朋友— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答有直接比较过去和现在，但没有完成句子，也没有说明现在通常在哪里见面。注意使用过去时“was/didn't have”，并避免“go to for expensive restaurant”这类不自然表达。可以先明确回答有差异，再分别说明过去和现在的地点及原因。

示例: Yes, there is a difference. When I was in secondary school, I didn’t have much money, so my friends and I usually met at cheap restaurants or parks. Now that I’m at university, we often meet in cafés or shopping malls because we can afford to spend more time there.

建议: 你提到了餐馆和公园，但答案在“we need to be”处中断，且“play with us with them”表达不自然。应清楚说明适合与不适合的原因，例如噪音、空间、座位和活动限制，并使用“because/however”等连接词。

示例: Restaurants and parks are suitable because they usually have enough space for people to talk and spend time together. Parks are also good for outdoor activities. However, some small coffee shops may not be suitable for large groups because they are quiet and have limited seating.

建议: 你使用了“it depends”，这是合理的回答框架，但答案没有完成，并且“more funny”应改为“more fun”。应补充你在不同活动中的选择：看电影或购物时和朋友群体一起，深入谈心时和一个朋友一起。

示例: It depends on the activity. I prefer going with a group of friends when I’m shopping or watching a film because it is more fun and enjoyable. However, I would rather spend time with one close friend when I want to have a serious conversation.

建议: 回答了问题，也提供了活动和原因，但时态和搭配需要改进。“I invited”应根据一般习惯改为“I would invite”或“I often invite”；“a more closer environment”应改为“a more comfortable/private environment”。避免重复“video games or computer games”。

示例: Yes, I would invite my close friends to my home. We could play video games or watch films together because my home is more comfortable and private than a public place. We could also order some food and chat without being disturbed.

建议: 你给出了明确分数，但“a friend for me is about eight”应改为“friends are about eight out of ten for me”。“get some advisers”应改为“get some advice”，并避免重复“with each other”。可以说明朋友提供情感支持和建议。

示例: I’d give friendship about eight out of ten in importance. Close friends give me emotional support, and I can talk to them about personal problems. They also offer useful advice when I have to make an important decision.

建议: 回答基本切题，也提到了频率、活动和交流内容，但“when weekends”应改为“at weekends/on weekends”，“in some private conversation”表达不自然。应减少“usually”的重复，并使用更自然的表达，如“chat and exchange ideas”。

示例: Yes, I often go out with my friends at weekends. I usually invite a close friend to go shopping with me, and we chat while we look around the shops. It is a good way for us to relax and exchange ideas.

建议: 问题询问见面地点，但你的回答主要描述了联系频率和见面困难，没有直接回答地点。应先说现在通常在哪里见面；如果很少见面，再解释原因。注意“message each other”不是“meet”，以及“in different universities”和“fit our schedules”等表达。

示例: We usually meet at a shopping mall or a café near our universities. However, we don’t meet as often as we did in secondary school because we study at different universities. It is sometimes difficult to find a time that fits both of our schedules.

建议: 你提供了两种情况和具体活动，内容较丰富，但句子过长，连接不够清楚。“games that can connect with our phone”应改为“mobile games we can play together”，“go shopping in G or uniclobe”应改为“go shopping at GU or Uniqlo”。应拆分句子并使用“if/however”。

示例: When we cannot find time to go out, we usually play multiplayer mobile games together. If we do have free time, we go shopping at GU or Uniqlo. Sometimes we also get something to eat and chat afterward.

建议: 你直接回答了问题，并提供了人数和认识时长，但答案在“because we can”处中断。应改为“two friends whom I have known since my first year of secondary school”，并补充你们关系亲密的具体原因，例如共同经历和相互支持。

示例: Yes, I have two close friends whom I have known since my first year of secondary school, so we have been friends for about seven years. We have grown up together and shared many important experiences. That is why we still have a very close relationship.

× There's something different because in the past I'm just a secondary student so I don't have that much money to go to for expensive restaurant and so in the past we used to go to some cheaper restaurant like

✓ There was a difference because in the past I was just a secondary student, so I didn't have much money to go to expensive restaurants. We used to go to some cheaper restaurants instead.

