工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your response more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “I work as a staff nurse”), then add one or two supporting details with correct grammar and accurate vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words like “because” correctly and watch verb tense and article use (e.g. “an emergency case” → “emergency situations”).

範例: I work as a staff nurse at a private hospital. I became a nurse because I wanted to help people, and I enjoy using my clinical skills, especially in emergency situations.

建議: This answer is clear and concise. To improve further, add one specific detail to make it more informative and natural (use a linking phrase such as “I work at… , where…”). Keep it to one or two sentences and correct small phrasing: “bedside nurse” is fine, but avoid “here in our province” — say the province name or “locally” if appropriate.

範例: I’m currently a bedside nurse at a private hospital in my province, where I care for patients on the general medical ward.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then a specific reason. Correct collocations and grammar: say “a good place to work” (omit “on”), and use “compensates” or “offers good benefits” rather than “compensate well.” Provide one or two concrete examples of benefits.

範例: Yes, it’s a good place to work because the hospital offers good benefits. For example, they provide decent salaries, paid vacation, and flexible leave policies.

建議: Avoid repeating the same idea. Start with a clear statement, then give one concise, specific reason using correct prepositions (say “near my hometown” or “close to home,” not “near at”). Remove redundancy and combine similar sentences with linking words (e.g. “so” or “therefore”).

範例: Yes, I like working there because the hospital is close to my hometown, so I can commute daily and don’t need to rent accommodation.

建議: Begin with a concise topic sentence (e.g. “I plan to work abroad”), then give one or two specific goals. Correct grammar (use “plans are” not “plans is”), choose natural phrasing (“expand my horizons”), and avoid listing too many vague phrases—give an example of a country or area or a specific career goal.

範例: I plan to work abroad to expand my horizons and gain experience in different healthcare systems. For instance, I hope to work in Australia or the UK to improve my clinical skills and learn international best practices.

× I'm working as a staff nurse at a private hospital so way back then I really want to become a nurse so I study hard and fulfilled the dreams.

✓ I work as a staff nurse at a private hospital. A long time ago I really wanted to become a nurse, so I studied hard and fulfilled my dream.

Mixed tenses and incorrect tense forms: the student uses present progressive ('I'm working') then shifts to present ('I really want') and present simple ('I study') while referring to past events. Use simple present for current state ('I work') and simple past for past intentions and actions ('wanted', 'studied', 'fulfilled'). Also use singular 'dream' with 'my'. Improve by keeping consistent time reference and matching verb tense to the time (present for current facts, past for past events).

× I like being a nurse.

✓ I like being a nurse.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses the gerund 'being' and the pronoun 'I'. Included for completeness.

× It's because I can use my skills and knowledge specifically if there's an emergency cases.

✓ It's because I can use my skills and knowledge, especially if there are emergency cases.

Incorrect quantifier and agreement: 'an emergency cases' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use 'emergency cases' with plural verb 'are', and replace 'specifically' with 'especially' for natural collocation. Keep subject-verb agreement between 'cases' and 'are'.

× I am currently working as a bedside nurse at a private hospital here in our province.

✓ I currently work as a bedside nurse at a private hospital in our province.

Using present simple ('I currently work') is more natural for habitual or current employment than present continuous. Both are possible, but present simple fits exam answers. Also 'here in our province' is wordy; 'in our province' is concise. Maintain consistent present-tense form.

× Yes, it is a good place to work on.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work.

The preposition 'on' is unnecessary after 'work' when referring to a workplace. Remove 'on' to make the phrase natural: 'a good place to work'.

× It's because the hospital compensate well in terms of vacation, leaves and salary.

✓ It's because the hospital compensates well in terms of vacation, leave, and salary.

Subject-verb agreement and noun form: 'hospital' is singular, so use third-person singular verb 'compensates'. Also use 'leave' (uncountable) instead of plural 'leaves' when referring to time off. Maintain parallel list punctuation with commas.

× Yes, I like the place where I am currently working.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I currently work.

Prefer simple present 'I currently work' for a regular or current job instead of present continuous. Both are acceptable, but consistency with other answers is better. This aligns tense usage across responses.

× It's because it's near at my hometown.

✓ It's because it's near my hometown.

Incorrect preposition 'at' after 'near'. Use 'near' directly with the noun: 'near my hometown'. Remove 'at' to correct preposition use.

× I can go home whenever I want without renting a boarding house or a place to stay in.

✓ I can go home whenever I want without renting a boarding house or a place to stay.

Awkward placement of the preposition 'in' at end; 'a place to stay in' is colloquial but redundant here. Use 'a place to stay' for cleaner structure. Maintain parallel structure between 'boarding house' and 'place to stay'.

× It's because it's just nearby my hometown.

✓ It's because it's just near my hometown.

Word choice and redundancy: 'nearby' is an adverb meaning 'close', while 'near' as a preposition fits before a noun. Use 'near my hometown' or 'nearby' alone (e.g., 'It's just nearby'). Also the repeated idea is redundant; combine or remove repetition for conciseness.

× My future work plans is of course to go out abroad, to expand my horizon, to experience new things, to apply my skills and knowledge in other countries.

✓ My future work plans are, of course, to go abroad, to expand my horizons, to experience new things, and to apply my skills and knowledge in other countries.

Subject-verb agreement: 'plans' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. Word choice: use 'go abroad' instead of 'go out abroad'. 'Expand my horizons' (plural) is the common collocation. Add 'and' before the final item in a list for correct parallel structure. Include commas for clarity.