工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答信息清晰，但句子可更紧凑自然。注意冠词和数词搭配（a master degree → a master’s degree），并可用一两句补充职位或职责让内容更具体。尽量保持不超过5句并避免重复。

範例: I graduated last year with a master’s degree and now work as a quality engineer at a computer manufacturing company. My role involves testing components and coordinating with the assembly team to ensure product reliability.

建議: 回答包含有用细节，但有词汇和表达的小错误（例如 'Tipenanga' 与 '10 minutes walk' 应为 'a 10-minute walk'）。可以使用连接词使句子更流畅并减少重复，例如将便利性合并为一句。

範例: My office is in Taipei Nangang, near the Nangang Exhibition Center metro station, so commuting is convenient — it’s only about a 10-minute walk from the station to the office.

建議: 观点明确，但语言重复且有语法错误（offer → offers；you 可以改为 I/Employees）。避免口头语填充如 'Umm'，并用连接词合并信息使回答更自然与精炼。

範例: Yes, definitely. My company offers a flexible hybrid work policy — I can work from home twice a week and choose flexible hours, which helps me balance work and personal time.

建議: 回答包含具体优点但组织混乱且有重复与语法错误（the the；self room → quiet room/private room；pre also → they also）。建议先给主题句，然后用连词列举具体优点，避免冗长和重复。

範例: Yes, I enjoy working there. The office has well-equipped meeting rooms for client visits and quiet rooms where I can focus on concentrated tasks, and they also provide free coffee and snacks for short afternoon breaks.

建議: 回答目标明确但表达混乱且有语法错误（prefer → would like to; pursue a senior position 更自然；many fragments and unclear parts）。建议使用一到两句清晰表述职业目标和具体行动计划（比如承担更大项目、提升领导能力），并用连接词衔接。

範例: In the next three to five years I would like to stay with my current company and move into a senior role. To achieve this, I am aiming to lead larger projects and gain management experience by mentoring junior colleagues and taking on cross‑department responsibilities.

× I just graduated last year with a master degree and I am now working in a computer manufacturing company.

✓ I just graduated last year with a master's degree and I am now working at a computer manufacturing company.

错误原因：名词短语中缺少所有格和冠词。英语中“master's degree”用所有格形式表示学位；表示在某家公司工作通常用介词“at”而不是“in”。改进建议：学位用“a master's degree”；谈论受雇于某家公司时用“work at”。

× My office is located at Taipei Nangang. It is nearby the Tipenanga Exhibition Center metro station.

✓ My office is located in Taipei Nangang. It is near the Taipei Nangang Exhibition Center metro station.

错误原因：地点介词与词序不当。“located in”用于区域或城区；“nearby”通常作副词或形容词，改为“near”更自然；专有名词拼写应一致。改进建议：用“located in”表示位于某区；用“near”或“near the ... station”。注意专有名词拼写一致。

× It's really convenient to commute from my home to there, and it is only 10 minutes walk away from the station to the office.

✓ It's really convenient to commute from my home to there, and it is only a 10-minute walk from the station to the office.

错误原因：时间和距离表达需要使用复合形容词或冠词，“10 minutes walk”应为“a 10-minute walk”；“to there”不自然，应直接用“there”或“to the office”。改进建议：使用“a + number + -minute + walk”结构，并简化“to there”为“to the office”或“there”。

× My office offer a hybrid work style.

✓ My office offers a hybrid work style.

错误原因：主语“My office”（第三人称单数）与动词“offer”不一致，动词应加-s。改进建议：检查主语人称和数，第三人称单数现在时动词需加-s或-es。

× It's really flexible. Umm, you can work. You can choose to work at home twice a week and the working time is also flexible.

✓ It's really flexible. You can work from home twice a week and the working hours are also flexible.

错误原因：短语重复且时态/搭配不准确。“work at home”常用“work from home”；“working time”更常用复数“working hours”。改进建议：使用常见固定搭配“work from home”和“working hours”。

× For me, definitely yes. My office offer a hybrid work style.

✓ For me, definitely yes. My office offers a hybrid working style.

错误原因：重复之前已指明；另外“hybrid work style”可改为“hybrid working style/working arrangement”。改进建议：保持名词短语的一致性，使用常见表达如“hybrid working style/arrangement”。

× It's really flexible. Umm, you can work. You can choose to work at home twice a week and the working time is also flexible. M.

✓ It's really flexible. You can work from home twice a week and the working hours are also flexible.

错误原因：句子中出现不必要的二人称“you”造成表述不够针对自身经历，应以第一人称描述自己的情况；同时末尾的“M.”是无意义字符。改进建议：用“I can”或保持泛指时去掉无关字符；删除多余的标点或字符。

× Yes, I enjoy working in the office. Umm firstly the the office has great arrangement on the meeting rooms and self room.

✓ Yes, I enjoy working in the office. Firstly, the office has great meeting room arrangements and a quiet room for myself.

错误原因：重复词“the the”；“arrangement on the meeting rooms”搭配不自然，应为“meeting room arrangements”；“self room”不是自然表达，意指“a quiet room for myself”。改进建议：检查重复词，使用自然搭配如“meeting room arrangements”，“a quiet room for myself”。

× I can meet with suppliers and clients in the meeting room and also for the time I need to concentrate on myself.

✓ I can meet suppliers and clients in the meeting room, and also have time to concentrate by myself.

错误原因：“concentrate on myself”在此语境不自然，通常说“concentrate by myself”或“concentrate on my own work”；“meet with”可简化为“meet”。改进建议：使用更地道的表达如“have time to concentrate on my own work”或“concentrate by myself”。

× I can stay in the self room beside the old office.

✓ I can stay in the quiet room next to the main office.

错误原因：“beside the old office”可能不符合语境，应为“next to the main office”或“adjacent to the office”；“self room”用词不当。改进建议：用“next to”或“adjacent to”，并替换“self room”为“quiet room”或“private room”。

× Also pre also provide free coffee and snacks so I can take some break in the afternoon.

✓ Also, the company provides free coffee and snacks, so I can take a break in the afternoon.

错误原因：缺少主语和冠词，动词形式错误（provide -> provides）；句子混乱有重复“also”。改进建议：明确主语为“the company”，主语为第三人称单数时动词加-s；去掉重复词并使用“a break”。

× In the next three to five years, I prefer to stay in my current company but pursue a senior position.

✓ In the next three to five years, I would prefer to stay with my current company but pursue a senior position.

错误原因：“prefer”用于表达现在习惯，谈未来愿望用“would prefer”更礼貌和恰当；“stay in”改为“stay with”。改进建议：在表达未来意愿时使用“would prefer”或“hope to”。

× As for now, I was pers. I am pursuing for handling a high a bigger project and become. Leader which can makes me earn more experience.

✓ As for now, I am pursuing opportunities to handle larger projects and become a leader which will help me gain more experience.

错误原因：句中时态混乱和词形错误：“was pers.”不完整；“pursuing for handling”不正确，动词搭配应为“pursue opportunities to handle”；“a high a bigger project”冗余且比较级错误；“become. Leader which can makes me earn more experience”中句子断裂、动词形式错误（makes -> help/ will help；earn experience 不如 gain experience）。改进建议：保持时态一致使用现在进行或现在时，使用地道搭配如“pursue opportunities to handle larger projects”和“gain more experience”。