工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar, and organization. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your job title and years of experience. Use one or two supporting details (why you like it, main responsibilities) with linking words (because, so, therefore). Avoid repetition and reduce to max 4–5 sentences. Correct verb forms (I work as an electromechanical design engineer; I have worked in this field for five years).

範例: I work as an electromechanical design engineer and I have been in this field for five years. I enjoy my job because I solve technical problems in buildings and projects, which is challenging and rewarding. For example, I design systems that improve energy efficiency, so I often collaborate with construction teams to implement practical solutions.

建議: Give a clear, concise answer naming the type or sector of the company and one or two specific features. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar (My company employs many people; colleagues are friendly and helpful). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases like "special" without detail.

範例: I work for a mid-size engineering company that specializes in building services. The workplace has many employees and a friendly culture, so colleagues support each other. As a result, I have had many opportunities to learn new skills through on-the-job training.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons with examples. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and correct noun/verb forms (work environment is supportive). Avoid repeating words and keep to 2–3 sentences. Mention concrete aspects that make it good: management, colleagues, benefits, training, or atmosphere.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the work environment is supportive and colleagues are helpful. For example, managers encourage teamwork and the company provides regular training, so employees can improve their skills and enjoy their jobs.

建議: Clarify meaning—state whether you like the workplace and give clear reasons. Use one topic sentence (Yes, I like my workplace) and 1–2 supporting details explaining what the company provides (training, career development, good benefits). Avoid unclear phrases and fix grammar (the company gives us opportunities and training).

範例: Yes, I like my workplace because the company offers career development and regular training. For example, they fund courses and mentorship programs, which helps me advance my skills and grow professionally.

建議: Make your future plan clear and specific. Start with a topic sentence (I plan to study for a master’s degree / work abroad / enroll at a university). State which qualification and where, and give a reason and one detail about how it will help your career. Avoid repeating and filler words, use correct expressions (e.g., "study at an American university" or "pursue an MBA").

範例: In the future I plan to study for a master's degree at an American university to broaden my engineering knowledge. This will help me learn advanced design techniques and improve my chances of becoming a senior engineer in international projects.

× I work as as electromechanical designer engineer design.

✓ I work as an electromechanical design engineer.

The original uses incorrect noun forms and duplicates words. 'Engineer' needs the noun phrase 'design engineer'. Also the indefinite article should be 'an' before a vowel sound. Use singular when referring to one job role.

× I love I like it my job because it's make me allowed to solve any problem I has facing in building or project and therefore I am I I have working as a as a field or or my career for five years ago.

✓ I like my job because it allows me to solve any problems I face in buildings or projects, and I have been working in this field for five years.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: use present simple 'I like' and 'it allows' for current facts; 'problems' plural to match countable; use 'face' present simple; express duration with present perfect continuous or present perfect 'have been working' for an action that started in the past and continues. Remove filler words and fix word order.

× I work as them as a special a special company.

✓ I work for a special company.

Incorrect pronoun 'them' and duplicated adjectives. Use the preposition 'for' with 'work' to indicate the employer. Simplify to 'a special company'.

× It's have more people as as they employ and more friendly and super active and make and help each other, and therefore my company is very give a very helpful help us to to learn more new things.

✓ It employs many people who are friendly and proactive and help each other, so my company gives us a lot of support to learn new things.

Use correct verb form 'employs' for singular subject 'it' (subject-verb agreement), use plural 'people' and relative clause 'who are'. Replace informal 'super active' with 'proactive'. Use 'gives us support' instead of incorrect 'is very give'.

× Yes, it is a good place to work because it's a it's environment of my work is very is very good and and everyone can be employed very helpful, helpful and good good enjoy and good play and therefore everyone can be working in my company make us there to help each other.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because the working environment is very good, and everyone is helpful and enjoys working, so we can help each other at my company.

Correct noun phrase 'working environment' and remove redundant words. Use 'is' for present descriptions and 'enjoys working' for habitual actions. Fix sentence structure for clarity.

× And yes, I would like you to a place to earn my work because the my company give us the two earlier and and you a new things and and and developer has developed has career or failed.

✓ Yes, I like working here because my company gives us opportunities to learn new things and develop our careers.

Original misuses 'would like you to a place to earn my work' and other awkward phrasing. Use 'like working here' and modal/verb forms 'gives' and infinitive 'to learn'. 'Develop our careers' is the correct collocation.

× And my my work is very is very is very special to to make us there to to to make us.

✓ My work is very rewarding and meaningful.

Original repeats and lacks clear meaning. Replace with concise present-tense description 'is' and adjectives 'rewarding and meaningful' to convey the intended idea.

× Uh, my future plans, uh, to make, uh, Bhd in, uh, university of American University in America and American University because it's a very good university and have, uh, more, uh, more, uh, more good environments.

✓ My future plan is to study at an American university because it is very good and has a better environment.

Use infinitive 'to study' to express future intention. Use article 'an' before 'American university'. Use present simple 'is' and 'has' to describe characteristics. Avoid repetition.

× Uh, therefore, uh, all the students can can be found in the university.

✓ Therefore, all students can be found at the university.

Use preposition 'at' for location of students. Remove duplicate 'can' and the article 'the' is unnecessary before 'students' in this general statement.