工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple for routine), use the correct job title and company description, and avoid unnecessary words. Keep answers under 5 sentences and add one specific detail about duties or people you meet using a linking word.

範例: I'm a public relations officer at a small company that sells organic eggs. I work mainly on customer communications and community events, so I meet farmers, suppliers and customers regularly. This role helps me improve my communication skills and build professional contacts.

建議: Answer directly and accurately: use correct facts and natural phrasing. Avoid incorrect or unclear claims (Chengdu is not the highest city). Give one supporting detail about the location using a linking word (e.g., 'and', 'because').

範例: I work in Chengdu, a large city in southwestern China. It's known for its relaxed lifestyle and vibrant food scene, so I enjoy the local culture outside work.

建議: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence stating whether it is a good place, then give concise reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Mention one or two specific positives and one negative if needed.

範例: Overall, it's a good place to work because my colleagues and boss create a family-like atmosphere. However, I find the weather too hot for me, which makes commuting uncomfortable sometimes.

建議: Decide and answer directly, then support your opinion with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and vague phrases; give concrete examples of advantages and disadvantages (e.g., green spaces, commute, career opportunities).

範例: Yes, I like the area where I work because it has many trees and green spaces, so it's pleasant during breaks. However, I dislike the long commute during peak hours, which is tiring.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence describing short-term and long-term plans. Use precise verbs and avoid hesitation. Give specific actions for short-term goals and a clear reason for the long-term plan, linked with words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: In the short term, I plan to stay at my current company and focus on increasing sales by improving our marketing and customer outreach. In the long term, I aim to join a larger company to gain broader experience and advance my career.

× Actually nowadays I'm working in a small company who sells the escortizen eggs and I'm the public relation, so sometimes I can meet many different people here.

✓ Actually, nowadays I'm working in a small company that sells escortized eggs and I'm in public relations, so sometimes I meet many different people here.

Use 'that' or 'which' for companies (not 'who'); 'escortizen' seems incorrect—assumed 'escortized' or product name; 'public relation' is uncountable role so use 'in public relations'; use simple present 'I meet' for habitual actions rather than 'I can meet'.

× Nowadays I'm working in Chengdu, where is the highest city in China you know.

✓ Nowadays I'm working in Chengdu, which is one of the highest cities in China, you know.

Relative clause needs 'which is' not 'where is'; also 'the highest city' is too absolute—use 'one of the highest cities' if appropriate; keep conversational tag 'you know'.

× Honestly, I I guess Chengdu is a kind of hot I, I can't bear it, but I love my job, I love my colleagues, my boss, because they can give me a strong sense of family.

✓ Honestly, I guess Chengdu is quite hot; I can't bear it, but I love my job, my colleagues, and my boss because they give me a strong sense of family.

Remove duplicated filler 'I'; use 'quite hot' instead of awkward 'a kind of hot'; use semicolon or period to separate clauses; use simple present 'give' for habitual state; list items use commas and 'and'.

× No, honestly, umm, or yes, I'm not pretty sure.

✓ No, honestly, I'm not really sure.

'Or yes' is confusing; 'pretty sure' is informal but means 'quite sure'—speaker intended uncertainty so use 'not really sure'; remove filler 'umm'.

× Uh, because it uh, uh, there are many advantages, but uh, also some disadvantages.

✓ Because there are many advantages, but also some disadvantages.

Remove fillers; keep structure 'there are many advantages but also some disadvantages'.

× Uh, the advantages is about the, uh, the trees, the environment and you can feel a strong sense.

✓ The advantages are the trees, the environment, and the strong sense of community you can feel.

Use plural verb 'are' to match plural subject 'advantages'; reorder for clarity and complete the idea 'strong sense of community'.

× MMM a shorter plan. I hope I can stay here and uh, and do something for to help my uh, company and sell more eggs.

✓ For a short-term plan, I hope I can stay here and do something to help my company sell more eggs.

'MMM a shorter plan' is unclear; use 'For a short-term plan' or 'In the short term'; remove extraneous 'for to'; use infinitive 'to help my company sell' and remove fillers.

× Yeah, but for a a long term plan, uh, I hope I can enter a bigger company.

✓ But for a long-term plan, I hope I can join a bigger company.

Use 'long-term' as adjective with hyphen; 'enter a bigger company' is unnatural—use 'join' or 'work for'; keep 'I hope I can' for future intention.