朋友— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the comparison clearly, then give one or two examples. Correct “that were” to “those were,” and use “malls” if you mean shopping centres, since “moths” means insects. “Aquariums” is the correct word instead of “oceanaries.” Avoid repeating “we will” by combining the examples.

示例: Yes, there is. When I was younger, my friends and I usually met at malls or cinemas, but these days we prefer cultural activities. For example, we might visit a museum, a zoo, or an aquarium.

建议: Give a direct reason in your first sentence, then contrast suitable and unsuitable places. Complete the example about private dining, remove fillers such as “um” and “like,” and use “places” with “they are” consistently. You could mention noise, privacy, cost, or convenience.

示例: Places are suitable for meeting when they are comfortable, affordable, and easy to access. For instance, a café or a public park is a good choice for friends who do not know each other very well. A very private or expensive restaurant might feel awkward.

建议: Your preference and reason are clear, but avoid repeating “so” and “prefer,” and remove spoken fillers. Correct “I myself is” to “I’m” and “a a” to “a.” Explain briefly why one-to-one conversation suits you.

示例: I prefer spending time with one friend because I’m quite introverted. I sometimes feel awkward in a large group, whereas a one-to-one conversation feels more relaxed. It also gives us more time to talk about things in depth.

建议: You answer directly and provide relevant examples. Improve the phrasing “I from time to time will” to “From time to time, I invite,” and avoid repeating “together.” Use “cozier” rather than “more cozy,” and connect the activities smoothly.

示例: Definitely. I often invite friends or colleagues over for dinner. After we eat, we might have dessert or watch a film together. I enjoy hosting because it feels cozier and more relaxed than meeting somewhere busy.

建议: Your answer is personal and well supported. Remove the hesitation before “belonging,” and make the parallel structure clearer: friends “make my life richer and happier and give me a sense of belonging.” “Personal feelings” sounds more natural than “private feelings” here.

示例: Friends are extremely important to me; I can’t imagine life without them. They make my life happier and give me a strong sense of belonging. I also value being able to share personal feelings with them, which helps us feel close.

建议: The frequency and example make your answer specific. Say “a mall on Orchard Road” rather than “this mall in the Orchard Road,” and use “an exhibition” or “the exhibitions.” Avoid “you know,” and replace “like tomorrow” with “tomorrow” or “probably tomorrow.”

示例: Yes, I go out with friends once or twice a week. Yesterday, a friend and I went shopping at a mall on Orchard Road and looked at an outdoor Halloween exhibition. I’m meeting another friend tomorrow, too.

建议: Organize the two locations clearly and correct “moss” to “malls.” Avoid repeating “the first” and “the shopping,” and begin the second example with “Secondly” or connect it with “We also.” Use “at a mall on Orchard Road” for a more natural location phrase.

示例: My friends and I usually meet at malls or museums. We often go shopping at a mall on Orchard Road, and we also meet at museums because we both enjoy exhibitions.

建议: The contrast between your two groups is clear. Use “is” after “group,” and make the activity sequence more natural: “go shopping at a mall before seeing a film.” Replace “the culture” with “cultural activities,” and vary “we will” if you are describing your usual routine.

示例: I have two groups of friends with different interests. One group enjoys shopping and movies, so we often shop at a mall and then see a film. The other group prefers cultural activities, so we visit museums together.

建议: You give a clear example and explain why the friendship works. “I met my friend, Calvin, on an app” is more natural than “met my friend ... from an online app.” Replace “for five years up to now” with “for five years,” and avoid using both “really” and “quite” together.

示例: Yes, I do. I met Calvin on an app shortly after I moved to Singapore, and we’ve been friends for five years. We get along very well because we have similar interests and tastes.

× Yes, when I was younger, my friends and I were more interested in moths and cinemas, so that were the places where we'd meet.

✓ Yes, when I was younger, my friends and I were more interested in moths and cinemas, so those were the places where we'd meet.

Use the plural demonstrative pronoun those to refer to the plural noun places. That is singular.

× For example, a private dining place.

✓ For example, a private dining place may not be suitable.

This is a sentence fragment because it has no verb. Add a verb, such as may not be, to make it a complete sentence.

× But some other places, while they are like more affordable and um public, it's more suitable for friends to meet

✓ But some other places are more affordable and public, so they are more suitable for friends to meet.

The pronoun it does not refer correctly to the plural noun places. Use they. The revised sentence also connects the ideas clearly.

× So I myself is an introvert, so I do find myself a bit awkward, uh, or embarrassed to talk in a big group.

✓ So I myself am an introvert, so I do find myself a bit awkward or embarrassed to talk in a big group.

The subject I takes the verb am, not is. Match the verb form to the subject: I am, he or she is.

× I much more prefer just talking to one friend only.

✓ I much prefer just talking to one friend.

Prefer already expresses a comparison, so more prefer is not the correct form. Use much prefer to emphasize the preference. Also, only is unnecessary here because the sentence already specifies one friend.

× I feel I can enjoy a a closer and deeper conversation in that way.

✓ I feel I can enjoy a closer and deeper conversation in that way.

The article a is repeated. Use it once before the singular countable noun conversation.

× Not only do friends make my life richer and happier, but also give me the sense of uh belonging.

✓ Not only do friends make my life richer and happier, but they also give me a sense of belonging.

The second clause needs its own subject, they, to make the structure parallel and complete. The usual expression is a sense of belonging.

× For example, yesterday my friend and I went to this mall in the Orchard Road.

✓ For example, yesterday my friend and I went to a mall on Orchard Road.

Use on with the name of a street. Do not normally use the before the street name Orchard Road.

× We also looked at the exhibitions in the outdoor area because you know the Halloween is happening.

✓ We also looked at the exhibitions in the outdoor area because, you know, Halloween is happening.

Do not use the definite article the before the name of a holiday. Say Halloween is happening.

× Yes, when I first came to Singapore, I met my friend, Calvin, from an online app.

✓ Yes, when I first came to Singapore, I met my friend Calvin through an online app.

The original phrase already includes the required article an. Through is more suitable than from for explaining how you met someone, so this is not a grammar error from the listed types; no correction is needed.