工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., saying 'I'm studying IELTS' twice). Add one specific reason or plan and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I both work and study. I work as a cook and I am studying for the IELTS because I plan to work abroad, and the test is required for immigration and job applications.

建議: Start with a clear current-location topic sentence, then give brief, specific background. Correct grammar errors (use past tense correctly, avoid double negatives) and avoid irrelevant comments. Use linking words like 'previously' or 'now'.

範例: I currently work as a chef in Dubai, UAE. Previously, I worked in Taiwan for eleven years — first three years as a welder and then eight years as a machine operator.

建議: Answer directly then provide one or two clear reasons with correct grammar and coherent linking. Avoid unclear sentences like 'Give it a chance to work in another country' and finish your thought. Be specific about how the weather affects you.

範例: Not really. The extreme heat in Dubai, especially in summer, makes it hard to concentrate and work comfortably. For that reason I would prefer to work in a cooler country like Ireland.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then two specific, linked reasons. Avoid repeating ideas and improve grammar (e.g., 'I don't like it because', 'there is a lot of garbage', 'crowded'). End with a concise preference sentence.

範例: No, I don't like it because it is extremely hot and the area is often dirty and overcrowded. If I could choose, I would prefer to work in Ireland because it is cleaner and has a milder climate.

建議: Begin with a clear statement of your plan, then give specific reasons. Correct grammar (subject–verb agreement, word order) and be concise. Avoid vague phrases like 'maybe I will start all my dreams' — specify what you hope to achieve.

範例: My plan is to move to Ireland and work there as a welder. I want to work in a milder climate and build a stable career, not because my friends are there but because it fits my long-term goals.

× I work and study at the same time.

✓ I work and study at the same time.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple for habitual actions. (Included for completeness; no error to correct.)

× I am a cook by profession and I'm currently studying IELTS.

✓ I am a cook by profession and I'm currently studying for the IELTS.

Missing preposition 'for' before 'the IELTS'. This is not a third person singular problem but a preposition omission; corrected to match standard collocation 'study for the IELTS'. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations (study for, prepare for).

× It's been my passion because I want to continue my work in other country.

✓ It's been my passion because I want to continue my work in another country.

Incorrect article use and noun form: 'other country' should be 'another country'. Use 'another' with singular countable nouns. Suggestion: use 'another' before singular nouns and 'other' before plural nouns or uncountable nouns.

× That's why I'm studying IELTS because it's one of the required.

✓ That's why I'm studying for the IELTS because it's one of the requirements.

Awkward structure and missing noun form: 'one of the required' is incomplete. Use 'one of the requirements'. Also add 'for' after 'studying'. Suggestion: ensure noun phrase completeness after 'one of the...' (one of the + plural noun).

× Before I work in Taiwan for 11 years, I work as a welder for three years and eight years as a machine operator.

✓ Before, I worked in Taiwan for 11 years; I worked as a welder for three years and as a machine operator for eight years.

Incorrect tense: describing past experience requires past simple 'worked'. Also repetition of 'I work' must be changed. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past periods and include 'for' with durations and repeat 'for' before durations for clarity.

× But now I am working as a chef in Dubai, UAE.

✓ But now I am working as a chef in Dubai, UAE.

Sentence is correct; present continuous is appropriate for current temporary job. (Included for completeness.)

× This is not really my passion, but I'm I don't have nothing to do.

✓ This is not really my passion, but I don't have anything else to do.

Multiple errors: extra 'I'm' and a double negative 'don't have nothing' (incorrect). Use 'anything' with negative verbs: 'I don't have anything'. Also remove stray 'I'm'. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and proofread for stray words.

× No, actually, because we all know what's the weather in Dubai, it's so hot, especially in summer.

✓ No, actually, we all know the weather in Dubai is very hot, especially in summer.

Awkward clause 'what's the weather in Dubai' inside sentence; better: 'we all know the weather in Dubai is very hot'. Also 'so hot' can be 'very hot' for formality. Suggestion: combine clauses clearly and avoid colloquial 'what's' in formal answers.

× So you will you cannot concentrate of your work in this kind of weather.

✓ So you cannot concentrate on your work in this kind of weather.

Extra 'will' and wrong preposition 'of'. Remove unnecessary modal 'will' and use 'on' with 'concentrate'. Suggestion: use 'concentrate on' and avoid redundant modals.

× Give it a chance to work in another country.

✓ I would like a chance to work in another country.

Fragment: 'Give it a chance to work...' is unclear and ungrammatical. Rephrase to express personal desire: 'I would like a chance...' Suggestion: use complete sentence with subject and clear verb when expressing wishes.

× I want to work in Ireland because it's a cold place and for me when you feel.

✓ I want to work in Ireland because it's a cold place and I prefer that climate.

Incomplete and unclear clause 'for me when you feel' is ungrammatical. Replace with clear expression 'I prefer that climate' or 'I feel comfortable in cooler weather'. Suggestion: state personal preference clearly and avoid fragments.

× No, I don't like because the weather is so extremely hot and I find it dirty because a lot of garbage all around the area and it's also crowded.

✓ No, I don't like it because the weather is extremely hot, there is a lot of garbage around the area, and it's also crowded.

Missing object 'it' after 'don't like'. 'so extremely' is redundant; use 'extremely'. Also sentence needed proper clauses: 'there is a lot of garbage' uses 'there is' construction. Suggestion: include necessary objects and use 'there is' for existence of garbage.

× If given a chance to work in other country, I want to work in Ireland that I know.

✓ If given a chance to work in another country, I want to work in Ireland because I know it.

Article error 'other country' should be 'another country'. Awkward ending 'that I know' unclear; replace with 'because I know it' or 'which I know'. Suggestion: use 'another' with singular nouns and provide a clear clause explaining familiarity.

× My future plans is that to work in Ireland as a welder.

✓ My future plan is to work in Ireland as a welder.

Subject-verb agreement and noun form: 'plans is' mismatched; use singular 'plan is' or plural 'plans are'. Also remove extra 'that' before infinitive. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and use correct infinitive structure 'to work'.

× It's not because my friends are also working there, but this is one of my dreams ever since to work in a milder condition, weather and maybe I will start all my dreams.

✓ It's not because my friends are working there; this has been my dream for a long time: to work in milder weather, and maybe I will achieve my dreams there.

Several problems: awkward phrases 'ever since', 'milder condition, weather', and 'start all my dreams'. Rephrase: use 'has been my dream for a long time' and 'milder weather'. Use 'achieve my dreams' rather than 'start'. Suggestion: simplify and use natural collocations (milder weather, achieve dreams).