工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers (uh), and use correct structures to state your study and career goal. Add a brief reason or detail using a linking word.

範例: I am a management student at National University and I hope to become a banker in the long term because I am interested in finance and risk management.

建議: Answer directly and simply. Say you do not work now, avoid repetition and filler words, and give a concise reason using a linking phrase like 'because' or 'as'.

範例: I don't work at the moment because I am concentrating on my university studies and want to focus on my coursework.

建議: This answer is unclear and inconsistent with earlier response. First, clarify whether you actually work somewhere. If you mean a café, say so clearly, correct vocabulary, and give one reason why it's good using a linking word (for example, 'because'). Keep it concise and grammatical.

範例: If you mean a café: Yes, it is a good place to work because the atmosphere is friendly and I can improve my customer service skills by serving many customers.

建議: Be precise and avoid repetition. Give a direct opinion (yes/no) and support it with a specific reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Mention a short example or frequency if helpful.

範例: Yes, I enjoy working there because I like interacting with customers; for example, I often make coffee for several regulars on Saturdays.

建議: State your future plan clearly and use correct vocabulary (future, want to be a teacher). Give a concise reason why, using a linking word such as 'because', and avoid fillers and generalisations. Be specific about what kind of teacher or why teaching appeals to you.

範例: In the future I would like to become a teacher because I enjoy helping children learn and I want to make a positive impact on their education.

× I'm a student at National University, uh, studying management. Uh, my long term goal banker.

✓ I'm a student at National University, studying management. My long-term goal is to be a banker.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' to link 'goal' and its complement and misses the infinitive 'to be'. Also 'long term' should be hyphenated as 'long-term' when used as a compound adjective. Use present simple 'is' for a current state and the infinitive 'to be' to express the intended profession.

× Umm, although currently I don't do anything because I am a student and I want to be full confidence in my study. That's why I don't do anything do don't work.

✓ Although currently I don't do any paid work because I am a student and I want to be fully confident in my studies. That's why I don't work.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'be full confidence' (should be 'be fully confident') and wrong plural 'study' -> 'studies'. 'Do anything' is vague; 'do any paid work' is clearer. Also redundant 'do don't work' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't work'. Adverb 'fully' modifies adjective 'confident'.

× Yeah, this is a good place for work and I work there in a cave, in a cave and I make a coffee and huge customer have there and they order coffee and I serve this.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work. I work there in a café, and I make coffee. Many customers come there, they order coffee, and I serve them.

Use 'place to work' rather than 'place for work'. 'Cave' is wrong word; use 'café'. 'A coffee' -> 'coffee' (uncountable) or 'make coffee'. 'Huge customer have there' is ungrammatical; correct to 'many customers come there'. Pronoun agreement: 'serve this' -> 'serve them'. Also split into clearer sentences.

× I enjoy my work and I enjoy like my customer, the uh, they, they order and I make coffee on Saturday and one customer.

✓ I enjoy my work and I like my customers. They place orders and I make coffee on Saturdays for my customers.

Pronoun and noun usage: 'enjoy like my customer' is incorrect; separate verbs 'enjoy' and 'like' and use plural 'customers'. Clarify 'they order' -> 'they place orders'. 'On Saturday and one customer' is unclear; likely intended 'on Saturdays' and mention 'a customer' if needed. Use plural habitual time 'on Saturdays' for repeated actions.

× My feature work plans are uh, uh, teacher. And well, every people wants be good teacher because they want to teach others children like that's why I wanna be.

✓ My future career plan is to be a teacher. Many people want to be good teachers because they want to teach children; that's why I want to be one too.

Errors: 'feature' -> 'future'. 'Work plans are teacher' lacks verb and correct noun forms; use 'career plan is to be a teacher'. 'Every people' -> 'many people' or 'everyone'. 'Wants be' -> 'want to be'. 'Others children' -> 'children' or 'other people's children' depending on meaning. Use 'want to be one too' to avoid repetition. Maintain present simple for general truths.