休息— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và chính xác ngữ pháp: sửa lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc (ví dụ “their supermarket”, “to realize”, “brushing”), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tối đa 3–4 câu. Thêm liên từ hợp lý nếu mở rộng (e.g., “and”, “so”). Nên nêu rõ địa điểm, lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể.

示例: Lately I often go to the nearby shopping mall to relax because I enjoy treating myself. I usually browse the shops and sometimes buy small gifts or clothes. Shopping like this feels like a form of retail therapy and helps me unwind.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu — sinh viên không trả lời câu hỏi. Cần trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề (ai đó) và sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ (tại sao hoặc hoạt động cùng nhau). Tránh đưa nhận xét hay phân tích thay vì trả lời.

示例: I usually relax with my close friends because we feel comfortable talking and laughing together. For example, we often go for coffee or take a walk in the park, which helps me forget about stress.

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật từ: sửa lỗi cấu trúc như “calm me down”, “lift my mood”, “when I’m upset”, và sắp xếp các mệnh đề rõ ràng. Giữ ngắn gọn (2–3 câu) và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g., “soothe”, “lift my mood”, “playlist”).

示例: Yes, I find listening to music very relaxing because it calms me down and lifts my mood when I'm upset. For instance, after a stressful day I play an acoustic playlist which soothes me and helps me unwind.

建议: Sắp xếp lại ý theo cấu trúc rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu vài hoạt động thư giãn, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn lý do dùng linking words như “because” hoặc “for example”. Loại bỏ tiếng lấp đầy (umm) và lỗi từ vựng (“confess” → “share”, “modern books worlds” → “the world of books”).

示例: To relax, I usually read books or spend time with my family and friends because reading lets me escape into different stories and company helps me talk through my worries. For example, I might read a novel in the evening or meet a friend for coffee to discuss my problems and find practical solutions.

× Recently I've been going to their supermarket to realize because I enjoy brushing or and treating myself.

✓ Recently I've been going to the supermarket to relax because I enjoy browsing and treating myself.

The verb 'realize' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'relax'. 'Brushing' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'browsing' (looking at items). Also 'their supermarket' is unnatural without context; 'the supermarket' is better. Use gerund forms 'going', 'browsing', 'treating' correctly. Suggestion: Use 'relax' instead of 'realize' and 'browse' instead of 'brush' to convey leisure shopping.

× Sometimes I window shop or pick up small gifts or clothes for myself and my relatives, which feels like a kind of retail therapy.

✓ Sometimes I window-shop or pick up small gifts or clothes for myself and my relatives, which feels like a kind of retail therapy.

'Window shop' should be hyphenated as a compound verb when used in this form and remains in the base/gerund form 'window-shop' or 'window shop'. The original sentence is largely correct; the minor punctuation/compound form improves readability. Suggestion: Keep consistent verb forms and consider hyphenating compound verbs like 'window-shop'.

× Of course, listening to music is great way to relax because you can calm me down or leave my mood when I upset.

✓ Of course, listening to music is a great way to relax because it can calm me down or lift my mood when I'm upset.

Missing article 'a' before 'great way'. Pronoun misuse: 'you can calm me down' should be 'it can calm me down' because 'listening to music' (a thing) is the subject. 'Leave my mood' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'lift' to mean improve mood. Also need 'I'm upset' for correct clause. Suggestion: Use appropriate subject pronoun 'it' for activities and correct verb collocations such as 'calm someone down' and 'lift someone's mood'.

× For example, after a headache stay I usually play my favorite playlist or some acoustic songs because they soothe my be and have me unwind.

✓ For example, after a headache I usually play my favorite playlist or some acoustic songs because they soothe me and help me unwind.

Phrase order is wrong: 'after a headache stay' is ungrammatical; correct is 'after a headache' or 'when I have a headache'. 'Soothe my be' is incorrect — should be 'soothe me'. 'Have me unwind' is awkward; use 'help me unwind'. Suggestion: Use correct word order and common verb patterns: 'soothe someone' and 'help someone unwind'.

× Are for me are the ways to reach for me to relax is reading books or, or going with my friends or families because at that time, I could reflect umm, myself and also to immerse myself into modern books worlds.

✓ For me, the ways I relax are reading books or going out with my friends or family because then I can reflect on myself and immerse myself in contemporary book worlds.

Original sentence has word order problems and redundant words ('are for me are', 'reach for me'). 'Families' should be 'family' in this context. Tense/verb choice: 'could' should be 'can' to match present habitual action. 'To immerse myself into modern books worlds' has preposition and adjective order issues; use 'immerse myself in contemporary book worlds'. Suggestion: Simplify structure to 'the ways I relax are...' and use correct prepositions ('reflect on', 'immerse in') and singular 'family' when referring to one's relatives collectively.

× Furthermore, going with my friends with me to uh, confess my umm, problems and also umm sometimes.

✓ Furthermore, going with my friends allows me to confide my problems and sometimes find solutions.

Redundant 'with me' after 'going with my friends' is unnecessary. 'Confess my problems' is grammatically possible but 'confide my problems' or 'talk about my problems' is more natural. Sentence fragment 'and also umm sometimes.' incomplete; complete thought as 'and sometimes find solutions.' Suggestion: Remove redundancy, choose natural verbs ('confide' or 'talk about'), and complete the idea.

× 5 by the solutions for my problems.

✓ and sometimes find solutions to my problems.

This fragment '5 by the solutions for my problems' is not grammatical; likely a transcription error. Use 'find solutions to my problems' to express meaning clearly and use conjunction 'and sometimes' to connect with previous sentence. Suggestion: Replace unclear fragments with clear verbs and prepositions: 'find solutions to my problems'.