朋友— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the comparison directly, and use natural phrases such as “there’s a big difference in where we meet” and “we meet about twice a month.” Avoid the vague ending “and everything”; give one clear detail about the café.

示例: Yes, there’s a big difference. At university, we used to see each other every day on campus, but now we only meet about twice a month. When we do get together, we usually go to a café near our old campus to catch up.

建议: Give a direct reason, then explain it without repeating “noise.” Use the plural correctly (“noisy places need to be avoided”) and say “hear what the other person is saying.” You could also mention a suitable alternative, such as a quiet café.

示例: Quiet places are more suitable because you can hear each other properly and have a relaxed conversation. If a place is crowded or has loud music, it can be difficult to focus. That’s why I prefer meeting friends in a quiet café.

建议: State your preference clearly at the beginning and explain it with one concise reason. Avoid repeating “it’s too much” and make sure the pronouns match your meaning. “I feel overwhelmed trying to follow several conversations” would express your point naturally.

示例: I prefer spending time with one friend at a time. In a large group, I sometimes find it hard to follow several conversations, so I feel more comfortable talking one-to-one. We can relax and have a proper catch-up.

建议: Clarify whether you invite friends now or are describing the past. Use “when we were at university” and “after we graduated.” The final sentence is unclear, so replace it with a specific explanation of why you meet at home less often.

示例: Yes, I sometimes invite friends over. When we were at university, we used to spend a lot of time at my place, but we do that less often now because everyone is busy. These days, we usually meet at a café instead.

建议: This is a relevant answer with a personal reason, but correct “in my loss times” to a natural phrase such as “during difficult times.” Keep the tense consistent and end with a clear statement about how important your friends are.

示例: Friends are very important to me because they support me during difficult times. They’ve also influenced the person I am today by encouraging me and sharing their experiences. I’m grateful to have them in my life.

建议: Use “a few friends” or “a couple of friends,” rather than combining both phrases. Add punctuation between ideas and say “drop them off at home.” You can finish with a brief comment about what you enjoy.

示例: I go out with a few friends fairly often. We usually have a meal at a local café and chat about what’s been happening in our lives. If they need a ride, I drop them off at home afterward.

建议: Name the places directly and use the present tense consistently (“They’re perfect places”). Explain that the noise level is low, so you can talk comfortably; avoid unclear phrases such as “cropping down.”

示例: We usually meet at restaurants or cafés in our neighborhood. They’re good places to catch up, especially when they aren’t too crowded. The low noise level means we can talk comfortably without raising our voices.

建议: Describe one or two activities clearly and avoid uncertain or contradictory phrases. If playing cards is rare now, contrast it with what you usually do instead, such as chatting over a meal. Use “we play UNO” for a regular activity.

示例: We usually chat over a meal or a drink and catch up on what’s happening in our lives. We sometimes play card games like UNO, although we don’t do that as often as we used to. It’s a nice way to relax together.

建议: Say “I’ve been friends with” and “since fifth grade.” Avoid repeating “we are quite distant”; explain whether the distance is geographical or emotional. Clarify how often you meet, using a natural phrase such as “about twice a month.”

示例: Yes, I’ve been friends with one person since fifth grade. We live in different places now, so we don’t see each other very often, but we try to meet about twice a month when we can. We’ve stayed close despite the distance.

× I think there is a lot of difference on where we meet.

✓ I think there is a lot of difference in where we meet.

Use in to describe a difference related to a situation or subject. On is not the appropriate preposition here.

× We used to meet or see each other every day in university, but after graduating it drastically reduced on how many times we see each other in a month.

✓ We used to meet or see each other every day at university, but after graduating, the number of times we saw each other in a month decreased drastically.

The sentence describes a change that happened after graduation, so use the past tense saw rather than the present tense see. The rewritten subject, the number of times, also makes clear what decreased.

× We used to meet or see each other every day in university, but after graduating it drastically reduced on how many times we see each other in a month.

✓ We used to meet or see each other every day at university, but after graduating, the number of times we saw each other in a month decreased drastically.

Use at university when referring to attending or being at a university. The original phrase on how many times is also not idiomatic in this sentence; the number of times expresses the idea correctly.

× So I think all the noises noisy places needs to be cancelled out from your list.

✓ So I think all noisy places need to be crossed off your list.

The subject places is plural, so it must take the plural verb need, not needs. The correction also removes the duplicated, ungrammatical phrase all the noises noisy places.

× It's really too much noise when there is too much noise you can barely hear the word other person is saying

✓ There is so much noise that you can barely hear what the other person is saying.

The original joins two complete thoughts without suitable punctuation or a linking structure. Using so much noise that creates a clear cause-and-effect sentence.

× It's really too much noise when there is too much noise you can barely hear the word other person is saying

✓ There is so much noise that you can barely hear what the other person is saying.

Use the before other person because the sentence refers to the particular person speaking in that situation.

× Especially during when we were at university of people we used to hang out in my home quite a lot but yeah it dramatically reduced over the past year after we graduating.

✓ Especially when we were at university, people used to hang out at my home quite a lot, but it decreased over the past year after we graduated.

Use when, not during when, before a clause with a subject and verb. Also, the natural preposition for visiting someone's home is at, rather than in, in this context.

× Especially during when we were at university of people we used to hang out in my home quite a lot but yeah it dramatically reduced over the past year after we graduating.

✓ Especially when we were at university, people used to hang out at my home quite a lot, but it decreased over the past year after we graduated.

After we, use a finite verb here: graduated. The form graduating would need a different structure, such as after graduating, without the subject we.

× When they go out we hang out at local cafe we just chat over our food and I will drop them back to home.

✓ When they go out, we hang out at a local cafe, chat over our food, and I drop them back home.

Cafe is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article; a is appropriate here. The usual expression is back home, without to.

× When they go out we hang out at local cafe we just chat over our food and I will drop them back to home.

✓ When they go out, we hang out at a local cafe, chat over our food, and I drop them back home.

The speaker describes a regular routine, so the simple present drop is more suitable than the future form will drop.

× When they go out we hang out at local cafe we just chat over our food and I will drop them back to home.

✓ When they go out, we hang out at a local cafe, chat over our food, and I drop them back home.

In the expression take or drop someone back home, home does not take the preposition to.

× They were the perfect place to catch up on everything.

✓ They were the perfect places to catch up on everything.

They refers to more than one restaurant or cafe, so the noun place should also be plural: places.

× They were the perfect place to catch up on everything.

✓ They are the perfect places to catch up on everything.

The speaker is describing places they currently use to meet, so the present tense are is more consistent with the context than were.

× I have one who whom I've had being friends with since I was then fifth grade

✓ I have one friend whom I've been friends with since I was in fifth grade.

The original verb phrase I've had being friends is not grammatically formed. Use have been friends, the present perfect form, for a friendship that began in the past and continues now.

× I have one who whom I've had being friends with since I was then fifth grade

✓ I have one friend whom I've been friends with since I was in fifth grade.

Who and whom should not be used together in this clause. Whom is the object of the preposition with; in informal speech, who is also common in this position.

× I have one who whom I've had being friends with since I was then fifth grade

✓ I have one friend whom I've been friends with since I was in fifth grade.

Use in before a school grade: in fifth grade. Then does not fit this expression.