.

✓ There are a lot of things I have to remember in my daily life.

'Really abundant things' is unnatural; use 'a lot of things' or 'many things'. Suggestion: Use common quantifiers like 'a lot of' or 'many'.

× At first in my office while I'm working, I have to remember the meeting times and also who will visit my office because it's really important.

✓ At work, I have to remember meeting times and who will visit my office because that's important.

Mixed tense and awkward phrasing: 'At first' and 'while I'm working' unnecessary. Simplify to present tense habitual action and avoid repetition. Suggestion: Use clear time phrase 'At work' and consistent present tense.

× The the most effective way to remember important thing is just take notes.

✓ The most effective way to remember important things is to take notes.

When expressing 'the way to do something,' use 'to' + base verb. Also fix article repetition and plural 'things'. Suggestion: Use 'the most effective way to remember X is to do Y.'

× I use a a iPad and an iPad.

✓ I use an iPad.

Repeated words 'a a iPad and an iPad' is redundant and incorrect article use. Use single clear noun. Suggestion: Eliminate repetition and use correct article 'an' before vowel sound.

× I no write down every single schedule.

✓ I don't write down every single item on my schedule.

'I no write' is incorrect negation; use 'don't'. 'Schedule' needs clearer phrasing: 'item on my schedule'. Suggestion: Use 'I don't' for present negative and be specific about what is not written down.

× I have an app.

✓ I use an app to keep track of my schedule.

'Alone 'I have an app' is grammatically fine but incomplete; adding purpose clarifies. Suggestion: Add the function of the app to make the sentence informative.