工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更简洁、有主句并使用连接词自然衔接细节。注意语法（冠词、复数）和词序，使表达更地道。例如把两句合并成一到两句，使用适当的从句或连接词并修正冠词错误。

範例: I graduated with a degree in journalism, and I am currently looking for a job in the media industry. I would prefer to work in a big city because there are more career opportunities and a better quality of life.

建議: 回答要直接开始主句并用连接词组织附加信息，注意时态一致和名词所有格、冠词使用（university's, full-time）。可用一两句具体说明职务和任务。

範例: I haven't had a full-time job yet, but I completed an internship related to my media studies. During the internship I edited videos for my university's online channel, mainly helping my teachers prepare course materials.

建議: 避免模糊的条件式，用明确时态和自然搭配（avoid 'make mistakes' -> 'making mistakes'；'give guidance'不加冠词）。合并句子避免重复，补充具体例子更有说服力。

範例: Yes, I think it's a great place to work because I felt supported and wasn't afraid of making mistakes. My colleagues and teachers gave me useful guidance and feedback, so I learned a lot and made many pleasant memories.

建議: 回答要用更自然的地点短语（e.g. 'the campus here'），注意复数与单数（facilities）。可以用一两句并用连接词解释原因，给出具体细节如活动或资源。

範例: Yes, I enjoyed working at my university because the campus here is very friendly and supportive. It has good facilities for studying, and I made close friends and received a lot of help from my teachers.

建議: 这条回答语法混乱、表达不清。需要用一到两句清晰陈述未来计划，注意时态、词序和连贯性，去掉填充词（uh）。给出具体目标或时间框架会更好。

範例: My plan is to find a full-time job in the media sector, preferably in a big city, within the next year. I hope to build my career there and enjoy a more active professional life.

× I've just graduated with a degree in journalism, so I'm currently looking for a job in media industry.

✓ I've just graduated with a degree in journalism, so I'm currently looking for a job in the media industry.

定冠词使用问题（归入现在时态问题条目为本句整体时态正确，但短语中缺少定冠词影响习惯用法）。在英文中，表示某一行业或机构时常用定冠词“the”，因此应为“the media industry”。建议养成在“industry/field/channel”等名词前判断是否需要定冠词的习惯。

× I'd prefer to work in a big city because there are more career opportunities and a better quality of life.

✓ I'd prefer to work in a big city because there are more career opportunities and a better quality of life.

原句主谓一致正确，但可注意“a better quality of life”作为不可数名词短语前使用不定冠词“a”为自然表达。此句无需改动。

× I didn't have a full time job in the past but I completed an internship in my major which is media studies.

✓ I didn't have a full-time job in the past, but I completed an internship in my major, which is media studies.

时态使用总体正确，但需注意拼写（full-time）和标点以改善句子流畅性。用逗号分隔定语从句从句起始处更清晰。建议注意复合形容词的连字符和标点。

× There in the internship I edited videos for the universities online channel to help my teachers.

✓ During the internship, I edited videos for the university's online channel to help my teachers.

介词和所有格使用错误。应使用“during the internship”表示在实习期间；“universities online channel”缺少所有格和撇号，应为“university's online channel”。建议注意表示所属关系使用撇号和在表示期间用正确介词。

× Yes, I think it's a great place to work because I would feel supported and not worry about make mistakes.

✓ Yes, I think it's a great place to work because I would feel supported and not worry about making mistakes.

动词形式错误影响副词/动名词使用。动词“worry about”后应加动名词（-ing），因此用“making”。建议记住某些动词后必须跟动名词。

× My colleagues and teachers would give me a guidance and feedback and I would get many pleasant memories.

✓ My colleagues and teachers would give me guidance and feedback, and I would get many pleasant memories.

冠词和代词使用问题。“guidance”和“feedback”为不可数名词，通常不与不定冠词“a”连用。删除“a”并加逗号使句子更通顺。建议学习不可数名词的用法。

× I enjoy working at my university because the campus almost here is very friendly and supportive.

✓ I enjoy working at my university because the campus here is very friendly and supportive.

副词位置和词序问题。短语“almost here”不自然，正确表达应为“the campus here”或“the campus nearby”。建议使用“here”直接修饰地点或用“nearby/around here”替代“almost here”。

× It's been a big part of my life.

✓ It's been a big part of my life.

句子语法正确，无需修改。此处保留原句。

× I have good friends and helpful teachers there and the facility are very convenient for studying.

✓ I have good friends and helpful teachers there, and the facilities are very convenient for studying.

名词复数和量词使用错误。“facility”在指校园的多项设施时应使用复数“facilities”，动词随之改为“are”。建议注意单复数一致。

× My plan is started, get a formal job in the media and enjoy in it and uh into a big city have a currently life.

✓ My plan is to start by getting a formal job in the media, enjoying it, and moving to a big city to have a better life.

时态与句子结构混乱，原句中“is started”用法错误且有多个结构问题。改为不定式结构“is to start”或使用动名词短语可以清晰表达计划；去掉多余词汇并调整词序使语义明确。建议练习使用“plan is to + 动词原形”或“plan to + 动词原形”来表达计划，并注意动词形式和连词的使用。