工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 在回答时要更直接、有条理，并减少重复和填充词。开头直接说明现在的身份，然后用一两句具体说明工作内容和客户类型。可注意时态准确与连贯表达。

範例: I'm currently a freelance software engineer. I used to work for a tech company, but now I design and build websites for small businesses and startups, handling both front-end and back-end development.

建議: 回答需更准确地表达地点名称并使用连词使回答流畅。可以给出更多具体细节，如城市特点或工作机会的类型。注意语法（时态和冠词）。

範例: I live and work in New Taipei City in Taiwan, and I've been there for almost five years. It's a major urban area with many tech companies, so there are plenty of opportunities for software and other engineering roles.

建議: 结构要更清晰：先给总体观点，然后用连词列出理由并举例。避免重复表述，使用恰当连接词（however, although, because）。

範例: It depends. Although New Taipei City can be very crowded and commuting is often stressful, it offers many job opportunities in the tech industry, so overall it's a good place to work if you prioritize career prospects.

建議: 避免重复和语音填充（uh）。先直接表明态度，然后给1–2个简洁原因并说明如何处理这种情况。注意词汇准确（I don't have a choice / most important / job opportunities）。

範例: Honestly, I don't enjoy living in New Taipei City because it's too crowded. However, I stay there because it has the most job opportunities in Taiwan, so for now it's a practical choice.

建議: 回答应更具体并连贯说明计划步骤和时间表，减少填充词。可以说明想去的国家、目标职位、以及具体步骤（留学、毕业后找工作、申请工作签证）。

範例: I plan to work as a software engineer abroad. Specifically, I hope to study at a university overseas, complete a master's degree, and then apply for jobs there so I can obtain a work visa and start my career internationally.

× I used to work as a software engineer, uh, I, I worked in uh, tech company, but now I'm a freelancer.

✓ I used to work as a software engineer. I worked in a tech company, but now I'm a freelancer.

句子包含多個獨立子句，使用逗號連接造成逗號拼接（comma splice）。需分成兩句或使用連接詞。此外，“in uh, tech company”缺少冠詞“a”。建議：把長句拆成兩句，並在可數職業場所前加不定冠詞，如“a tech company”。

× I took my job on by myself, so I help my clients to make their website.

✓ I took on work by myself, so I help my clients build their websites.

“took my job on” 用法不自然，應為“took on work”或“started my own business”。“make their website”中動詞應為“build/create”，且“website”為可數名詞，應用複數或加冠詞。建議：使用常見搭配“build websites”或“create a website”。

× I live and work in new type city, Taiwan.

✓ I live and work in New Taipei City, Taiwan.

地名拼寫錯誤且專有名詞應大寫。“new type city”應為“New Taipei City”。建議：專有名詞首字母大寫並使用正確拼寫。

× I live there for almost five years.

✓ I have lived there for almost five years.

描述從過去持續到現在的狀態應使用現在完成時（have lived），而非一般現在時（live）。建議：用現在完成時表示持續時間，如“have lived”。

× It is a good place to find a job such as software engineer or other types of engineer.

✓ It is a good place to find a job as a software engineer or other types of engineer.

“such as”後接例子時語氣不太恰當，改為“as a”更合適以表職業身分；另外可簡化為“as a software engineer or other types of engineer”。建議：當說明職業時用“as a/an + 職業”。

× If you need to go outside to work or you need to commute to your workplace, I think it's not a good place to to live.

✓ If you need to go out to work or commute to your workplace, I think it's not a good place to live.

“go outside to work”用法不自然，應為“go out to work”。句中有重複“to”。建議：簡化為“go out to work”並刪除多餘的“to”。

× But consider about the opportunities. I think totally it's a good place to find a job.

✓ But if you consider the opportunities, I think overall it's a good place to find a job.

“consider about”是不正確搭配，應為“consider”直接接受詞。“totally”在此語域不太正式，改為“overall”。建議：使用正確動詞搭配並選擇更合適的連接詞和副詞。

× Actually, I don't like my place. I don't like live in the New Taipei City because it's too crowded.

✓ Actually, I don't like my place. I don't like living in New Taipei City because it's too crowded.

“like live”語法錯誤，應改為動名詞“like living”。另外地名前通常不加定冠詞“the”除非名稱本身帶有“the”。建議：動詞後用動名詞構成喜好表達，地名去掉不必要的冠詞。

× But I don't have choice because here has the most import, most, uh, the most, uh, the most job of opportunity here in Taiwan.

✓ But I don't have a choice because this place has the most job opportunities in Taiwan.

缺少不定冠詞“a choice”。“here has”語序不自然，應為“this place has”或“There are...”，且“the most import”是破碎片語，正確表達為“the most job opportunities”。建議：加上冠詞並重組句子為標準主謂結構，使用複數“opportunities”。

× So I have no choice. I just live here.

✓ So I have no choice. I just live here.

句子本身語法正確，但語境上若想表達過去一直住到現在可用現在完成時“have lived”。此處可保留原句或改為“I just live here”視語境而定。建議：若強調持續性可改為“I have just been living here”或“I have lived here.”

× I want to work uh, as a software engineer in uh, foreign country.

✓ I want to work as a software engineer in a foreign country.

缺少冠詞“a”在“foreign country”前。建議：在可數單數名詞前加不定冠詞。

× So that's the reason why I took this IELTS exam and my goal is to apply foreign countries university and get the working visa and work there after graduate.

✓ So that's the reason why I took this IELTS exam. My goal is to apply to a university in a foreign country, get a work visa, and work there after I graduate.

句子過長且缺少必要介詞和冠詞。應為“apply to a university”而非“apply university”，並在“foreign countries university”中需使用單數或所有格結構。“working visa”常說“work visa”。“after graduate”應為“after I graduate”。建議：分句表達，使用正確動詞搭配（apply to）、冠詞（a university）、以及主語在“after”從句中。