工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct articles and tense, avoid repetition, and structure answer with a clear topic sentence followed by brief supporting details. Keep it within 2–3 sentences. Mention job title, company, and duration succinctly.

範例: I work as an interior designer at an architectural firm called Fixwood on Commonly Main Road. I have been there for two years since graduating with a BBA in 2021.

建議: Be concise and use linking words for clarity. Correct prepositions and measurements, and avoid repeating information already given. Start with a direct location statement, then add a short detail about distance and role.

範例: I work at Fixwood, an architectural firm on Kamanahalli Main Road, about five kilometres from the city centre. I have been an interior designer there for two years.

建議: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion then two specific reasons using linking words (because/and). Fix grammar and use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘departments’, ‘consultancies’, ‘neighbours’). Avoid vague phrases like 'many types.'

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because we share a building with several consultancies and IT companies, which creates a professional atmosphere. Also, our firm is on the third floor and we have friendly neighbours, so lunchtime interactions are pleasant.

建議: Give a clear direct answer followed by specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid informal words like 'gossip'—use 'chat' or 'socialise.' Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I really like working there because the building hosts several consultancy and IT companies, so the environment is dynamic. At lunchtime I often meet colleagues from other firms and we chat, which makes breaks enjoyable.

建議: Structure your future plans clearly: state immediate plan, then long-term goal, and explain reasons or steps. Correct incomplete sentences and unclear phrases (‘The name of my father’ is unclear). Use linking words (then, after that) and be specific about intentions (e.g., start a firm, hire graduates).

範例: In the next two years I plan to continue working at Fixwood to gain more experience, and then I want to start my own interior design firm under my family name. My goal is to attract clients and provide job opportunities for recent design graduates.

× I'm currently working as a interior designer in an architectural firm called Fixwood that is situated in Commonly Main Road.

✓ I'm currently working as an interior designer in an architectural firm called Fixwood that is situated on Commonly Main Road.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound (interior) not 'a'; use preposition 'on' for named streets or roads. Also 'Commonly' may be a proper name but requires 'on'. Suggestion: 'an interior designer' and 'situated on Commonly Main Road'.

× I've been working there for two years that is after my undergraduation in BBA that is Bachelor of Business Administration from 2021.

✓ I've been working there for two years; I completed my BBA (Bachelor of Business Administration) in 2021.

Original sentence mixes time clauses and uses 'that is' awkwardly. Use clear clauses: duration of work and past completion of degree. Replace 'undergraduation in BBA' with 'I completed my BBA' and specify year. Use semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× I'm working in an architectural firm called Fixwood which is situated now Kamanahalli main road that is a 5 kilometres from the city centre.

✓ I'm working in an architectural firm called Fixwood, which is situated on Kamanahalli Main Road, about 5 kilometres from the city centre.

Use 'on' for roads, and 'about' or 'approximately' before distances; 'a 5 kilometres' is incorrect—use '5 kilometres' or 'a 5-kilometre drive' depending on context. Also add commas for the nonrestrictive clause.

× I've been working there for two years as an interior designer after my graduation.

✓ I've been working there for two years as an interior designer since my graduation.

Use 'since' to indicate starting point in time when combined with present perfect continuous. 'After my graduation' is vague; 'since my graduation' fits the tense and meaning.

× Yes, obviously some people working there from two years.

✓ Yes, obviously some people have been working there for two years.

Missing auxiliary verb for present perfect continuous; with 'people' use plural verb form and 'have been working' to show action continuing from past to present, and use 'for two years' for duration.

× There are many types.

✓ There are many types of businesses.

Sentence 'There are many types' is incomplete; specify what types (e.g., businesses, companies, firms). Add the noun to complete the idea.

× There are many sectors in the building where there are consultation companies also and we have been working there in the third floor as an architecture firm.

✓ There are many sectors in the building, including consultancy companies, and we are on the third floor as an architecture firm.

Use 'including' rather than 'where there are ... also' for clarity; 'consultancy companies' is preferred over 'consultation companies'; use 'on the third floor' (not 'in the third floor'); use present simple 'we are' or present continuous depending on context; keep consistent tense.

× We have very good neighbors as well.

✓ We have very good neighbours as well.

Spelling: use 'neighbours' (British English) or 'neighbors' (American English) consistently. Also sentence is grammatically fine otherwise.

× Yes, I do really love the place where I like work as there are many companies in the building where the consultancy companies and also IT sectors and at the lunch time we are often meet another colleagues and we have gossip together.

✓ Yes, I really love the place where I work because there are many companies in the building, including consultancy firms and IT companies, and at lunchtime we often meet other colleagues and chat together.

Multiple issues: word order ('where I work'), unnecessary 'do', incorrect noun phrases ('consultancy companies and also IT sectors' -> 'consultancy firms and IT companies'), preposition 'at the lunch time' -> 'at lunchtime', verb forms ('we are often meet' -> 'we often meet'), and 'have gossip' -> 'chat' or 'gossip' as a verb. Rephrase for naturalness and correct grammar.

× My future plans are to work in the same firm where I'm currently working for the next two years and start my own firm.

✓ My future plans are to work at the same firm where I'm currently employed for the next two years and then start my own firm.

Use 'at' or 'in' consistently for workplaces; 'employed' is formal and fits; add 'then' to indicate sequence of events. Keep future intention clear; present continuous 'I'm currently employed' is fine with 'plans are to'.

× The name of my father.

✓ I plan to name the firm after my father.

Original fragment 'The name of my father.' is incomplete. Provide a full sentence explaining intention: naming firm after father.

× The to get clients and introduce and to give work for many students as well.

✓ I also plan to get clients, introduce the firm to them, and provide work opportunities for many students.

Original is fragmented and uses incorrect infinitive structure. Use parallel verbs 'get', 'introduce', 'provide' and correct preposition 'for students' -> 'work opportunities for students'. Combine into a clear coordinated list.