记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common grammar errors (e.g. "depends on", "what I study", "because it's important for my job"). Keep to 2–4 sentences. Use vocabulary like "remember", "recall", "important", "recipes".

範例: It depends on what I need to memorise. I usually forget things I consider unimportant, such as some details from my studies, but I always remember recipes because they are essential for my job. For instance, I must recall ingredients and cooking steps when I prepare food for customers.

建議: Provide a complete, coherent anecdote with correct tense and concise structure: begin with a clear topic sentence stating yes/no, then describe the situation briefly using linking words (e.g. "for example", "because", "as a result") and finish with the consequence. Fix grammar (e.g. "a few months ago", "a customer came", "told me what she wanted"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and be specific about what was forgotten and how you handled it.

範例: Yes, I forgot something important a few months ago. A customer came a day early and told me exactly what she wanted me to cook, but I forgot those instructions. As a result, I had to apologise and quickly remake the dish to meet her request, and since then I always note down special orders.

建議: Answer directly and add a brief specific reason with linking words: open with a clear topic sentence, then explain why and give a concrete detail. Correct phrasing (e.g. "recipes", "I work six days a week"). Keep it concise and natural, use vocabulary like "priority", "schedule", "ingredients".

範例: I need to remember the recipes I use at work. Because I work six days a week, it's essential to recall ingredients and cooking steps to serve customers consistently, especially for complex dishes with many components.

建議: Be specific about your memory strategies and give an example: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "I use notes and apps to remember important things"), then explain the method and provide a brief example. Fix grammar (e.g. "too many things", "I write them down in an app"). Use linking words such as "so" and "for example".

範例: I use practical methods to remember important things: I write notes in a notes app and set reminders. For example, when a customer gives a special order, I add it to my app with a reminder so I don't forget it when I start cooking.

× Actually it depends of what things of it.

✓ Actually it depends on what they are.

Use 'depend on' not 'depend of'; 'what things of it' is ungrammatical—use 'what they are' or 'what the things are' for clarity. Suggestion: 'It depends on what they are.'

× For example, I can't really remember what I have been studying because I don't think this is quite important for me.

✓ For example, I can't really remember what I have been studying because I don't think it is very important to me.

Use 'it' to refer to the idea (not 'this' which can be acceptable but 'it' is clearer) and 'quite important for me' is awkward; use 'very important to me.' Also present perfect continuous 'have been studying' is okay if referring to recent study, so keep tense.

× However, I always need to remember the recipe I cook for my customer because it's according to.

✓ However, I always need to remember the recipes I cook for my customers because they are required.

Original sentence ends abruptly ('because it's according to' is incomplete). Also use plural 'recipes' and 'customers' if routine; match pronouns 'they.' Clarify meaning: 'required' or 'necessary' completes the reason.

× Yeah, it happened few months ago when one of my customer she came a day before to told me that the thing that she want me to cook for her on that time, but however I forgot about what she told me on that day.

✓ Yeah, it happened a few months ago when one of my customers came a day early and told me what she wanted me to cook for her, but I forgot what she had told me that day.

Use 'a few months ago' (missing article), 'one of my customers' (plural + possessive), remove redundant pronoun 'she', use 'came a day early' or 'a day before', use past simple 'came' and 'wanted', and past perfect 'had told' to show earlier action. Remove 'however' when already using 'but.'

× So when she.

✓ So when she arrived, I didn't remember her order.

Original is a sentence fragment. Complete the thought: state what happened when she arrived. Use past tense to match narrative.

× The most important thing I need to remember is the recipe I cook for my customer as I am working almost six days a week so the that's the most important part for me to remember.

✓ The most important thing I need to remember is the recipe I cook for my customers, because I work almost six days a week, so that's the most important part for me to remember.

Use plural 'customers' for general statements, use 'I work' (present simple) rather than 'I am working' for habitual action, remove extra 'the' before 'that's.' Add commas for clarity.

× I try to memorize but it's something that too many thing stuck on my brain.

✓ I try to memorize, but there are too many things stuck in my brain.

Use 'there are' for existence and plural 'things.' 'Stuck in my brain' is the correct preposition. 'Too many thing' should be 'too many things.'

× I would definitely list down on my apps.

✓ I would definitely list them in my apps.

Use 'list' with 'in' or 'on' depending on context; 'list down' is redundant—use 'list' and include the object 'them.' Prefer 'in my apps' or 'on my app.'