工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問に直接答えておらず、質問の意図を誤解しています。まずは簡潔に「学生です」などで主題文を述べ、その後必要なら学校の簡単な説明を加えましょう。回答は1〜3文でまとめ、自然な表現（I am a student. / I study at high school.）を使ってください。

範例: I am a student. I study at a local high school near Oakland Zoo, and I am in my second year there.

建議: 主題文で直接答えていますが、文法と語順のミスがあり、語彙が不自然です。正しい前置詞や関係語（near the Oakland Zoo）を使い、必要なら一つの補足文で位置や特徴を述べましょう。リンク語（and, which）を1回使うと流れがよくなります。

範例: I study at a high school near the Oakland Zoo, and it is only a ten-minute walk from my home.

建議: 意味が不明瞭で時制や名詞の使い方に誤りがあります（Yesterday's children は不適切）。まず肯定・否定で答え、次に理由を具体的に述べましょう。可算・不可算や複数形に注意し、接続詞（because, so）を使って論理を明確にしてください。

範例: Yes, it is. The students are very kind and have different personalities, so I enjoy discussing ideas with them.

建議: 肯定の意図は伝わりますが、文法（I have ever been to → I have ever been to / I've ever been）や語彙の選択（their facility or organize）に問題があります。「facilities are well-organized」「the buildings are surrounded by greenery」など具体表現に直し、冗長な語を避けて一文目で結論、二文目で具体例にしてください。

範例: Definitely. It is the best place I have ever studied because the facilities are well organized and the buildings are surrounded by greenery.

建議: 意図は伝わりますが、'our doctor'や'doctors will payments'など不自然な表現と文法ミスがあります。まず明確に職業（a doctor）を言い、動機（help people）, そして将来の理由（job stability）を簡潔に述べましょう。接続詞（because, so）を正しく使い、単語の選択を正してください。

範例: I plan to become a doctor because I want to help people stay healthy, and I believe a medical career will provide stable income and job security.

× Are you my student?

✓ No, I am a student.

The original sentence is inappropriate in this context; the student should state their role. Use the correct subject pronoun and verb to answer. Suggestion: respond with 'No, I am a student' or 'Yes, I am a student' depending on reality.

× I am studying at high school.

✓ I am studying at a high school.

In English we use the article 'a' before singular countable nouns like 'high school'. Use 'a high school' to indicate one school. Alternative: 'I am in high school.'

× It is located near where Oakland Zoo.

✓ It is located near the Oakland Zoo.

Use the preposition 'near' followed by a noun phrase; drop 'where'. Also include the definite article 'the' with the proper noun 'Oakland Zoo'. Correct: 'near the Oakland Zoo'.

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Is it a good place to study?

The examiner asked about working but the student studies at school. The student should answer or restate the correct activity. Suggestion: match the verb to role: 'study' for school, 'work' for job.

× Yesterday's children are very kind and there is many periods of personality people, so it is very enjoyable to share our opinion.

✓ The students are very kind and there are many people with different personalities, so it is very enjoyable to share our opinions.

'Yesterday's children' is incorrect; use 'the students' or 'my classmates'. Use 'there are' for plural existence and 'many people' (plural). 'Periods of personality' is wrong; use 'people with different personalities'. Also 'opinion' should be plural when referring generally: 'opinions'.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you study?

The question should match the student's situation. Use 'Do you like...' to ask about preference. Replace 'work' with 'study' for a student.

× Definitely yes, I think it is the best place that I ever been to for my learning.

✓ Definitely yes. I think it is the best place that I have ever been to for my learning.

When describing experience up to now, use present perfect 'have been' not simple past 'been'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× Umm, their facility or organize and buildings are very green.

✓ Umm, the facilities, organization, and buildings are very green.

Use 'the' with specific things and plural noun 'facilities'. 'Their' wrongly refers to people; 'organization' should be a noun form and 'buildings' plural. Use commas to list items.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future career plans?

For clarity in a student context, 'career plans' is more natural than 'work plans'. Use 'career' to refer to long-term profession.

× My future plan is to be our doctor.

✓ My future plan is to become a doctor.

Use 'become' with professions. 'Our doctor' is incorrect; use 'a doctor' (indefinite article) to indicate the profession.

× I want to help the people who want to be healthy and I think doctors will payments so I don't need to worry about my future.

✓ I want to help people stay healthy, and I think doctors will be paid well so I won't need to worry about my future.

Do not use 'the' before 'people' in this general sense. Use 'stay healthy' or 'be healthy'. 'Doctors will payments' is ungrammatical; use 'will be paid' or 'will earn good money'. Use contraction 'won't' for 'will not' and ensure verb forms are correct.