广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb forms and pronouns.

示例: Yes. I often see ads on my phone and computer. For example, during online meetings an intrusive pop-up ad sometimes appears and interrupts the discussion, which is very frustrating. Because of that, I usually mute notifications or use an ad blocker.

建议: Finish your answer and be specific. Use past tense consistently and provide a brief explanation why it was memorable. Use linking words to make the sequence clear.

示例: Yes. One childhood ad I remember was for a spice brand. It showed a mother who reunited her scattered family by cooking a special meal with those spices, and the warm family scene made the advertisement very memorable to me.

建议: Keep sentences clear and grammatically correct. Use a topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples (e.g. posters, digital screens). Avoid trailing off and use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

示例: Yes. I see many ads on public transport, especially posters on trains and digital screens at stations. For example, small companies advertise new apps on station billboards, and governments often use buses for public service messages.

建议: Be more balanced and precise. Start with a clear opinion, give a concise reason, and add a brief exception using linking words. Correct collocations (e.g. 'search for' not 'search or Google').

示例: Personally, I don't like most advertisements because they are often intrusive and a waste of time. However, when I'm actively researching a product, ads can be helpful in introducing new options.

建议: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples and where you see them (e.g. Instagram, YouTube). Correct grammar and finish the thought within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer ads for makeup products because I'm interested in beauty trends. For example, I often watch YouTube and Instagram ads that showcase newly launched foundations and palettes, which helps me decide what to try next.

建议: Provide a clearer, more concise answer with correct tense and fewer repetitions. Start with a direct 'Yes' then give one specific example and a short reason why the ad influenced you.

示例: Yes. Recently I bought a product called Mangal Chitra after repeatedly seeing its ads in short social media reels. The attractive presentation and positive reviews in the ad convinced me to try it.

× Yes I have several times I have encounter encountered advertisement on my phone and our computer and it's quite annoying I do not like it when you are in the middle of the meeting and suddenly the advertisem pops up, it's quite annoying and frustrating.

✓ Yes, several times I have encountered advertisements on my phone and our computer, and it's quite annoying. I do not like it when I am in the middle of a meeting and suddenly an advertisement pops up; it's frustrating.

The original sentence misused the past participle: 'have encounter' should be 'have encountered' to form the present perfect. Also plural/singular and article errors: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when referring to multiple instances; 'our computer' is awkward—kept but punctuation and pronoun consistency improved by changing 'you are' to 'I am' to match the speaker. Split into two sentences and added comma/semicolon for clarity. Suggestion: use present perfect with correct past participle (have + past participle) and keep subject consistent within the sentence.

× I still remember there was one ad which has had quite a strong impression on my mind.

✓ I still remember there was one ad that had quite a strong impression on my mind.

The original mixes past simple ('there was') with present perfect ('has had'), which is inconsistent. Use past simple 'had' to match 'I still remember' and the past context. Also 'which' can be replaced by 'that' for restrictive clause. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing a past event.

× It was related to a food so there was a family and the mother used to cook food, but the family wasn't staying together.

✓ It was about a food product, and there was a family whose mother cooked, but the family was not living together.

'Related to a food' is awkward; 'about a food product' is clearer. 'Used to cook' implies a habitual past action but the context is a single ad scene, so simple past 'cooked' or 'whose mother cooked' is better. 'Wasn't staying together' is nonstandard for family living arrangements; use 'was not living together.' Suggestion: choose precise verbs for states (live) and avoid 'used to' unless indicating habitual past.

× But one time she finds really good spices in the market so she prepares

✓ But one time she found some very good spices at the market, so she prepared a meal.

The sentence mixes present tense 'finds' and present 'prepares' in a past narrative. Change verbs to past tense 'found' and 'prepared' to maintain past narration. Also complete the sentence by specifying what she prepared. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when telling a past story.

× Yes, nowadays I think so governments or the small companies are wanting to spread their messages or their products via trade or other medias.

✓ Yes, nowadays I think governments and small companies want to spread their messages or products via trade or other media.

Errors: extraneous 'so' removed; 'governments or the small companies' should be 'governments and small companies' for generalization. 'Are wanting' is incorrect—use stative verb 'want' in present simple. 'Medias' is incorrect plural; correct plural is 'media.' Suggestion: use present simple for states and correct plural forms.

× So most of the time I am seeing the advertisement posted on the train and also there are the boards where you can see the advertisement displayed.

✓ So most of the time I see advertisements posted on trains, and there are also boards where advertisements are displayed.

'I am seeing' is an odd present continuous for habitual action; use present simple 'I see.' Use plural 'advertisements' and 'trains' for general statements. Passive 'are displayed' clarifies how the ads appear. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct plural nouns.

× So when the people are

✓ So when people are commuting, they often see advertisements.

Original fragment 'So when the people are' is incomplete. I completed the thought to match context, specifying 'commuting' and the typical result. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence has subject and verb and completes the idea.

× Personally speaking I do not like advertisement because I feel it's sometimes just a waste of time.

✓ Personally speaking, I do not like advertisements because I feel they're sometimes just a waste of time.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when talking about ads in general. Added contraction 'they're' to match plural. Suggestion: use plural form for general, countable nouns when speaking generally.

× Instead, if it's really necessary we can search or Google and we can find out if particular products, but sometimes you can say it might be helpful to select some form of products.

✓ Instead, if it's really necessary, we can search on Google to find out about particular products; sometimes advertisements can still be helpful when choosing certain products.

The original is wordy and ungrammatical: 'find out if particular products' is incomplete. Rewrote for clarity: 'search on Google' and 'find out about particular products.' Also clarified the second clause to explain when ads might help. Suggestion: break long sentences into clearer clauses and complete intended ideas.

× I love to see the advertisement related to makeup products because I am so much into makeup.

✓ I love to see advertisements related to makeup products because I am very into makeup.

Changed 'the advertisement' to plural 'advertisements' for general preference. 'So much into makeup' is informal but acceptable; 'very into makeup' is slightly more natural here. Preposition 'related to' is okay; no major preposition error. Suggestion: use plural for general preferences and prefer concise adverb phrases.

× I always look for the ads which shows beauty products which are recently launched or sometimes I might see different products on a YouTube as well so I would prefer to see makeup

✓ I always look for ads that show beauty products recently launched, and sometimes I see different products on YouTube as well, so I prefer to watch makeup ads.

'Ads which shows' has subject-verb disagreement: 'ads' (plural) requires 'show' not 'shows' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27 but manifested here as adjective/adverb misuse); changed 'which' to 'that' and reordered 'recently launched' after noun. Removed article 'a' before YouTube. Completed final clause 'prefer to watch makeup ads.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural nouns and use correct articles with platform names.

× Yes, I have bought several products because of the advertisement for instance recently I purchased Mangal Chitra and it was real nice whenever I used to scroll down the reels I was used to see that particular ad so I got tempted towards it and I bought the product.

✓ Yes, I have bought several products because of advertisements. For instance, recently I purchased Mangal Chitra and it was really nice. Whenever I scrolled through reels, I used to see that particular ad, so I was tempted and bought the product.

Mixed tenses and awkward phrasing: separated into sentences for clarity. 'I have bought' (present perfect) is fine for experience; 'because of the advertisement' changed to plural 'advertisements.' 'Real nice' -> 'really nice' (adverb). 'Whenever I used to scroll down the reels I was used to see' incorrectly uses 'used to' twice and mixes forms; changed to 'whenever I scrolled through reels, I used to see' to indicate repeated past action. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, use 'used to' for habitual past in one place and avoid redundant 'used to see.'