工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は内容が伝わるが、文法ミスや不自然な表現がある。トピック文を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめ、不要な冗長さを避けること。例えば“falling language”は誤りで、"foreign language"や"language studies"を使うべき。学年や専攻については一文で明確に述べ、追加情報は接続詞でつなぐこと。発音や語順も注意する。

範例: I'm a third-year university student majoring in language studies, focusing mainly on English. I also study Chinese as a second language, and my courses concentrate on linguistics topics such as phonetics and bilingualism.

建議: 意味は伝わるが語彙や表現の誤り（"missed university student", "clam school"）が目立つ。まず直接に答え、次に詳細を短く付け加える。単語は正確に選び、文法上の不自然さを直す。頻度を述べる際は"sometimes"の位置や語順に注意する。

範例: I’m not employed full-time because I’m a student, but I work part-time as a teacher at a cram school. I sometimes teach children English, math, and Japanese.

建議: 回答は明確で理由も述べられており良い。より自然にするために接続詞を使って文を滑らかにつなぎ、語彙を少し改善するとさらに良い。例えば"the pay is quite good and the schedule is flexible, so it fits my studies"のように主語を明確にする。

範例: Yes, it’s a good place to work for a university student. I only work two or three times a week, so the pay is decent and the schedule is flexible, which fits my studies. Also, I’ve been able to improve my teaching skills by working with children.

建議: 内容は繰り返しが多くやや冗長。肯定のトピック文の後に1〜2文で理由をまとめ、同じ情報を繰り返さないようにする。自然なフレーズ（"I love my job"や"it suits my study schedule"）を使うと良い。

範例: Yes, I love the place where I work. I only teach two or three times a week, so the pay is decent and the flexible hours suit my study schedule. The job has also given me valuable experience working with young children.

建議: 良い回答で将来の希望が明確に述べられている。さらに説得力を持たせるために、具体的な仕事の種類や国、どのように英語能力を伸ばしたいかを短く追加すると良い。接続詞で意図を明確に結ぶこと。

範例: I haven't decided on concrete plans yet, but I’d like to make full use of my English skills. For instance, I hope to work for an international company abroad—perhaps in Singapore or Canada—so I can gain professional experience and improve my English through daily use.

× I'm a university student and my major is falling language so mainly English and I do learn Chinese as a second language.

✓ I'm a university student and my major is foreign languages, mainly English, and I also study Chinese as a second language.

The sentence used 'falling language' which is incorrect; the correct term is 'foreign languages'. 'Do learn' is unnecessary and awkward; use 'also study'. The structure was unclear so reordering clarifies meaning. Suggestion: replace incorrect adjective phrase and use 'also study' for second activity.

× I'm in the third year student.

✓ I'm a third-year student.

The original mixes noun and modifier forms; use the compound adjective 'third-year' before 'student' and include the article 'a'. Suggestion: use 'I'm a third-year student' or 'I'm in my third year.'

× My study is mainly about linguistics such as phonetics, bilingualism.

✓ My studies are mainly about linguistics, such as phonetics and bilingualism.

Use plural 'studies' to refer to academic work. Add 'and' to connect items in a list. This improves grammatical number agreement and list structure. Suggestion: say 'My studies are mainly about linguistics, such as phonetics and bilingualism.'

× Umm, I missed university student so I do not have a specific work, but as a part time job I am a teacher in a clam school.

✓ Umm, I'm a university student, so I do not have a permanent job, but I work part time as a teacher in a cram school.

'Missed university student' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'I'm a university student'. 'Specific work' is vague; 'permanent job' fits. 'Part time job I am a teacher in a clam school' has word order and typo errors: 'cram school' is correct. Suggestion: use 'I work part time as a teacher in a cram school.'

× I sometimes teach children English, math and Japanese as well.

✓ I sometimes teach children English, math, and Japanese as well.

Grammatically this sentence is fine aside from punctuation (Oxford comma) for clarity. No tense change needed. Suggestion: include commas to clearly separate items.

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Is it a good place to work?

This question is correct as written; no change required. Explanation: correct use of 'be' in question form. (Included for completeness.)

× I work two or three times a week.

✓ I work two or three times a week.

Present simple is correctly used to describe habitual action. No change needed.

× The pay is quite good and flexible, schedule fits my studies, and I've been able to develop my teaching skills by working with children.

✓ The pay is quite good and the schedule is flexible; it fits my studies, and I've been able to develop my teaching skills by working with children.

Sentence lacked articles and clear connectors. Add 'the' before 'schedule' and split clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use semicolon or conjunctions to join related clauses and include definite article.

× Yes, I really love the place I'm working right now.

✓ Yes, I really love the place where I'm working right now.

Adding 'where' makes the relative clause grammatical and natural. Suggestion: use 'the place where I'm working' or 'my workplace.'

× It is a good place to work as a university student.

✓ It is a good place to work for a university student.

Use 'for' to indicate suitability for someone. 'As' is awkward here. Suggestion: use 'for' to express suitability: 'a good place to work for a university student.'

× I work 2-3 times a week and so the payment is quite decent and the schedule is flexible so that it fits my studies and I've gained valuable teaching experience by working with young children.

✓ I work two to three times a week, so the pay is quite decent and the schedule is flexible, which fits my studies, and I've gained valuable teaching experience by working with young children.

Use words for numbers in running text and 'pay' is more natural than 'payment'. Insert commas and relative pronoun 'which' to connect clauses. Suggestion: break into shorter sentences if needed for clarity.

× I haven't decided on any concrete plans yet, but I'd like to make full use of my English skills.

✓ I haven't decided on any concrete plans yet, but I'd like to make full use of my English skills.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Present perfect 'haven't decided' and conditional 'I'd like' are appropriate.

× For example, I'm hoping to work abroad in an international company so I can gain experience and improve my language ability.

✓ For example, I'm hoping to work abroad for an international company so I can gain experience and improve my language ability.

Change 'in an international company' to 'for an international company' to indicate employment. Tense and modality are appropriate. Suggestion: use 'for' when talking about working for an employer.