广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what the song said, visuals, or why it stuck with you). Reduce hesitations (“umm”) and avoid redundant phrases. Use a linking word to connect the topic sentence and supporting detail.

示例: A soap commercial left a strong impression on me as a child. The advert featured a catchy jingle and colorful dancing children, which made it memorable. Because the music was so infectious, I still remember the tune years later.

建议: Answer directly and add one clear specific example with a linking word. Avoid repetition of words like “like” and cut off trailing sentences. Mention frequency or where exactly you see ads (interior, sides of buses) to add detail.

示例: My country does not have trains, but I often see many advertisements on buses and taxis. For example, bus exteriors frequently carry ads for soap and paint brands, while taxi roofs sometimes display phone service promotions.

建议: Provide a clearer opinion with one or two concise reasons and avoid fillers. Use linking words (because, especially) and specific effects of ads (inform, compare prices, discover new products) to make your answer stronger.

示例: Yes, I like advertisements because they inform consumers about new products and help people compare prices. For example, a short TV ad once introduced me to a useful kitchen gadget that I later bought after seeing a review online.

建议: State your preference clearly and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Remove hesitations and ambiguous phrases like “in the hall.” Explain where you expect to see more food ads (TV, online, billboards) to be specific.

示例: I prefer food advertisements because I enjoy trying new dishes and brands. For instance, I often watch short recipe ads on social media that introduce new snacks, and I would like to see more of those on TV and billboards.

建议: Give a clear, accurate frequency and avoid confused numbers. Use linking words to explain why you see many ads (free apps, targeted marketing) and give one concrete example of the type of ads and platform (social media, websites, video streaming).

示例: Yes, I see advertisements very often on my phone and computer, usually several times a day on social media and free video apps. For example, I typically encounter sponsored posts for clothing on Instagram and short video ads on YouTube two or three times each day.

× When I was a child, an advertisement that made an impression on me was a soap brand.

✓ When I was a child, an advertisement that made an impression on me was for a soap brand.

The sentence needs the preposition 'for' to show the advertisement was promoting the soap brand; this is a past-tense statement and otherwise correct. Use 'for' to link 'advertisement' and the product it advertises.

× I just remember watching from my television their song that they released.

✓ I just remember watching their song on television.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'television' and place 'their song' before the medium for natural word order. 'Watching from my television' is awkward; 'on television' is the correct collocation. Also 'that they released' is redundant after 'their song' and can be omitted for conciseness.

× It was very entertaining and eye-catching and that is what I remember.

✓ It was very entertaining and eye-catching, and that is what I remember.

Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses for correct punctuation. The adjective choice is fine.

× Since my country does not have trains, I do see a lot of advertisements on other transports like bus or even taxi.

✓ Since my country does not have trains, I do see a lot of advertisements on other forms of transport like buses and even taxis.

Use plural nouns 'buses' and 'taxis' when speaking generally. 'Other transports' is unidiomatic; 'other forms of transport' or 'other transport' is preferable. This preserves present-tense general statement.

× I see advertisements umm like brands like soap, like paint brands and.

✓ I see advertisements for brands like soap and paint.

Remove filler 'umm' and redundant 'like' repetitions; use 'for brands like soap and paint' for clear and concise structure. End the sentence fully rather than trailing off.

× I do like advertisements.

✓ I like advertisements.

'I do like' is grammatical but unnecessarily emphatic; simpler present simple 'I like advertisements' fits the question and conversational tone better.

× I think it not only helps the company or businesses, but it's also, umm, helps like people who are like wanting to buy something and it suddenly appears and it is like something that is useful.

✓ I think it not only helps companies or businesses, but it also helps people who want to buy something by showing products that might be useful.

Remove redundant fillers 'umm' and repeated 'like'. Change 'it not only helps' to pair with 'but it also helps' for parallelism. Use 'people who want' (correct verb form) instead of 'people who are like wanting'. Rephrase 'it suddenly appears' to a clearer idea 'by showing products'.

× I think I like umm, food advertisements.

✓ I think I like food advertisements.

Remove filler 'umm' for clarity. Pronoun use is fine otherwise.

× I like food, so I wanna discover new foods and also I think that is there is not much food advertisements in the hall and I hope to see more.

✓ I like food, so I want to discover new dishes, and I think there are not many food advertisements in the mall; I hope to see more.

Replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to'. Use 'dishes' or 'food items' instead of 'foods'. Correct 'there is not much' to 'there are not many' because 'advertisements' is countable plural. 'Hall' likely meant 'mall'—use context-appropriate word. Split into two clauses for clarity.

× I do see a lot of advertisements often, and these days where people usually rely on these advertisements, I typically see, uh, ads athletes once or like more than, like less than 10 times or more than five times a day.

✓ I often see a lot of advertisements, and these days people usually rely on them; I typically see ads several times a day, sometimes five to ten times.

Remove filler 'uh' and unclear phrase 'ads athletes'. Use 'often see a lot of advertisements' for present habitual tense. Clarify frequency with 'several times a day, sometimes five to ten times' instead of contradictory 'more than, like less than 10 times or more than five times'.