工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify your current status with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple), and give one brief, specific supporting detail. Keep it within 1–3 sentences and avoid fragmented phrases.

範例: I am a student. I study in grade 11 at Palika High School and I hope to enter a prestigious university next year.

建議: Answer directly: say where you currently study, then state a clear future career intention with correct grammar and a specific reason. Use a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I study at Palika High School at the moment. In the future I want to work as an engineer because I enjoy solving practical problems and I also want to volunteer to help people from disadvantaged backgrounds.

建議: Respond directly and fix key grammar (have→has, walk→work). Give one specific reason and a brief example using a linking word like 'because' to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it has a strong sense of community, which makes me feel comfortable when I collaborate with classmates on projects.

建議: Give a concise opinion in one sentence and add one supporting detail with clearer grammar and coherence. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I would like it because I enjoy the supportive atmosphere there; my classmates are enthusiastic and we often help each other with schoolwork.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence about your current planning status, then add a specific development plan using correct verbs and a linking word such as 'so' or 'by'. Keep it to 2 sentences and avoid fillers like 'uh'.

範例: I don't have a fixed career plan yet. However, I intend to improve my skills by taking engineering courses and internships so I can work effectively in the future.

× I'm a student and Palika High School at the grade 11 and UMM. Get into the prestigious university.

✓ I'm a student at Palika High School in grade 11 and I want to get into a prestigious university.

The original uses incorrect word order and prepositions. Use 'student at [school]' and 'in grade 11'. Add a subject and verb for 'get into' ('I want to get into') and use the article 'a' before 'prestigious university'. Improve clarity by combining into one complete sentence.

× I'm studying at the high school and in the future I want to work engineering or volunteering to have the other person who have the bad background.

✓ I'm studying at the high school, and in the future I want to work as an engineer or volunteer to help people who have a difficult background.

Multiple issues: missing preposition 'as' before job title, incorrect verb forms and noun choices ('work engineering' -> 'work as an engineer'), and unclear purpose. Use 'volunteer to help people' and correct relative clause 'who have a difficult background'. Also add a comma and coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× Yes, probably. I think it's a good place to walk because it have a sense of community and make me feel comfortable in this.

✓ Yes, probably. I think it's a good place to work because it has a sense of community and makes me feel comfortable there.

The main verbs need subject-verb agreement ('have' -> 'has', 'make' -> 'makes'). 'Walk' is the wrong word; context requires 'work'. Replace 'in this' with 'there' or 'about it'. Ensure verbs agree with singular subject 'place'.

× Yes I would, I like my work also love the place there before because it has a strong sense of community and a few more enthusiastic and have support from the each other there.

✓ Yes I would. I like my work and I also love the place because it has a strong sense of community, many enthusiastic people, and mutual support among each other.

Run-on and subject-verb agreement errors. Split into clearer clauses. Use 'and I also love' to join ideas. Replace 'a few more enthusiastic' with 'many enthusiastic people' and 'have support from the each other' with 'mutual support among each other'. Ensure 'it has' agrees with 'place'.

× I'm currently have uh, don't have a plan for my work in the future but I think I will enhance myself to. Work effective.

✓ I currently don't have a plan for my work in the future, but I think I will improve myself to work effectively.

'I'm currently have' is ungrammatical; use 'I currently don't have'. 'Enhance myself to. Work effective' is fragmented and uses incorrect adverb form; use 'improve myself to work effectively'. Maintain future intention with 'will' and use the adverb 'effectively'.