广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more concise, correct grammar and word choice, and use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and ensure sentences are complete.

示例: Yes, I see ads on my phone and computer very often, especially on social media and YouTube. They frequently pop up and interrupt videos, which I find quite annoying because they break my concentration.

建议: Correct tense and grammar, use complete sentences, and give a clear specific example with linking words. Explain why the ad impressed you with concrete details.

示例: Yes. When I was a child, I loved bright, colorful TV commercials that featured babies and animated characters. Because the ads showed children playing happily with the toys, I would always ask my parents to buy them, and I remember being drawn to the cheerful music and lively animation.

建议: Fix vocabulary errors (trends -> trains, porters -> posters), use correct articles and plurals, and link the two ideas (why you don't see ads and what you see in the city). Provide one clear example of where ads appear.

示例: Not really, because I live in the countryside and there are very few train services here. However, when I travel to the city I often see many posters and digital ads on station platforms and on the sides of buses.

建议: Improve sentence structure and word choice, use linking contrast words (however/on the other hand), and give a brief specific reason for both liking and disliking ads. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: It depends. I like informative advertisements that clearly explain a product's features because they help me decide quickly. However, I dislike ads that interrupt films or pop up repeatedly, as they break the experience and feel very annoying.

建议: Use correct verbs and vocabulary (prefer, create, viewers), correct article use, and provide a clear, coherent example. Explain briefly why storytelling works (emotion, memorability).

示例: I prefer advertisements that tell a meaningful story because they create an emotional connection with viewers. For example, a motorbike commercial that shows a family on a road trip with a popular singer uses music and narrative to make the product feel memorable.

× Many ask out to play or pop up and interrupt what I'm watching, which I find quite annoying.

✓ Many ads pop up and interrupt what I'm watching, which I find quite annoying.

Error type: sentence structure/word choice. 'Many ask out to play' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'many ads pop up'. Use 'ads' (advertisements) and the phrasal verb 'pop up' with ads. Also keep 'interrupt what I'm watching' as the action. Suggestion: replace incorrect words with 'ads pop up'.

× When I was a child, I love dry, colorful TV commercials that feature babies are animated characters.

✓ When I was a child, I loved bright, colorful TV commercials that featured babies and animated characters.

Error types: tense (present used in past context) and sentence structure/adjective choice. Use past tense 'loved' and 'featured' because the time reference is 'when I was a child'. 'dry' seems wrong; 'bright' fits better. Also change 'are' to 'and' to list 'babies and animated characters'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time reference and use appropriate conjunction.

× Whenever I show those ads, I would ask my parents to buy the toys because.

✓ Whenever I saw those ads, I would ask my parents to buy the toys.

Error types: verb tense and sentence fragment. 'Whenever I show those ads' mixes present with past; use 'saw'. The clause ends with 'because.' which creates an incomplete sentence; remove the dangling 'because' or complete the clause. Suggestion: keep past tense and avoid leaving 'because' without a conclusion.

× The ads make them look so fun and.

✓ The ads made the toys look so fun.

Error: sentence fragment and tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'made' to match 'when I was a child' and finish the thought by specifying 'the toys'. Remove the dangling 'and'. Suggestion: complete the idea and maintain consistent tense.

× I don't see much advertising on trends or other public transport because I live in the countryside and there are very few train service here.

✓ I don't see much advertising on trains or other public transport because I live in the countryside and there are very few train services here.

Errors: wrong word 'trends' should be 'trains' and noun number agreement 'train service' -> 'train services' or 'train service' with 'is'. Maintain plural 'services' to agree with 'very few'. Suggestion: correct spelling and use plural for countable noun.

× When I do travel to the city I see lots of porters are digital ads in station and on buses.

✓ When I travel to the city, I see lots of posters and digital ads in stations and on buses.

Errors: word choice and sentence structure. 'Porters' should be 'posters'; 'are' is extraneous; 'in station' should be 'in stations'. Also 'When I do travel' is acceptable but 'When I travel' is more natural. Suggestion: correct spelling and plural forms, remove unnecessary words.

× I like informative act that really explain a product feature because they save me time when I'm deciding what to buy.

✓ I like informative ads that really explain a product's features because they save me time when I'm deciding what to buy.

Errors: wrong word 'act' -> 'ads'; subject-verb agreement: 'ads that really explain' is fine; use possessive 'product's features' or plural 'product features'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'ads' and adjust noun phrasing for clarity.

× On the other hand, I dislike it that interrupt films or pop up over time because they feel make me feel annoying.

✓ On the other hand, I dislike ads that interrupt films or pop up during them because they make me feel annoyed.

Errors: pronoun and phrase misuse. 'I dislike it that interrupt films' should be 'I dislike ads that interrupt films'. 'pop up over time' is awkward; use 'pop up during them'. 'they feel make me feel annoying' is incorrect; change to 'they make me feel annoyed'. Suggestion: clearly identify the subject 'ads' and use correct verb structures and adjective/adverb ('annoyed' describes feelings).

× Well, I refer advertisements that tell a meaningful story because they react an emotional connection with the fewer.

✓ Well, I prefer advertisements that tell a meaningful story because they create an emotional connection with the viewer.

Errors: wrong verb 'refer' -> 'prefer'; 'react' -> 'create'; 'the fewer' is incorrect, should be 'the viewer' or 'the audience'. Suggestion: use correct verb and noun forms and target 'viewer' for singular audience member.

× For example, I like a motorbike at showing a family going on a road trip with the famous singer Raven.

✓ For example, I like a motorbike ad showing a family going on a road trip with the famous singer Raven.

Errors: 'motorbike at' should be 'motorbike ad'; sentence structure slightly awkward. Suggestion: use 'ad' for advertisement and place modifiers correctly.

× Story and the music make the product feel memorable.

✓ The story and the music make the product feel memorable.

Error: missing article 'The' before 'story' makes sentence feel incomplete. Subject-verb agreement 'make' is correct for plural subject. Suggestion: add 'the' to clarify and improve naturalness.