“in the past”表示过去的情况，因此要用过去时：I'm 改为 was，don't have 改为 didn't have。“restaurant”是可数名词，此处表示一般情况，应使用复数 restaurants。go to 后面直接接地点，不需要再加 for。原句以 like 结尾，意思没有完成，因此补充了完整的句子。

× Like restaurants and parks are suitable for meeting with friends as in these places we can chat louder and play with us with them, with each other, but like the coffee shop, we need to be

✓ Restaurants and parks are suitable places to meet friends because in these places we can chat loudly and play with each other. However, in coffee shops, we need to be quieter.

chat 修饰动作，需要使用副词 loudly，而不是 louder。play with each other 已经能表达“彼此一起玩”，不需要加入错误的代词 us 和 them。表示地点时使用 in coffee shops。原句最后的 we need to be 没有补充完整，因此改为 we need to be quieter。

× It depends when I was going to shopping or like watching movies I prefer to go with a group of friends friends because this is more funny and more enjoyable but for talking with

✓ It depends. When I go shopping or watch movies, I prefer to go with a group of friends because it is more fun and enjoyable. However, I prefer to be with one friend when we talk.

题目询问一般偏好，所以使用一般现在时：was going 改为 go，watching 改为 watch。friends 重复了一次，应删除。fun 通常使用 more fun，不使用 more funny 表示“更有趣”。原句以 but for talking with 结尾，结构不完整，因此补成完整句子。

× Yes, I invited one of my closer friends to my home to play some video games or computer games or watching movies with each other because in my home is a more closer environment

✓ Yes, I would invite one of my close friends to my home to play video games or watch movies together because my home is a more comfortable environment.

问题使用 Would you invite，回答假设性邀请时应使用 would invite，而不是过去时 invited。one of 后面要接复数 friends。并列结构中 to play 和 watch 应保持一致，不能使用 watching。“more closer”是重复比较级，不能同时使用 more 和 closer；这里改为 more comfortable。原句 because 后面的主语和谓语顺序错误，改为 my home is。

× From one to ten, a friend for me is about eight because Because having a close friend can make me me talk with each other and have a private conversation with each other and get some advisers.

✓ On a scale from one to ten, the importance of friends to me is about eight because having close friends allows me to talk with them privately, have private conversations, and get some advice.

friends 表示“朋友”这一类人，使用复数更自然。me me 重复，且 make me talk 后面的代词关系不正确；改为 allows me to talk with them。each other 通常用于两个或多个主体互相做某事，此处用 them 指代朋友更合适。advice 是不可数名词，不能使用复数 advisers 表示“建议”，应使用 some advice。

× Yes, I often go out with my friends when weekends usually I usually invite my close friend to go shopping while shopping we are going to talk in some private conversation with each other to exchange ideas

✓ Yes, I often go out with my friends on weekends. I usually invite a close friend to go shopping. While shopping, we talk privately with each other and exchange ideas.

表示“在周末”要使用介词 on：on weekends。a close friend 表示“一个亲密的朋友”，需要使用不定冠词 a。题目询问经常性的活动，应使用一般现在时 talk，而不是 we are going to talk。private conversation 前面的表达不自然，talk privately 可以直接表示“私下聊天”。

× When I was a secondary student, we often message each other every day and but now I'm a university student. We are in the different universities. So we are so difficult to meet each other because we can't match our timetable or schedule.

✓ When I was a secondary student, we often messaged each other every day. But now I am a university student, and we attend different universities. Therefore, it is difficult for us to meet because we cannot match our timetables.

描述中学时期的习惯，要用过去时 messaged。and 和 but 不能重复使用，删除 and。different universities 是泛指，不需要 the。表示“对我们来说很难”应使用 it is difficult for us，而不是 we are difficult。our timetable or schedule 中两个名词表达重复，改为复数 timetables，表示双方不同的时间安排。

× Oh when we cannot match our schedule to go out, I usually play some video games with my friends that can connect with our phone so we can play together and if we can go out with each other we will go shopping in G or uniclobe

✓ When we cannot match our schedules to go out, I usually play video games with my friends on our phones, so we can play together. If we can go out, we will go shopping at G or Uniqlo.

双方的时间安排通常使用复数 schedules。表示在手机上玩游戏使用 on our phones，而不是 with our phone。表示在商店购物使用 at，例如 at G or Uniqlo。原句包含多个从句但缺少清晰的标点和结构，因此分成两个完整句子。

× Yes, I have two friends that we We met each other for a very, very long time from secondary one until now which is about seven years and we are a very close friend because we can

✓ Yes, I have two friends whom I have known for a very long time. We have known each other since Secondary One, which was about seven years ago, and we are very close friends.

删除重复的 we。表达“从过去一直到现在认识”应使用 have known，并使用 since 表示起点：since Secondary One。two friends 后面要使用复数 friends。we are a very close friend 中主语 we 是复数，所以应改为 we are very close friends。原句以 because we can 结尾，句意没有完成，因此删除这个未完成的从句。