植物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct grammar, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (so, because, therefore) to connect ideas and provide one specific example (types of plants).

示例: Yes, I keep several plants at home because I enjoy gardening and it improves the atmosphere. For example, I have mango and guava trees in my yard and potted marigolds near the entrance. Since I moved to a semi-rural area, I have more space to grow fruit trees, so I spend weekends tending them.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and simple, correct grammar. Remove confusing phrases and fillers. Give a specific example of plant types and briefly explain how you learned to grow them, using one linking word (so/because).

示例: When I was young I grew vegetables and fruit with my grandmother. For example, we planted tomatoes and bananas together, and I learned watering and pruning from her. Because I spent many afternoons helping her, I became confident growing these plants on my own.

建议: Give a concise, natural reply with correct grammar and specific details about your knowledge. Avoid vague phrases like 'rule and regulation' without examples. Mention one or two concrete skills or topics you studied (soil, watering, pruning).

示例: Yes, I know quite a bit about growing plants because I studied horticulture as part of my training. For instance, I learned about soil composition, watering schedules and pruning techniques, so I can successfully grow vegetables and fruit trees.

建议: Start with a clear direct statement and avoid hedging. Referencing a survey is fine but be concise and precise. Correct grammar and reduce hesitation. Offer one reason and one brief example of popular plants as gifts.

示例: I'm not certain, but I have seen surveys suggesting that giving plants as gifts is becoming more popular in China. People often choose small potted plants like succulents or lucky bamboo because they are eco-friendly and easy to care for.

× Moreover, plants keep my house uh, more looks more green as well as a pleasant atmosphere.

✓ Moreover, plants make my house look greener and create a pleasant atmosphere.

The sentence uses incorrect adjective/adverb forms and redundant words ('more looks more green'). Use the verb 'make' + object + bare infinitive 'look' to describe appearance, and use comparative 'greener' rather than 'more green'. Also replace 'as well as' with 'and' for smoother coordination. Suggestion: Use 'make my house look greener' or 'make my house greener'. Use comparatives correctly (greener).

× I uh, started planting trees and some flowers in my house uh, since I moved from bustling city to semi rural area as I have enough land here so I can pursue my hobby uh.

✓ I started planting trees and flowers at my house after I moved from the bustling city to a semi-rural area, because I have enough land here to pursue my hobby.

The sentence mixes tenses and incorrect prepositions. Use simple past 'started' and connect the past move with 'after' or 'since' with present perfect; here 'after I moved' is appropriate. 'Semi rural' should be hyphenated as 'semi-rural'. Use 'at my house' or 'in my yard' and remove filler words. Also 'some flowers' -> 'flowers'. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense and use correct hyphenation for compound adjectives.

× My grandmother used to grow vegetable and fruits from her eye installed with the same habit.

✓ My grandmother used to grow vegetables and fruits, and I developed the same habit from watching her.

Countable nouns need correct pluralization: 'vegetable' should be 'vegetables'. The original phrase 'from her eye installed' is ungrammatical; replace with 'from watching her' to convey influence. Also split into two clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural 'vegetables' and natural expressions like 'I learned by watching her'.

× Because I was not exposed to many other varieties like crops and cereals.

✓ I was not exposed to many other varieties, such as crops and cereals.

A sentence beginning with 'Because' must be connected to a main clause; here it is a fragment. Replace 'Because' with no conjunction or attach it to the previous sentence. Also use 'such as' for examples rather than 'like' in formal contexts. Suggestion: Combine with previous sentence or start without 'Because'. Use 'such as' for examples.

× I only saw her planting fruits and vegetable and somehow picked this habit from her and I got self independent in growing these particular varieties.

✓ I only saw her planting fruits and vegetables and somehow picked up this habit from her, and I became self-sufficient in growing these particular varieties.

Use plural 'vegetables'. 'Picked this habit' should be 'picked up this habit'. 'Got self independent' is incorrect; use 'became self-sufficient' or 'became independent'. Also split with commas to improve flow. Suggestion: Use correct collocations: 'picked up a habit', 'became self-sufficient'.

× Yes, being in a profession like didactics one have to know more about plant and many kind of crops.

✓ Yes, being in a profession like didactics, one has to know more about plants and many kinds of crops.

Subject 'one' requires third person singular verb 'has' not 'have'. Use plural 'plants' and 'kinds of crops' for correctness. Add commas for clause separation. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'one has' and pluralize nouns when appropriate.

× In addition to this I have also studied a specific subject on plants and learned lot of rule and regulation from there and I can grow plants.

✓ In addition, I have also studied a specific subject on plants and learned a lot of rules and regulations there, so I can grow plants.

Use 'a lot of' before plural nouns and pluralize 'rule' and 'regulation'. 'From there' is awkward; use 'there' or 'in that course'. Also add comma before coordinating conjunction 'so'. Suggestion: Use 'a lot of rules and regulations' and smoother connectors like 'there' or 'in that course'.

× I really not know them exactly but I have seen a survey on Facebook which shows that a trend of giving plants as gift gift has increased at remarkable rate in China because people are umm preferring eco friendly gift over the non reusable items.

✓ I do not really know exactly, but I have seen a survey on Facebook which shows that the trend of giving plants as gifts has increased at a remarkable rate in China because people are preferring eco-friendly gifts over non-reusable items.

The original mixes verb forms and omits auxiliary 'do' for present simple negative: 'I do not really know'. Pluralize 'gifts' and use article 'the trend'. 'At remarkable rate' needs 'a' and 'a remarkable rate'. Hyphenate 'eco-friendly' and 'non-reusable'. Remove duplicated 'gift'. Suggestion: Use 'I do not really know' for present simple negative, plural nouns for countables, and hyphens for compound adjectives.