广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答切题，也提到了手机和电脑两个场景，但句子连接不自然，存在重复表达，如“advertisements are very popular”和“advertisements everywhere”。“not only just in my phone”应改为“not only on my phone”。建议先直接回答频率，再补充一个具体例子，并使用“especially”或“for example”连接细节。

示例: Yes, I see advertisements very often when I use my phone or computer. They usually appear on social media, video platforms, and shopping websites. In particular, I often get advertisements for clothes and electronic products based on my browsing history.

建议: 回答中有明显的重复和语法问题，例如“I I”“those advancements”。这里应使用“advertisements”，而不是“advancements”。另外，回答先说“很难记得”，却没有提供清晰的广告例子，内容不够具体。建议选择一个童年广告，说明它的产品、代言人以及给你留下印象的原因。

示例: Yes, I remember a television advertisement for a sports brand from my childhood. It featured a famous football player whom I really admired. I was impressed by the exciting music and the athlete’s energetic performance, so I still remember it today.

建议: 回答结构较好，直接回答了问题，并列举了火车和公交车。不过“posters digitals”应改为“digital posters”，“this place has a lot of predators”中的“predators”意思是捕食者，应改为“passengers”或“commuters”。建议用更自然的表达说明公共交通广告多是因为人流量大、乘客停留时间长。

示例: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on public transport, especially on trains and buses. They are displayed as posters and digital screens inside carriages and at stations. This is probably because public transport carries a large number of passengers every day.

建议: 回答使用了“on the one hand”和“on the other hand”，逻辑较清楚，但没有明确表达自己到底喜欢还是不喜欢广告。“polishing those advertisements”用词不当，应改为“advertising”或“watching advertisements”；“stimulate economic growth”前通常不加“the”。建议先给出明确立场，再分别说明广告的优点和缺点。

示例: I have mixed feelings about advertisements. On the one hand, they can introduce useful products and support economic growth. On the other hand, some advertisements are misleading and may even encourage people to buy things they do not need.

建议: 回答基本切题，表达了喜欢有自己喜爱的名人出演的广告，但语法和词汇问题较多。“advertisements that with”应改为“advertisements featuring”，“a advertisement”应改为“an advertisement”，“one of my best favorite”表达不完整。建议清楚说明喜欢的广告类型，并补充名人、产品和广告风格等具体信息。

示例: I like advertisements that feature celebrities or athletes I admire. For example, I once saw a large poster for a sports brand featuring my favorite basketball player. I liked it because the design was simple, energetic, and memorable.

建议: 回答有相关经历，但答案没有完整结束，因此缺少结果和具体细节。“I always attracted”应改为“I was always attracted”，“underama”“undermos”和“brand epiture”似乎是品牌或词语误用，导致意思不清。建议说明买的具体产品、广告中的吸引点，以及购买后的感受，并确保答案完整结束。

示例: Yes, I have. When I was a child, I was attracted by advertisements for a famous underwear brand because they presented the products as comfortable and reliable. I eventually bought one of their products, although I later realized that I was mainly influenced by the catchy slogan and attractive design.

× Yes, advertisements are very popular these days I can see there are advertisements everywhere not only just in my phone but also on my computer.

✓ Yes, advertisements are very popular these days. I can see advertisements everywhere, not only on my phone but also on my computer.

原句把多个完整句子直接连接在一起，缺少句号或连接词，造成句子过长、结构混乱。应将其拆成两个句子，并使用“not only...but also...”表示“ 不仅……而且……”。

× not only just in my phone but also on my computer

✓ not only on my phone but also on my computer

表示使用手机或电脑时，通常使用介词“on”，所以应说“on my phone”，而不是“in my phone”。同时，“not only”本身已经足够，“just”在这里是多余的。

× I can hardly remember them because there has been a long time.

✓ I can hardly remember them because it has been a long time.

“It has been a long time”是表示“已经过了很长时间”的固定表达。原句误用了“There has been”，因为这里不是在表示某处存在某物。

× But I can tell that those advancements which are with those celebrities that I like really impressed me.

✓ But I can say that those advertisements featuring celebrities I like really impressed me.

原句中的“which are with those celebrities”结构不自然，关系从句缺乏清晰的修饰关系。表示广告中有某位名人时，可以使用“advertisements featuring celebrities”。此外，“advancements”不能表达“广告”，这里改为“advertisements”后句意更清楚。

× They appear as posters digitals, screens, in carriages, and stations.

✓ They appear as digital posters and screens in carriages and at stations.

“digitals”不能直接作名词修饰“posters”。表示“数字的”应使用形容词“digital”，例如“digital posters”。另外，地点“stations”前通常使用介词“at”。

× They appear as posters digitals, screens, in carriages, and stations.

✓ They appear as digital posters and screens in carriages and at stations.

表示广告位于车厢内部时使用“in carriages”；表示位于车站时通常使用“at stations”，而不是直接说“and stations”。

× On the one hand, I think advertisements can stimulate the economic growth, but on the other hand, I think it might lead to fraud.

✓ On the one hand, I think advertisements can stimulate economic growth, but on the other hand, I think they might lead to fraud.

“advertisements”是复数名词，因此后面的代词应使用复数“they”，不能使用单数“it”。“economic growth”通常作为不可数概念使用，前面不需要定冠词“the”。

× I prefer those advertisements that with the people that I like on it.

✓ I prefer advertisements that feature people I like.

“those advertisements that with...”中，关系从句缺少谓语动词。可以使用“feature”表示“以某人为特色或由某人出演”。另外，“advertisements”是复数，不能使用单数代词“it”。

× I remember there's a advertisement that I saw when I was a child.

✓ I remember there was an advertisement that I saw when I was a child.

“advertisement”以元音音素开头，所以不定冠词应使用“an”，而不是“a”。由于是在回忆童年时看到的广告，使用过去式“there was”与上下文更一致。

× which is a big poster with one of my best favorite.

✓ which was a big poster featuring one of my favorite celebrities.

“best favorite”不能这样搭配；“favorite”本身已经表示“最喜欢的”，通常不再与“best”连用。原句还缺少名词，补充“celebrities”后意思完整。由于描述的是童年时看到的海报，使用“was”更符合过去时语境。

× When I was a child, I always attracted by those advertisements of underama.

✓ When I was a child, I was always attracted to those advertisements.

“attract”表示“吸引某人”时，如果主语是被吸引的人，应使用被动结构“be attracted”。过去时的被动形式是“was attracted”。固定搭配是“be attracted to something”，所以介词应使用“to”。

× When I was a child, I always attracted by those advertisements of underama.

✓ When I was a child, I was always attracted to those advertisements.

“When I was a child”描述的是过去时间，因此主句也应使用过去时。正确形式是“was attracted”，而不是缺少助动词的“attracted”。

× So every time I saw

✓ So every time I saw them, I wanted to buy the products.

原句以“So every time I saw”结束，条件或时间从句没有主句，意思不完整。使用“every time”引导从句后，需要补充一个完整的主句，例如“I wanted to buy the products”。