工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接但过于简短，缺乏具体信息和扩展。应在主题句后补充一两句具体细节（如学习的专业、学校或年级）并使用连接词衔接，使回答更自然连贯。保持不超过5句。

範例: I'm a student in Shanghai. I study computer science at Shanghai University, currently in my third year. I enjoy practical projects and internships because they help me apply what I learn.

建議: 句子有语法和表达问题（如时态和机构名称的表达不清）。应先明确身份（working/doing internship），用正确时态并补充职位或职责。使用连接词解释时间或职责。

範例: I recently started working at Shanghai Pingers Group as a marketing intern. I mainly assist with social media campaigns and content creation, which helps me gain real-world experience.

建議: 表达混乱且重复，语法和词汇使用不准确（例如 'employ it' 不合适）。回答应先给出明确立场，再用一到两句具体原因支持，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'however'。避免重复并用更地道的表达描述薪资和工作价值。

範例: I'm not very satisfied with it because the salary is quite low, and the role doesn't match my long-term goals. However, I might stay for the experience if I can learn useful skills.

建議: 回答偏向谈城市而非工作地点，且句子有语法问题（如 'they have high technology' 和 'it's city views is'）。应直接回应对工作的喜好，若要谈城市可作为补充，使用连接词并给出具体例子（如便利设施或行业机会）。

範例: Yes, I like working in Shanghai because it offers many tech companies and networking opportunities. The city is also vibrant and has beautiful waterfront views, which makes living here enjoyable.

建議: 回答表达了想法但语法重复且不够具体。应先给出清晰计划（留在本地或去外地），然后用连接词补充原因和具体目标（如想体验不同文化或提升职业技能）。

範例: I plan to continue working in Shanghai for a few years to build my career, but I also want to travel and work in other cities to experience different cultures and broaden my professional perspective.

× I'm starting in Shanghai Pingers group.

✓ I started at Shanghai Pingers Group.

原句使用現在進行式“I'm starting”表達過去或已經開始的工作不合適。根據面試語境，學生應該用過去式或現在完成式描述已開始的工作。建議使用過去式“started”或現在完成式“have started/started working”視實際情況。注意公司名稱前常用介詞“at”。（簡體中文）

× I think maybe it's not because the salary is too low and I need I want to find some high salaries worth, but maybe I will employ it sometimes.

✓ I don't think it's a good place because the salary is too low, and I want to find a job with a higher salary; maybe I will work there sometimes.

原句結構混亂，有重複短語“I need I want”，語序和搭配不當。應把否定意見、原因和打算分成清晰分句，將“high salaries worth”改為常用搭配“a job with a higher salary”，並用“work there sometimes”表達“偶爾會去那裡工作”。（簡體中文）

× Yes, I like Shanghai because Shanghai is a big city and they have high technology and also it's city views is very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I like Shanghai because it is a big city, it has advanced technology, and its city views are very beautiful.

原句中使用“they”指代“Shanghai”是不正確的單數代詞，應用“it”。“it's city views is”存在所有格和動詞單複數錯誤，應為“its city views are”。同時“high technology”更自然表達為“advanced technology”或“high-tech”.（簡體中文）

× Maybe I will still in Shanghai, but I want I also want to go outside and to feel different cities and the local culture.

✓ Maybe I will stay in Shanghai, but I also want to go elsewhere to experience different cities and local cultures.

原句缺少動詞“stay”導致句子不完整，且有重複“I want I also want”。“go outside”在此語境應改為“go elsewhere”或“travel”，並將“to feel different cities and the local culture”改為更自然的“to experience different cities and local cultures”。（簡體中文）}]}