广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why. Use present tense and correct nouns. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes. I see many ads because I use free streaming services like YouTube, which require watching ads before videos. As a result, I often encounter several ads during a single viewing session.

建议: Give a direct answer then provide one or two specific details (which ad, what song, how it made you feel). Use past simple and correct adjectives. Keep sentences clear and avoid vague phrases.

示例: Yes. When I was a child a toy commercial impressed me because it had a catchy jingle and colourful characters. The tune stuck in my head and made me excited to ask my parents to buy the toy.

建议: Answer directly, then give a clear reason for not paying attention. Correct grammar and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like 'but' to connect ideas and provide one specific example.

示例: Yes. There are many ads in the subway, on seats and walls, but I usually ignore them because I am busy reading or using my phone. For example, I rarely look at poster ads while commuting to work.

建议: State your opinion clearly, then give a concise reason and one brief example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use present perfect only when necessary; simple present or present perfect continuous can be used correctly.

示例: Not really. I dislike ads because they interrupt videos and I see them too often, which feels annoying. For example, I skip most pre-roll ads on YouTube whenever I can.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence naming the type of ad, then explain why with one specific effect or example. Use appropriate adjectives (catchy, memorable, enjoyable) and avoid vague phrases.

示例: I prefer ads with catchy music because a memorable melody can make the product more appealing. For instance, a commercial with a cheerful jingle often makes me remember the brand longer.

建议: Give a clear past example: say what you bought, which ad persuaded you, and why. Use past tense and two to three concise sentences. Avoid hesitations and fill words.

示例: Yes. When I was a child a TV commercial for a toy car convinced me to ask my parents to buy it because the ad showed colourful lights and fun features. I remember wanting it for weeks after seeing the commercial.

× Yes, of course I watched a lot of advertisement because I used the free YouTube and free your Kitty.

✓ Yes, of course I watched a lot of advertisements because I used free YouTube and Free Kitty.

The sentence uses past tense appropriately but has errors with countable nouns and article/brand names. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' (countable items). 'the free YouTube' is unnatural; drop 'the' and use 'free YouTube'. 'free your Kitty' seems to be a brand/name error — assume 'Free Kitty' as a proper noun and capitalize it. Keep past tense 'watched' since referring to past habit.

× So if I want to watch some video, I have to watch advertisement.

✓ So if I want to watch some videos, I have to watch advertisements.

Countable nouns must match number. 'video' and 'advertisement' are countable and in this general context should be plural: 'some videos' and 'advertisements'. This keeps present tense habit ('want'/'have to').

× Yes, of course, when I was a child I was impressive by advertisement, so each song is very interesting for me and very it makes me feel enjoyable, so I remember that.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a child I was impressed by advertisements; each song was very interesting to me and made me feel happy, so I remember them.

Use past tense 'was impressed' not 'was impressive' (passive with correct participle). 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' for general reference. 'Each song is very interesting for me' should be past tense 'was very interesting to me'. 'very it makes me feel enjoyable' is ungrammatical — revise to 'made me feel happy'. 'I remember that' -> 'I remember them' to refer to the advertisements.

× Yes, of course, in my country there are advertisements, John in the subway and when I take them I always see the advertisement, but I don't focus on them because I usually.

✓ Yes, of course, in my country there are advertisements, especially in the subway, and when I take it I always see advertisements, but I don't focus on them usually.

'John' is likely a typo; replace with 'especially' to make sense. Use 'in the subway' as correct prepositional phrase. 'When I take them' is unclear — 'take it' (a train) or 'when I take the subway' is better; here 'take it' assumes 'the subway' previously mentioned. Use plural 'advertisements'. Place adverb 'usually' after the verb phrase for natural word order.

× Actually no I don't like advertisement because I I have watched a lot of advertisements so I'm tired about them.

✓ Actually no, I don't like advertisements because I have watched a lot of them and I'm tired of them.

Use plural 'advertisements' for countable nouns. 'I I' is repetition; remove extra 'I'. 'tired about them' is incorrect preposition — correct phrase is 'tired of them'. Also combine clauses naturally: 'a lot of them'.

× So if it possible I don't want to see all the time and so.

✓ So if possible, I don't want to see them all the time.

Modal/conditional structure needs 'it is possible' or elliptically 'if possible'. Remove filler 'and so'. Place 'all the time' after the verb phrase. Use 'them' to refer to advertisements.

× Definitely it is a advertisement with a song like CM song Hmm and my heart interesting melody in advertisement.

✓ Definitely I prefer an advertisement with a song, like a commercial jingle, because a catchy melody moves my heart.

'a advertisement' should be 'an advertisement' (article before vowel sound). The original is fragmented; reorganize to convey intended meaning: 'a song' -> 'a commercial jingle'. 'my heart interesting melody' is ungrammatical; use 'a catchy melody moves my heart' or 'I find a catchy melody appealing'.

× It makes me feel funny and enjoyable so.

✓ It makes me feel amused and happy.

'Funny' and 'enjoyable' are awkward in 'feel funny and enjoyable'. Use appropriate adjectives for internal feelings: 'amused' and 'happy'. Drop trailing 'so'.

× Of course, umm, I know I was a child. I saw about, I saw advertisement about toy and then I want to buy it because it looks very interesting.

✓ Of course, when I was a child I saw an advertisement for a toy and then I wanted to buy it because it looked very interesting.

Maintain past tense: 'was', 'saw', 'wanted', 'looked'. Use article 'an advertisement' and preposition 'for' with 'advertisement for a toy'. 'I saw about' is incorrect; say 'I saw an advertisement for a toy'. Ensure verb tense consistency.