工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural by giving a clear topic sentence and one brief supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "at the moment" and "currently" together) and minor grammatical errors (use "full-time" and "in high school").

範例: I’m a full-time student; I’m currently studying in high school. I’m focusing on my studies for now, so I’m not working professionally yet.

建議: Give a full, grammatically correct response that directly answers the question and adds a short explanation. Use the correct verb form ("I don't work" or "I'm not working") and, if relevant, mention past or future plans to add detail.

範例: I don’t work at the moment. I’m concentrating on my studies, but I might look for a part-time job next year.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence that acknowledges you don’t currently work, then describe the past job with specific details and correct tense. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "when") to make the answer coherent and avoid unclear phrases like "your mom has a coffee."

範例: I don’t work now; however, a couple of years ago I worked in a café owned by a friend’s family. It was a friendly place and I learned customer service skills while working there.

建議: Respond clearly by referencing the past job and using correct grammar. Give specific reasons but keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Replace vague phrases like "have a money like a salary" with "earned a salary."

範例: I loved my previous job because it kept me productive and I learned a lot about serving customers. Another benefit was free meals and a small salary, which made the job enjoyable and worthwhile.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating your plan, then briefly explain reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Remove filler words ("umm", repeated words) and fix grammar ("I decided to become a journalist").

範例: I plan to become a journalist because I’m passionate about media and public relations. I’m interested in many fields, but journalism appeals to me since it combines writing, investigating, and communicating with the public.

× I am a full time student at the moment. I am in a high school and although I am not working professionally yet.

✓ I am a full-time student at the moment. I am in high school, and I am not working professionally yet.

Use 'full-time' with a hyphen as a compound adjective. Use 'in high school' (no article) when referring to being enrolled. The second clause needs a main verb; replace 'although I am not working professionally yet.' with 'and I am not working professionally yet.' or keep 'although' but include a contrasting clause. Here 'and' fits the context and keeps present tense consistent.

× Currently I'm not work.

✓ Currently I'm not working.

The verb 'work' requires the -ing form after 'am not' (present continuous). 'I'm not work' is ungrammatical because 'be' + not + base verb is incorrect; use 'I'm not working' to indicate current non-employment.

× Currently I am not work, nevertheless when I was a young, maybe two or three years before, I am working in the cafe since I have a friend and your mom has a coffee, so we are working there.

✓ Currently I am not working. Nevertheless, when I was younger, about two or three years ago, I worked in a cafe because a friend of mine and her mother owned it, so we worked there.

Multiple tense and word-choice issues: 'am not work' should be 'am not working' (present continuous). 'When I was a young' should be 'when I was younger.' 'Two or three years before' should be 'two or three years ago.' The action in the past needs past tense 'worked' rather than 'am working' or 'we are working.' Use 'because a friend of mine and her mother owned it' instead of 'since I have a friend and your mom has a coffee' for clarity and correct possession. Maintain past tense throughout the past-time clause.

× I worked in a cafe because a friend of mine and her mother owned it, so we worked there.

✓ I worked in a cafe because a friend of mine and her mother owned it, so I worked there.

The original mixed subject 'we worked there' is unclear after stating ownership by two other people. If the student is describing their own work, keep the subject consistent: 'I worked there.' Use 'we' only if speaking of working together; ensure pronoun matches who performed the action.

× I love my past work with all my heart because I spend my time really productive and also I can just eat for free or even have a money like a salary.

✓ I loved my previous job with all my heart because I spent my time productively, and I could eat for free or even receive some money as a salary.

Use 'previous job' or 'past job' instead of 'past work.' Match tense to the past experience: 'loved' and 'spent.' 'Spend time productive' is incorrect; use the adverb 'productively.' 'Have a money' is wrong; say 'receive some money' or 'get a salary.' 'Can' becomes 'could' when describing past ability or allowance.

× To be honest, the decision was really complex for me because I, I am interested umm in a lot of spheres. So umm eventually I decided to become a journalist because I love media and PR umm so that's why I do this decision make.

✓ To be honest, the decision was really complex for me because I was interested in many fields. Eventually I decided to become a journalist because I love media and PR, so that's why I made this decision.

Keep past tense consistent when talking about the decision: use 'was interested' and 'decided' and 'made this decision.' 'A lot of spheres' is unnatural; use 'many fields.' 'Do this decision make' is incorrect word order and verb choice; use 'made this decision.' Remove filler words like 'umm' in formal responses. Maintain consistent tense and natural collocations.

× I love my past work with all my heart because I spent my time productively, and I could eat for free or even receive some money as a salary.

✓ I loved my previous job with all my heart because I spent my time productively, and I could eat for free or even receive some money as a salary.

This repeats a previous correction emphasizing 'with all my heart' is acceptable, but ensure past tense 'loved.' The preposition use is fine here; the main issue was tense. Keep prepositions consistent: 'receive money as a salary' is acceptable though 'receive a salary' is more natural.